Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は内容が伝わるが、文法や表現の自然さ、簡潔さに改善の余地があります。まず冒頭で直接「I was working as a nurse until March.」などトピックセンテンスを明確にし、続けて短く理由や状況を述べると良いです。冗長な語句（"I'm too honest"、"like 3 three time different shifts"）は避け、数や期間は一度だけ正確に示しましょう。また、接続詞（"because", "so"）や過去時制の一貫性に注意してください。発音や言い淀み（"Umm"）も減らす練習をしてください。具体的には「When」「Until」「Then」など時を示す語を整理して話す練習を行ってください。

Example: I was working as a nurse at the university hospital until March because I left my job to study English. I worked in the emergency department on three different shifts, which was demanding but rewarding.

Suggestion: 答えは位置情報や説明を含めようとしているが、時制と語順が混乱しています。まず質問に対して直接に現在の勤務状況を答え（"I am not working now" または "I used to work in Sapporo"）、次に場所の説明を短く付け加えましょう。不要な繰り返し（"the amount"など）や不明瞭な語は避け、語彙を正確に使ってください。地理的説明は短いフレーズ（"Sapporo, in Hokkaido, the northern part of Japan"）で十分です。

Example: I don't work at the moment. I used to work in Sapporo, Hokkaido, which is in the northern part of Japan. Sapporo is well known for its heavy snowfall and winter festivals.

Suggestion: 回答は論理的で理由も述べており良いですが、表現をより自然に整理するとさらに良くなります。例えば「It depends on the department.」の後に具体例として自分の経験を述べ、その後にコネクティブワード（"however", "but"）で対比を示すと流れが良くなります。"regardless of each gender"は不自然なので "regardless of gender" としましょう。また "a teamwork" は不可算名詞なので "teamwork" と言います。

Example: It depends on the department. For example, I worked in the emergency room where the workload was heavy, but everyone supported each other regardless of gender, so the teamwork made it a good place to work.

Suggestion: 正直で具体的な理由を述べており好印象ですが、話し方がやや散漫でためらい（"uhm"）が多いです。短く明確な主文を置き、次に理由を述べ、最後にポジティブな要素で締める構成にしましょう。例えば接続詞（"because"、"but"、"however"）を意識して使い、感情表現も簡潔にしてください。

Example: At first I didn't like it because the emergency room can be very stressful due to serious cases. However, the strong teamwork there helped me a lot and made the job more bearable.

Suggestion: 将来の計画は述べられているが、表現の重複や確信の弱さ（複数の "I think"）が目立ちます。計画は明確かつ自信を持って述べ、時制や語順を整理しましょう。例えばまず将来の大枠を言い、次に具体的なステップ（"I plan to"、"I will"）を順序立てて述べます。地名表現は "in Ireland" や "on the island" の使い分けにも注意してください（通常は "in Ireland"）。

Example: I plan to continue working as a nurse, but I intend to move to Ireland to register as a nurse there. After gaining registration, I hope to work in an emergency department in Ireland.

× I'm too honest, I wasn't working until this March in order to study here in English.

✓ I'm actually a student; I wasn't working until this March because I wanted to study English here.

'I'm too honest' is unnatural here; speaker likely meant 'actually'. Use present simple 'I'm' for current status. 'in order to study here in English' is wordy; 'because I wanted to study English here' fits meaning and tense consistency.

× I quit my job then.

✓ I quit my job then.

Sentence is grammatically correct; past simple 'quit' correctly indicates a completed action in the past. No change needed.

× Umm, I was working as a nurse in the emergency room in the University Hospital.

✓ I was working as a nurse in the emergency room at the University Hospital.

Use preposition 'at' for workplaces or institutions. Past progressive 'was working' is appropriate for describing past employment.

× I worked like 3 three time different shifts.

✓ I worked three different shifts.

Remove redundant words 'like' and duplicate '3 three'. Use cardinal 'three' and correct noun order 'three different shifts'.

× Umm, I wasn't.

✓ Umm, I wasn't working.

Reply lacks object; 'I wasn't' is incomplete without a verb complement. Adding 'working' clarifies the meaning.

× I wasn't working as a nurse in Sapporo in Hokkaido which is located north part of Japan.

✓ I wasn't working as a nurse in Sapporo, Hokkaido, which is located in the northern part of Japan.

Add commas for apposition, include 'in' before 'the northern part' and use adjective 'northern'. Also 'Sapporo, Hokkaido' is a clearer place reference.

× The city is famous for snow and it's fixtures.

✓ The city is famous for its snow and its festivals.

Use possessive 'its' not 'it's' (contraction). 'Fixtures' is incorrect word choice; likely 'festivals' or 'scenery'. Use parallel possessive form.

× Or the amount, the abundant amount of this amount.

✓ It also has a large amount of snowfall.

Original is repetitive and unclear. Use concise noun phrase 'a large amount of snowfall' to convey abundance.

× I think it depends on the department.

✓ I think it depends on the department.

This sentence is correct: 'depends' agrees with 'it'. No change needed.

× I worked in an emergency room, which was generally balanced department, so we helped each other regardless of each gender.

✓ I worked in an emergency room, which was generally a balanced department, so we helped each other regardless of gender.

Add article 'a' before 'balanced department'. 'Each gender' is unnatural; use 'gender' without 'each'.

× Yeah, the workload was very heavy, but a teamwork made it a good place to work.

✓ Yeah, the workload was very heavy, but teamwork made it a good place to work.

Don't use the indefinite article with uncountable noun 'teamwork'. Remove 'a'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Did you like the place where you worked?

Examiner's question in transcript likely asks past preference. If asking about past job, use past tense 'did you like' and past 'worked'. If asking present, 'Do you like the place where you work?' would be correct.

× To be honest, at first I didn't like my workplace because in the emergency room we have to, uh, take care of serious problems, so the atmosphere was sometimes stressful.

✓ To be honest, at first I didn't like my workplace because in the emergency room we had to deal with serious problems, so the atmosphere was sometimes stressful.

Maintain past tense 'had to' and 'deal with' rather than present 'have to' to match 'didn't like'.

× Umm, but always teamwork helped me a lot.

✓ Umm, but teamwork always helped me a lot.

Remove 'a' before 'teamwork' (uncountable). Move adverb 'always' to natural position before verb.

× I think I'm going to continue to work as a nurse.

✓ I think I'm going to continue working as a nurse.

Both forms are acceptable; 'continue working' is more natural than 'continue to work' in spoken English.

× However I actually I intend to go to Ireland to register an official nurse.

✓ However, I actually intend to go to Ireland to register as an official nurse.

Remove repeated 'I', add comma after 'However', and use 'register as an official nurse' to indicate becoming registered.

× So I think I will be able to become a nurse in emergency room in the island, I think.

✓ So I think I will be able to work as a nurse in an emergency room on the island.

Use 'work as a nurse' or 'become registered nurse'. Add article 'an' before 'emergency room' and use preposition 'on' for island. Remove redundant ending 'I think'.