Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and unnecessary repetition. Use correct articles and verb forms (e.g., “a multinational pharmaceutical company,” “I handle a lot of data and prepare financial reports”).

Example: I work full-time as a management accountant at a multinational pharmaceutical company. I enjoy it because I regularly analyze large datasets and prepare monthly financial reports, which helps me improve my analytical skills.

Suggestion: Give a direct, coherent description with correct grammar and specific details. Use linking words to organize the information and avoid vague phrasing. Mention the company type, main products, and your department or location if relevant.

Example: I work for a multinational pharmaceutical and healthcare company that primarily sells medicines to patients. In addition to pharmaceuticals, the company also manufactures some electronic health devices; I work in the finance department at their regional office.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then support with two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and reduce repetitive 'also' use. Provide concrete examples of the environment or development opportunities.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to work because the company provides a supportive work environment and competitive salaries. Moreover, it offers regular training programs and clear career progression paths, which help employees develop professionally.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and make the answer more fluent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points linked with connectors (e.g., 'first,' 'also'). Use more natural phrasing for cooperation and problem-solving.

Example: Definitely. First, it is within walking distance from my apartment, which makes my commute easy. Also, my colleagues are very helpful and we collaborate effectively to solve problems quickly, so I find the work environment pleasant.

Suggestion: Be specific about which skills you want to learn and how AI tools will be used. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use a topic sentence followed by two detailed, linked points (skills and application).

Example: In the future, I plan to develop advanced financial modeling and data-analysis skills to improve decision-making. Specifically, I want to learn how to apply AI tools for automated reporting and forecasting, which will increase efficiency and reduce manual errors.

× Currently I work full time as a management accountant in multinational pharmaceutical company.

✓ Currently I work full time as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'multinational pharmaceutical company'. Use 'a' to refer to a singular, countable noun that is not specific. Suggestion: include 'a' before 'multinational pharmaceutical company'.

× I really enjoy it because in my daily work I handle with a lot of data and financial report.

✓ I really enjoy it because in my daily work I handle a lot of data and financial reports.

'Handle with' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'handle' followed directly by the object. 'Financial report' should be plural 'financial reports' to match 'a lot of data'. Suggestion: remove 'with' and pluralize 'report' to 'reports'.

× I also need to.

✓ I also need to improve my skills.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear object or verb phrase. It should state what the student needs to do. Suggestion: complete the sentence with a clear verb phrase, for example 'need to improve my skills'.

× I work in the multinational pharmaceutical company which mainly sold the medicine to the patient such as the it's like the healthcare company and also have the electronic products sold in my company.

✓ I work in a multinational pharmaceutical company that mainly sells medicine to patients; it is a healthcare company and also sells electronic products.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' (Article errors), incorrect relative pronoun and verb tense ('which mainly sold' should be 'that mainly sells' to describe a current activity), singular/plural and article errors ('the patient' -> 'patients'), awkward phrasing ('such as the it's like the healthcare company') corrected to 'it is a healthcare company', and verb agreement 'have the electronic products sold' simplified to 'also sells electronic products'. Suggestion: use 'that' for defining clauses, present simple 'sells' for habitual actions, plural 'patients', and restructure the sentence for clarity.

× Definitely in my current company, it also provide the great environment for us and also give the considerable salary and also give more space for employee to develop in the future.

✓ Definitely, my current company also provides a great environment for us, pays a considerable salary, and gives employees more opportunities to develop in the future.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it also provide' should be 'it also provides'. Article and noun number errors: 'the great environment' -> 'a great environment'; 'give the considerable salary' -> 'pays a considerable salary'; 'employee' -> plural 'employees'. Parallel structure improved by using consistent verbs. Suggestion: ensure verb forms agree with the subject and use plural nouns where appropriate.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

While grammatically the original is understandable, 'Would you like' implies preference for future or conditional; the interviewer likely asks a current opinion, so 'Do you like' is more appropriate. No article change needed. Suggestion: use 'Do you like' for present preference questions.

× Uh, definitely, uh, first of all, it's close to my apartment, within walking distance.

✓ Definitely. First of all, it's close to my apartment; it's within walking distance.

The original contains filler 'uh' and a comma splice. Splitting into two sentences or using a semicolon improves clarity. Suggestion: remove filler words and separate clauses for clarity.

× And beside that, in my workplace, the colleagues usually help with each other and to resolve the issue in time.

✓ Also, at my workplace, colleagues usually help each other and resolve issues in time.

'Beside' should be 'besides' or 'also'; 'in my workplace' is better as 'at my workplace'; 'help with each other' is incorrect—use 'help each other'; 'to resolve the issue in time' should be 'resolve issues in time' for natural phrasing and pluralization. Suggestion: use 'help each other' and pluralize 'issues' when speaking generally.

× I think it's a good environment.

✓ I think it's a good environment.

This sentence is correct in present tense and fits the context. No change needed. Suggestion: none.

× In the future, I would like to learn more professional skills on my current work and to use the AI tools to help me make it more efficient.

✓ In the future, I would like to learn more professional skills for my current work and use AI tools to help me make it more efficient.

Preposition 'on' is incorrect here; use 'for my current work'. Parallel structure: remove unnecessary 'to' before 'use'. 'The AI tools' can be 'AI tools' (no article needed). Suggestion: use 'for' with 'skills' and keep parallel verb forms.

× And besides that, I also would like to learn more skills to benefit my work.

✓ Besides that, I would also like to learn more skills to benefit my work.

Minor word order issue: 'I also would like' is acceptable but more natural is 'I would also like'. Remove leading 'And'. Suggestion: use smoother word order: 'I would also like'.