Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a concise direct topic sentence, correct minor grammar and capitalization, and add one specific detail about your role using a linking word. Aim for 1–3 sentences only.

Example: I'm currently a social worker at a social welfare center for people with disabilities. In my role, I coordinate support services and run community activities to help clients develop daily living skills.

Suggestion: Start with a direct location sentence, fix word order and articles, and add one specific detail (e.g., nearby landmark or commute) using a linking word to make it natural.

Example: I work in Solar City, which is in the western part of Seoul. It's near a large subway station, so my commute is about 30 minutes by train.

Suggestion: Answer directly then explain briefly with clearer phrasing and linkers; avoid repetition. Mention a specific challenge and a consequence to make your point concrete.

Example: It has some good aspects, but work-life balance is difficult for me. Because I have two young children, I often struggle to finish work on time and care for them in the evenings.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, avoid hesitations, and support it with one brief reason using a linking word. Be specific about what you like or dislike.

Example: Overall, I don't really like it, although it's acceptable. For example, the workload is heavy and there is little flexibility, which makes it hard to manage family responsibilities.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about your goal, then add a specific plan and timeline using linking words. Correct grammar (article use and verb forms) and avoid repetition.

Example: I plan to work abroad as a social worker in the next few years. Therefore, I study English every night and am also taking an international social work course to improve my qualifications.

× I'm working now in social welfare Center for people with disabilities.

✓ I'm working now at a social welfare center for people with disabilities.

Use of preposition and article is incorrect. 'in' is less natural here; 'at' is used for workplaces. 'Center' should be lowercase and needs an article 'a' because it is a nonspecific countable noun. Improve by saying 'at a social welfare center'.

× I'm a social worker.

✓ I'm a social worker.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It uses the indefinite article 'a' appropriately before the profession.

× I'm working in Solar City.

✓ I work in Solar City.

Present continuous 'I'm working' suggests a temporary action; when describing regular employment, simple present 'I work' is more natural. Keep 'in' if Solar City is a district/place, or use 'at' if it's a company.

× It is located western part of Seoul.

✓ It is located in the western part of Seoul.

Preposition 'in' is required before location phrases and the adjective 'western' needs the article 'the' when specifying a part of a place: 'in the western part of Seoul'.

× Yes, I think it's not bad, but actually I have two children, so it's too difficult to get a balance, work life balance.

✓ Yes, I think it's not bad, but actually I have two children, so it's too difficult to get a work-life balance.

Redundant and awkward phrasing. 'Get a balance' is unnatural; the fixed expression is 'work-life balance'. Use hyphens and place the article 'a' before it. Remove the comma splice and keep one clear phrase.

× Before I mentioned it's not bad but I re. I don't really like but it's OK.

✓ Earlier I mentioned it's not bad, but I don't really like it; it's okay.

Original is fragmented and contains typos ('re'). Combine ideas into coherent sentences. Use 'Earlier' instead of 'Before', include the object 'it' after 'like', and separate clauses with proper punctuation.

× I want to work abroad as social worker, so nowadays I study English every night for working abroad.

✓ I want to work abroad as a social worker, so nowadays I study English every night to prepare for working abroad.

Missing article before 'social worker' ('a social worker'). The phrase 'for working abroad' is awkward; use 'to prepare for working abroad' or 'to prepare for working abroad as a social worker'. Also 'nowadays' is acceptable but ensure parallel structure: 'I study English every night to prepare'.