Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, then give concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g., "emergency world"); use precise terms like "emergency department". Correct grammar (e.g., "patients who have accidents" → "patients who have had accidents") and reduce redundancy. Keep answer to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I work part-time as a civil servant in the emergency department of a hospital. My main duties are measuring patients' height and weight, checking their vital signs, and triaging people who arrive after accidents.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct statement of location, use correct verbs ("I work at" not "I walk"), and avoid repetition. Provide one or two concise supporting details using linking words for coherence. Use proper hospital name format and region if necessary.

Example: I work at Tartly General Hospital, which is run by the Ministry of Health in the Aseel region of Saudi Arabia. Specifically, I work in the emergency department, where I measure patients' height and weight and check their vital signs before triage.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons. Avoid vague or repetitive language and fix grammar (e.g., "it makes you learn more", "helps me understand people's interactions"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to organise points.

Example: Yes, it is a great place to work because it offers many learning opportunities and practical experience in nursing. For example, I regularly encounter different types of patients, which helps me improve my clinical skills and understand how people interact in stressful situations.

Suggestion: This answer is generally good but can be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Correct grammar ("helps me" not "help me") and use linking words like "for example" or "also" sparingly.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy working there because it exposes me to many different situations. For example, I gain practical nursing experience and learn how to communicate effectively with patients, which improves my patient care skills.

Suggestion: Give a clearer, well-structured answer: state specific plans, use linking words ("firstly", "also", "in the future"), and correct grammar and collocations ("I would like", "evening shifts", "support my children's schooling"). Avoid unnecessary personal detail unless relevant, and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Example: I have several plans for the future. First, I would like to work evening shifts so I can earn money to support my children's schooling; additionally, working later allows me to manage household responsibilities and care for my family.

× I am a part-time civil servant.

✓ I am a part-time civil servant.

No change needed; sentence is correct. It uses the verb 'am' correctly as present of 'be' and contains no past participle error.

× I work in emergency world.

✓ I work in the emergency department.

The phrase 'emergency world' is incorrect and unclear. Use the preposition 'in' with a noun phrase that exists in English: 'the emergency department' or 'the emergency ward.' Also add the definite article 'the' as this refers to a specific department.

× My work comprises of thinking of people, vital signs, checking of height and weight.

✓ My work comprises assessing people's vital signs and measuring height and weight.

'Comprises of' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'comprise' or use 'consists of.' Also 'thinking of people' is unclear; use 'assessing people' or 'assessing people's vital signs.' Use gerund forms correctly ('measuring') and possessive 'people's.'

× Sometimes I do receive patients who has accidents.

✓ Sometimes I receive patients who have had accidents.

Subject-verb agreement: 'patients' is plural so the relative clause must use 'have' not 'has.' Also 'do receive' is unnecessary; simple present 'receive' is natural. For past events 'who have had accidents' or 'who are in accidents' is better.

× I will first of all triage them.

✓ First of all, I triage them.

In descriptions of routine duties use the simple present ('I triage them') rather than future 'I will.' If referring to a specific future action, 'I will triage them' is acceptable, but here routines require present tense.

× I walk. I walk in one of the Ministry of Health hospitals known as Tartly General Hospital, Aseel Region, Saudi Arabia.

✓ I work in one of the Ministry of Health hospitals, called Tartly General Hospital, Aseel Region, Saudi Arabia.

'I walk' is incorrect verb choice; use 'I work.' Use 'called' or 'known as' with commas. Keep 'in' for location. Remove repetition.

× I work in emergency departments.

✓ I work in the emergency department.

If the speaker works in a single department at that hospital, use singular with the definite article: 'the emergency department.' If they work across multiple departments, use plural without 'the.' Context suggests a single emergency department.

× I always like checking, uh.

✓ I always like checking patients' vital signs.

The original is incomplete and informal. Provide the object of 'checking' and remove filler 'uh.' Use a complete noun phrase: 'patients' vital signs.'

× My job comprises of measuring height and weight, checking patient vital signs and triaging people who arrive.

✓ My job comprises measuring height and weight, checking patients' vital signs, and triaging arriving people.

'Comprises of' is incorrect; use 'comprises' without 'of' or 'consists of.' Use possessive 'patients' and parallel structure with commas. 'Arriving people' or 'people who arrive' both work; keep consistency.

× Yet certainly General Hospital is a very wonderful place to work, at least it will make you to learn more and to be exposed in your career field.

✓ Certainly, Tartly General Hospital is a wonderful place to work; it helps you learn more and gain exposure in your career field.

Remove 'Yet' which is awkward. Add the hospital name if needed. 'Make you to learn' is incorrect; use 'helps you learn' or 'allows you to learn.' 'Be exposed' should be 'gain exposure.' Use simple present to describe general truth.

× Especially in my nursing profession, it gives you more knowledge and equally help me to know more about people, their interaction, the way people inter.

✓ Especially in my nursing profession, it gives me more knowledge and helps me learn about people, their interactions, and how they behave.

Pronoun consistency: speaker should use 'me' not 'you.' Verb agreement: 'gives me' requires 'helps me' (adds 's'). 'Inter' is incomplete; use 'interact' or 'behave.' Use plural 'interactions.'

× Yeah, I love the place that I'm working because it exposes me to different aspects of life.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work because it exposes me to different aspects of life.

Use 'where I work' or 'that I work at' rather than 'that I'm working.' Present simple fits habitual situation. 'Yeah' -> 'Yes' for formality.

× For example, it provides a lot of learning opportunities and practical experience for nurses, and it equally help me to know how to interact with patients and understand patient care.

✓ For example, it provides many learning opportunities and practical experience for nurses, and it also helps me learn how to interact with patients and understand patient care.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'helps' not 'help.' Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for formality. Remove 'to' after 'helps me' and use parallel infinitive 'learn how to.'

× I have so many plans about my future.

✓ I have many plans for my future.

Use 'for my future' rather than 'about my future.' 'So many' is informal; 'many' is sufficient. Present simple 'I have' is correct.

× Firstly I like working in the evening shifts.

✓ Firstly, I would like to work the evening shift.

To express preference for future or plan, use 'would like to work' rather than 'like working.' Also 'evening shifts' -> 'the evening shift' or 'evening shifts' depending on meaning; 'the evening shift' is clearer. Add comma after 'Firstly.'

× At least I can be able to use money to prepare my children to school.

✓ I will be able to use the money to prepare my children for school.

'Can be able to' is redundant. Use 'will be able to' for future ability or 'can use' for general ability. 'Prepare my children to school' is incorrect; use 'prepare my children for school.' Include 'the' before 'money' if referring to earnings.

× Then night I can be able to do my how my work as a wife, taking care of my husband and arranging the house.

✓ At night I can take care of my duties as a wife, such as looking after my husband and managing the household.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy. Remove 'can be able to' redundancy and 'do my how my work.' Use 'duties as a wife' and clearer verbs 'looking after' and 'managing the household.' Use time phrase 'At night.'