Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh viết hoa không cần thiết giữa câu. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói "I work as a primary school teacher."

Example: I work as a primary school teacher.

Suggestion: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh từ viết tắt không rõ nghĩa như "UMM". Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói "I work at a primary school in a remote rural area, where I teach children basic math and spelling, and sometimes organize extracurricular activities."

Example: I work at a primary school in a remote rural area, where I teach children basic math and spelling, and sometimes organize extracurricular activities.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ. Ví dụ, "good children" nên là "well-behaved children" và "enjoy provide" nên là "enjoy providing". Hãy tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác và nói rõ ràng hơn.

Example: Absolutely yes, because the children are well-behaved and they like me. I really enjoy providing knowledge to the new generation.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ "coworker is treat me" nên là "my coworkers treat me" và "well behaved student" nên là "well-behaved students". Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn.

Example: Yes, I really love my primary school because my coworkers treat me like family and the children always love me. They are well-behaved students.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, tránh lỗi như "keep teaching the student" (nên là "students"), "in this place has so much advantage" (nên là "this place has many advantages"), và tránh từ không rõ nghĩa như "Dr.". Ví dụ: "I plan to continue teaching at this school because it has many advantages, and the students are well-behaved and kind."

Example: I plan to continue teaching at this school because it has many advantages, and the students are well-behaved and kind.

× I work as a teacher, My position is a primary school teacher.

✓ I work as a teacher. My position is a primary school teacher.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with two independent clauses joined incorrectly by a comma. It should be separated into two sentences or joined with a conjunction to improve clarity and correctness.

× My job is about teaching children how to solve some simple math and teaching them spell and sometimes organize extracurricular UMM for them.

✓ My job is about teaching children how to solve some simple math problems, teaching them spelling, and sometimes organizing extracurricular activities for them.

The phrase 'teaching them spell' is incorrect; it should be 'teaching them spelling'. Also, 'organize extracurricular UMM' is unclear and likely a typo; it should be 'organizing extracurricular activities'. The verb forms need to be parallel and correct.

× Absolutely yes, because they are a good children, they are good behaved and they love me too.

✓ Absolutely yes, because they are good children, they are well behaved, and they love me too.

The pronoun 'they' refers to 'children' which is plural, so 'a good children' is incorrect; 'children' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'good behaved' should be 'well behaved' as 'behaved' is an adjective modified by an adverb.

× So uh, I really enjoy provide knowledge to the new generation.

✓ So uh, I really enjoy providing knowledge to the new generation.

After the verb 'enjoy', the gerund form (-ing) of the verb should be used. Therefore, 'provide' should be changed to 'providing'.

× Yes, I really love my primary school because my coworker is treat me like the family and the children always love me.

✓ Yes, I really love my primary school because my coworkers treat me like family and the children always love me.

'Coworker' is singular but the context suggests plural, so it should be 'coworkers'. Also, 'is treat' is incorrect; it should be 'treat' to agree with the plural subject. 'Like the family' should be 'like family' without 'the'.

× They are well behaved student.

✓ They are well behaved students.

The subject 'They' is plural, so the noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree in number.

× As a primary school teacher in the remote rural area, I think in the future I will keep teaching the student in this school because in this place has so much advantage.

✓ As a primary school teacher in a remote rural area, I think in the future I will keep teaching the students in this school because this place has many advantages.

The phrase 'the student' should be plural 'the students' to match the context. 'In this place has so much advantage' is incorrect; it should be 'this place has many advantages'. Also, 'a remote rural area' is more natural than 'the remote rural area' unless a specific area is known.

× But I think I give it a try for them because they are a well behaved Dr. children and they love me so much.

✓ But I think I will give it a try for them because they are well behaved children and they love me so much.

The phrase 'I give it a try' needs the future tense 'will give' to match the context. 'A well behaved Dr. children' is incorrect; 'children' is plural and should not have 'a' or 'Dr.'. 'Well behaved' should be two words and no 'Dr.' is needed here.