Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Instead of saying 'I am an student doing my bachelors of technology in Computer, Computer Science and Engineering from ABS IT located in Noida,' you can say 'I am currently a student pursuing a Bachelor's degree in Computer Science and Engineering at ABS IT in Noida.' This is more natural and concise.

Example: I am currently a student pursuing a Bachelor's degree in Computer Science and Engineering at ABS IT in Noida.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but incomplete and slightly repetitive. Avoid repeating information unnecessarily. Also, complete your sentences fully. For example, you can say, 'I am currently a student and do not work, but I completed an internship at Reliance Jio.'

Example: I am currently a student and do not work, but I completed an internship at Reliance Jio.

Suggestion: Your answer gives good details but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, 'Yes, it was a good place to work because the corporate park provides a peaceful atmosphere where I could complete my work without disturbance. Moreover, all necessary facilities were available, so I only had to focus on my tasks.'

Example: Yes, it was a good place to work because the corporate park provides a peaceful atmosphere where I could complete my work without disturbance. Moreover, all necessary facilities were available, so I only had to focus on my tasks.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer clearly and avoid unnecessary words. For example, 'Although I am currently a student, based on my past experience, I would like to work at that place in the future because it has all the necessary facilities and a peaceful environment, partly due to its proximity to the police station.'

Example: Although I am currently a student, based on my past experience, I would like to work at that place in the future because it has all the necessary facilities and a peaceful environment, partly due to its proximity to the police station.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words for clarity. For example, 'In the future, I plan to pursue my master's degree in Germany. I am preparing for this and hope to study either Computer Science and Engineering or Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning, depending on the availability of seats. After completing my master's, I intend to...'

Example: In the future, I plan to pursue my master's degree in Germany. I am preparing for this and hope to study either Computer Science and Engineering or Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning, depending on the availability of seats. After completing my master's, I intend to work in the technology sector.

× I am an student doing my bachelors of technology in Computer, Computer Science and Engineering from ABS IT located in Noida.

✓ I am a student doing my bachelors of technology in Computer Science and Engineering from ABS IT located in Noida.

The article 'an' is incorrectly used before the word 'student' which starts with a consonant sound. The correct article is 'a'. Also, 'Computer, Computer Science and Engineering' is redundant; it should be 'Computer Science and Engineering'.

× As I have told in my previous answer, I don't work.

✓ As I told in my previous answer, I don't work.

The phrase 'have told' is unnecessary here; simple past 'told' is appropriate for referring to a previous statement in conversation.

× I am a student but I worked in Reliance Jio for my internship and the.

✓ I am a student but I worked at Reliance Jio for my internship.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and the.' which is incomplete and incorrect. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to a company for work or internship.

× Reliance, you corporate park provides an atmosphere where you can have peace, You can complete your work without any disturbance.

✓ Reliance's corporate park provides an atmosphere where you can have peace. You can complete your work without any disturbance.

The phrase 'you corporate park' is incorrect; it should be 'Reliance's corporate park' to show possession. Also, the sentence was a run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× You don't need to take tension of anything else you have only you have only have to do work.

✓ You don't need to worry about anything else; you only have to do your work.

The phrase 'take tension of anything else' is incorrect in English; 'worry about anything else' is the correct expression. Also, the sentence was repetitive and needed restructuring.

× Currently I'm a student and not working at any office but from my past experience energy the place I would like to work in future if I got a chance.

✓ Currently, I'm a student and not working at any office, but from my past experience, I would like to work at that place in the future if I get a chance.

The sentence had unclear and incorrect phrases like 'energy the place'. It needed rephrasing for clarity and correct tense usage ('got' to 'get').

× The place has all the facilities which are needed for anyone to do work without any disturbance as the place was also the location of the police.

✓ The place has all the facilities needed for anyone to work without any disturbance, as it is also located near the police station.

The phrase 'the location of the police' is vague; 'located near the police station' is clearer. Also, 'to do work' is better expressed as 'to work'. Commas improve sentence flow.

× In future I'm planning to do my masters from Germany.

✓ In the future, I'm planning to do my masters in Germany.

The phrase 'In future' should be 'In the future'. Also, 'do my masters from Germany' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in Germany'.

× For that I am preparing I want to complete my masters in Compu, either in computer science and engineering or in artificial intelligence and machine learning.

✓ For that, I am preparing. I want to complete my masters in computer science and engineering or in artificial intelligence and machine learning.

The sentence was a run-on and had incomplete words like 'Compu,'. It needed to be split and corrected for clarity and completeness.

× It is based on the availability of the seeds in which course I will get a chance to study.

✓ It depends on the availability of seats in which course I will get a chance to study.

The word 'seeds' is a typo; it should be 'seats'. Also, 'It is based on' is better expressed as 'It depends on' for clarity.