Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to start your answer with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, such as "I am currently a fourth-year pharmacy student at Harshmett University." Then add supporting details. Avoid vague expressions like "it chose me" without explanation, and keep your answer concise and natural.

Example: I am currently a fourth-year pharmacy student at Harshmett University. I chose this field because I am passionate about helping people with their health. Studying pharmacy has been a rewarding experience so far.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, start with a direct response like "I am currently an intern at King Hussein Hospital in Amman." Then add specific details about your role or the hospital. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I am currently an intern at King Hussein Hospital in Amman. This hospital specializes in helping cancer patients, and I assist in the pharmacy department to support their treatment plans.

Suggestion: Your answer is positive and detailed, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas. Be more specific about what makes the place good to work.

Example: Yes, I believe it is a good place to work because of its diverse environment. The staff are very supportive, which helps us gain valuable training. Also, we encounter unique medical cases daily, which enhances our learning experience.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats previous points and has some unclear phrases like "taken into counter." Try to be more concise and clear. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid repeating the same information.

Example: Yes, I enjoy working there because we handle special cases that are rare elsewhere. Moreover, the team is specialized, encouraging, and very supportive, which makes the work environment pleasant.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and personal. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, then add reasons using linking words like "because" or "since." Avoid vague adjectives and be more specific about why you find academia rewarding.

Example: I am currently deciding between continuing in the medical field at the hospital or pursuing an academic career. I am leaning towards academia because both my parents are university professors, and I believe teaching and research can be very fulfilling and impactful.

× A fourth year pharmacist student at the Harshmett University.

✓ I am a fourth-year pharmacy student at Harshmett University.

The original sentence lacks a verb and subject, making it a sentence fragment. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence structure. Also, 'pharmacist student' is incorrect; the correct term is 'pharmacy student'. The article 'the' before 'Harshmett University' is unnecessary because university names usually do not take 'the'.

× I didn't choose pharmacy, it chose me.

✓ I didn't choose pharmacy; it chose me.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with two independent clauses joined only by a comma. Using a semicolon or a conjunction is necessary to correct the sentence structure.

× I do not work alongside my studying.

✓ I do not work alongside my studies.

The phrase 'alongside my studying' is awkward. 'Studies' is the correct noun form to refer to academic work. Alternatively, 'while studying' could be used.

× I'm an intern at the King Hussein Hospital here in Amman, which is a center that is designed to help cancer patients.

✓ I'm an intern at King Hussein Hospital here in Amman, which is a center designed to help cancer patients.

The article 'the' before 'King Hussein Hospital' is unnecessary if the hospital name is a proper noun. Also, 'that is designed' can be simplified to 'designed' for conciseness.

× I do believe that's a good place to work at because of the diversity in it.

✓ I do believe that's a good place to work because of its diversity.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary after 'work'. Also, 'diversity in it' is awkward; 'its diversity' is more natural.

× People who work there are very supportive and very special, so they do help us in our training experience to gain most of it, as well as the unique cases that we get to encounter on a daily basis.

✓ People who work there are very supportive and special; they help us gain the most from our training experience, as well as expose us to unique cases we encounter daily.

The original sentence is long and awkward. Breaking it into two parts and rephrasing improves clarity and flow.

× I do believe it's a great place to work at.

✓ I do believe it's a great place to work.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary after 'work' in this context.

× As I've said, the cases that we get taken into counter on a daily basis are very special.

✓ As I've said, the cases that we get to encounter on a daily basis are very special.

The phrase 'taken into counter' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'get to encounter' or 'come across'. Also, 'get taken into counter' is not a proper verb phrase.

× Enjoy them and the supportive team that is surrounding us are also very specialized and encouraging and supportive.

✓ I enjoy them, and the supportive team surrounding us is also very specialized, encouraging, and supportive.

The original sentence lacks a subject for 'Enjoy them' and has subject-verb agreement issues with 'team are'. Also, the sentence is awkward and needs restructuring for clarity.

× I'm still debating whether I will continue in the medical field at the hospital or to switch toward the academic route.

✓ I'm still debating whether I will continue in the medical field at the hospital or switch to the academic route.

The phrase 'whether I will continue... or to switch' is inconsistent in verb form. Both verbs should be parallel: 'continue... or switch'. Also, 'toward' is better replaced with 'to' in this context.