Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and correct minor grammatical errors. For example, instead of 'I chose this team', say 'I chose this stream'. Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'very practical enough'.

Example: I am currently a grade 12 student specializing in commerce because I am interested in subjects like economics and accounting, which I believe are practical and useful for my future career.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains some errors, such as 'I do not prefer walking'. Try to respond directly and clearly. Avoid unnecessary repetition and focus on the main point.

Example: I am currently a student and do not work at the moment. However, I plan to start working next year when I turn 18.

Suggestion: Instead of asking for clarification, try to answer based on your understanding. If you are unsure, give a general response related to work environments. This shows confidence and communication skills.

Example: I think a good place to work is one with a friendly environment and supportive colleagues, which helps reduce stress and encourages productivity.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. For example, say 'pretty friendly' instead of 'pretty friendly enough' and 'good opportunities' instead of 'a good opportunities'. Also, use linking words like 'Moreover' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is friendly and supportive. Moreover, my colleagues always help each other, which reduces stress. The company also offers good opportunities for career growth, motivating me to perform well.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: In the future, I plan to study commerce further and gain experience in this field. I am especially interested in economics and accounting, and I hope to work in the business sector.

× I chose this team because I am very interested in the subjects like economics and accounting which I feel that this will be a very practical enough and also a very useful for my future career.

✓ I chose this stream because I am very interested in subjects like economics and accounting, which I feel will be very practical enough and also very useful for my future career.

The word 'team' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'stream' when referring to a field of study. Also, 'in the subjects like' should be 'in subjects like' without 'the'. The phrase 'which I feel that this will be' is redundant; 'which I feel will be' is correct. Additionally, 'a very useful' should be 'very useful' without 'a' because 'useful' is an adjective here.

× As I said, I am a student so I usually don't work and I do not prefer walking in this year, so I will try my best to work from next year onwards and if I turn 18 for sure I will.

✓ As I said, I am a student so I usually don't work and I do not prefer working this year, so I will try my best to work from next year onwards and if I turn 18, for sure I will.

The phrase 'prefer walking' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer working' because 'prefer' is followed by the gerund form of the verb. Also, a comma is needed after 'if I turn 18' for clarity.

× I'm sorry, I didn't understand the question. Can you just explain me why?

✓ I'm sorry, I didn't understand the question. Can you just explain to me why?

The verb 'explain' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object. Therefore, 'explain me' is incorrect; it should be 'explain to me'.

× Yes, I think it is a very good place to work because the environment is pretty friendly enough and it's very supportive.

✓ Yes, I think it is a very good place to work because the environment is friendly enough and very supportive.

The adverb 'pretty' and 'enough' together is redundant. Using 'friendly enough' alone is sufficient. Also, 'pretty friendly enough' is awkward; it's better to use one quantifier.

× Also, the company offers a good opportunities for career growth, which motivates me to do my best.

✓ Also, the company offers good opportunities for career growth, which motivates me to do my best.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'opportunities'. It should be omitted because 'opportunities' is plural and does not need an article here.

× As I said, I want to really study in the field of commerce so I'm looking forward to learn and gain experience through the commerce field which gives a good motivation out of it especially the economics and accounting subjects and would love to work into business field also.

✓ As I said, I really want to study in the field of commerce, so I'm looking forward to learning and gaining experience through the commerce field, which gives good motivation, especially in economics and accounting subjects, and I would also love to work in the business field.

The phrase 'looking forward to learn' is incorrect; 'looking forward to' should be followed by the gerund form 'learning'. Also, 'gives a good motivation out of it' is awkward; 'gives good motivation' is better. 'Work into business field' should be 'work in the business field'. Commas are added for clarity.