Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Twoja odpowiedź jest zbyt długa i nieco chaotyczna. Staraj się odpowiadać bezpośrednio na pytanie, używając pełnych zdań i unikając powtórzeń. Użyj 2-3 zdań, aby odpowiedź była naturalna i klarowna.

Example: I work as the CEO of a medical company. I am also a medical doctor, having graduated in 2014. Previously, I gained valuable experience working in a hospital.

Suggestion: Twoja odpowiedź jest dobra, ale możesz poprawić płynność, używając spójników i bardziej naturalnych zwrotów. Staraj się unikać powtarzania słów i dodaj więcej szczegółów.

Example: I work at a medical company called Long Life, which provides preventive healthcare services to other businesses. For example, I perform ultrasound tests and offer medical consultations to employees of our client companies.

Suggestion: Twoja odpowiedź jest szczera, ale warto użyć bardziej spójnych zdań i unikać powtórzeń. Użyj spójników, aby odpowiedź była bardziej logiczna i naturalna.

Example: Honestly, I believe the company could improve in some areas since we are still young and have a lot of work to do. However, overall, it is a very good place to work.

Suggestion: Odpowiedź jest powtarzalna i nieco nieuporządkowana. Staraj się formułować zdania bardziej naturalnie i unikać powtórzeń. Dodaj spójnik, aby połączyć myśli.

Example: Of course, I like working here because I helped create this company as the CEO. Although we still have much to improve, I believe it is a great place to work.

Suggestion: Twoja odpowiedź jest niepełna i kończy się nagle. Staraj się formułować pełne zdania i unikać niedokończonych myśli. Dodaj więcej szczegółów i użyj spójników, aby odpowiedź była spójna.

Example: In the future, I would like to emigrate to Canada and work as a family medicine practitioner. Meanwhile, I am focused on developing our company and attracting more clients to ensure its success.

× I work I am CEO of medical company also I am a medical doctor graduated in 2014.

✓ I work as the CEO of a medical company, and I am also a medical doctor who graduated in 2014.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunctions and articles, causing it to be a run-on sentence and unclear. Adding 'as the' clarifies the role, and connecting the ideas with 'and' improves sentence structure.

× Firstly I work in hospital which gave me great experience on the field of medicine and nowadays I can work as a manager.

✓ Firstly, I worked in a hospital, which gave me great experience in the field of medicine, and nowadays I work as a manager.

The preposition 'in' is correct for 'hospital', but the sentence needs articles ('a hospital') and past tense 'worked' to match the time frame. Also, 'experience on the field' should be 'experience in the field'.

× I work in medical company called Long Life.

✓ I work in a medical company called Long Life.

The noun 'company' requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× We are providing preventive medicine for other businesses to improve the health of employees.

✓ We provide preventive medicine to other businesses to improve the health of their employees.

The verb 'provide' is more appropriate in present simple for habitual actions. Also, 'to other businesses' is the correct preposition, and 'their employees' clarifies ownership.

× Specifically, I make ultrasound tests for our clients, employees and medical consultations.

✓ Specifically, I perform ultrasound tests and provide medical consultations for our clients and employees.

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'ultrasound tests' and 'medical consultations' without proper verbs. 'Perform' and 'provide' clarify the actions.

× Honestly, I think it could be better, but we're trying to improve and we are young company so we have a lot work to do.

✓ Honestly, I think it could be better, but we're trying to improve, and we are a young company, so we have a lot of work to do.

The sentence is missing articles 'a' before 'young company' and 'of' after 'a lot'. These are necessary for grammatical correctness.

× But in overall I think it's a very good place to work.

✓ But overall, I think it's a very good place to work.

The phrase 'in overall' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'overall'. Also, a comma after 'overall' improves readability.

× Of course, I like the place where I work because I made this place as a CEO and I work there.

✓ Of course, I like the place where I work because I created it as the CEO, and I work there.

The phrase 'made this place as a CEO' is awkward; 'created it as the CEO' is clearer and more natural.

× So I think that we have a lot work to do to be better, but certainly this is a really good place to work.

✓ So I think that we have a lot of work to do to improve, but certainly this is a really good place to work.

The phrase 'a lot work' is missing 'of'. Also, 'to be better' is better expressed as 'to improve' in this context.

× I like.

✓ I like it.

The sentence 'I like.' is incomplete because it lacks an object. Adding 'it' completes the thought.

× In the future, I would like to emigrate to Canada as a doctor, specifically family medicine practitioner.

✓ In the future, I would like to emigrate to Canada as a doctor, specifically as a family medicine practitioner.

The phrase 'specifically family medicine practitioner' lacks the article 'a' and the preposition 'as' to be grammatically correct.

× But nowadays I would like to develop our company and get more clients to be really.

✓ But nowadays, I would like to develop our company and get more clients to be really successful.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'to be really.' Adding 'successful' completes the idea and makes the sentence meaningful.