Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of 'I enjoy my job since in Taiwan technique industry has more salary than the others,' say 'I enjoy my job because the tech industry in Taiwan offers higher salaries compared to other sectors.' Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I can I can.'

Example: I work as a software engineer. I enjoy my job because the tech industry in Taiwan offers higher salaries compared to other sectors. Additionally, I like being able to help my family and friends with their computer problems.

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I work at Taiwan AI Labs, a national company specialising in artificial intelligence. Currently, I am involved in projects like object detection for recycling data, which saves a lot of time because AI can process the data instead of humans.'

Example: I work at Taiwan AI Labs, a national company specialising in artificial intelligence. For example, I am involved in a project that uses object detection to analyse recycling data. This saves a lot of time because AI can process the data automatically, so people don't have to do it manually.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Be specific about what makes it a good place. For example, say 'Definitely, it is a great place to work because the salary is competitive and I have opportunities to learn state-of-the-art algorithms.'

Example: Definitely, it is a great place to work because the salary is competitive and I have opportunities to learn state-of-the-art algorithms.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to finish your thoughts and use clearer sentences. For example, 'Yes, I like my workplace. Our office has many transparent glass walls, which symbolise openness and transparency between the staff and management. This creates a positive working environment.'

Example: Yes, I like my workplace. Our office has many transparent glass walls, which symbolise openness and transparency between the staff and management. This creates a positive working environment.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to explain your plans logically. For example, 'I plan to change my job in the future because after gaining experience, I believe I can work for a higher-level company. This will allow me to earn a better salary and learn more.'

Example: I plan to change my job in the future because after gaining experience, I believe I can work for a higher-level company. This will allow me to earn a better salary and learn more.

× I enjoy my job since in Taiwan technique industry has more salary than the others.

✓ I enjoy my job since the technology industry in Taiwan offers higher salaries than others.

The phrase 'since in Taiwan technique industry has more salary than the others' is incorrect due to improper preposition use and awkward phrasing. 'In Taiwan' should be placed before 'technology industry' to correctly modify it. Also, 'technique industry' is incorrect; the correct term is 'technology industry'. 'Has more salary' is incorrect; it should be 'offers higher salaries'. The phrase 'than the others' is vague; 'than others' is more natural here.

× On the other hand I can I can help my family and my friends when they have computer problems.

✓ On the other hand, I can help my family and my friends when they have computer problems.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I can I can' which is a pronoun and verb repetition error. Removing the duplicate 'I can' corrects the sentence.

× I work in Taiwan AI Labs, a national company about artificial intelligence, and I work for some projects such as the object detection of some recycling data and it saves lots of time.

✓ I work at Taiwan AI Labs, a national company focused on artificial intelligence, and I work on some projects such as object detection of recycling data, which saves a lot of time.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to a company; 'at' is more appropriate. 'A national company about artificial intelligence' is awkward; 'focused on artificial intelligence' is better. 'Work for some projects' should be 'work on some projects'. 'The object detection of some recycling data' is awkward; 'object detection of recycling data' is clearer. 'It saves lots of time' should be connected properly with a relative clause 'which saves a lot of time'.

× So people don't need to check the data by human, we can do it by AI.

✓ So people don't need to check the data manually; we can do it by AI.

'By human' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'manually' or 'by humans'. Also, the sentence is a run-on; separating with a semicolon improves clarity.

× Definitely, yes, because we have we have many, many, many. We have, we have, we have large quantity of salary and also I have a opportunity to learn much state-of-the-art algorithm.

✓ Definitely, yes, because we have many benefits. We have a large salary and also I have an opportunity to learn many state-of-the-art algorithms.

The repetition 'we have we have many, many, many' is incorrect and unclear. 'Large quantity of salary' is incorrect; 'a large salary' is correct. 'A opportunity' should be 'an opportunity' due to vowel sound. 'Much state-of-the-art algorithm' should be 'many state-of-the-art algorithms' because 'algorithms' is countable.

× Sure. Our office is full of transparent glass and our boss said that why is transparent? Because the members and boss are transparent to each other as well. So I think our company is is very.

✓ Sure. Our office is full of transparent glass and our boss said, 'Why is it transparent?' Because the members and boss are transparent to each other as well. So I think our company is very open.

The sentence 'why is transparent?' is incorrect; it should be 'Why is it transparent?' to include the pronoun 'it'. The phrase 'our company is is very' is incomplete and has a repeated 'is'. Adding 'open' completes the thought logically.

× I'll gonna to change my job because after I learn much things I think my ability can go to the higher higher company so that I can get more salary and to learn more.

✓ I'm going to change my job because after I learn many things, I think my ability can reach a higher-level company so that I can get a higher salary and learn more.

'I'll gonna to change' is incorrect; 'I'm going to change' is correct. 'Learn much things' should be 'learn many things' because 'things' is countable. 'My ability can go to the higher higher company' is awkward; 'my ability can reach a higher-level company' is better. 'Get more salary' should be 'get a higher salary'. The phrase 'and to learn more' should be 'and learn more' for parallel structure.