Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I am currently a student. I recently completed my Bachelor's degree in Home Economics from Bangladesh, majoring in Food and Nutrition.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Make sure to use correct verb tenses and articles. Also, keep your answer concise and clear, directly addressing the question.

Example: Last year, I worked as an assistant manager at an international company. However, I am not working now because I am focusing on my higher studies.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'so, so' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Example: In my opinion, it was a good place to work because the environment was peaceful, and my colleagues were very friendly.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentence more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and clarify your reason for leaving.

Example: Yes, I liked working at the company and enjoyed my job. However, I had to quit because I wanted to pursue further education.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details about your future plans. Avoid unnecessary phrases and ensure correct article usage.

Example: I am studying Food and Nutrition because I have always wanted to become a nutritionist. My future plan is to work as a dietitian.

× Well I am a student currently I finished my BC from Bangladesh home economics.

✓ Well, I am currently a student. I finished my BC from Bangladesh Home Economics.

The sentence combines present and past tense awkwardly. 'I am a student currently' should be 'I am currently a student' for natural word order. Also, 'finished' is past tense and correctly used here, but the sentence needs punctuation to separate ideas clearly.

× My major is food and nutrition.

✓ My major is Food and Nutrition.

'Food and Nutrition' is a proper noun referring to a specific field of study and should be capitalized. No article is needed here.

× Last year I was working in a international company where I work as a assistant manager.

✓ Last year I was working in an international company where I worked as an assistant manager.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'international' and 'assistant'. Also, 'work' should be past tense 'worked' to match 'Last year I was working'.

× Now for my higher study I cannot I do not work anymore.

✓ Now, for my higher studies, I do not work anymore.

The phrase 'I cannot I do not work anymore' is incorrect and redundant. 'I do not work anymore' is sufficient. Also, 'higher study' should be plural 'higher studies'.

× In my point of view, it's a good place for work in our company is so, so peaceful and the people around me or was so friendly with me and yeah, it's a good place.

✓ In my point of view, it's a good place to work. Our company is very peaceful, and the people around me were very friendly. Yeah, it's a good place.

The phrase 'good place for work' should be 'good place to work'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Or was' is incorrect; it should be 'were'. Also, 'so, so peaceful' is informal and better as 'very peaceful'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work and I enjoy working in this company, but unfortunately I have to quit the job for my partner education.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work and enjoy working in this company, but unfortunately I have to quit the job for my partner's education.

'Partner education' needs possessive form 'partner's education'. The sentence is otherwise correct in modal verb usage.

× Do I study in food and nutrition? I always wanted to become a nutritionist, so my future present is to become an dietitian.

✓ I study food and nutrition. I have always wanted to become a nutritionist, so my future plan is to become a dietitian.

'Do I study' is a question form but the context requires a statement. 'Future present' is incorrect; it should be 'future plan'. Also, 'an dietitian' should be 'a dietitian' because 'dietitian' starts with a consonant sound.