Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: In your answer, try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, instead of saying 'I really enjoyed this feeling,' specify what feeling you mean. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

Example: I am currently studying medicine at the University of Health Science because I want to become a doctor. I enjoy learning about the human body and helping others. Therefore, I spend a lot of time preparing for exams and practical training to succeed in my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to use clear and direct sentences, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'retain the patient' which should be 'treat patients'.

Example: Currently, I am a student, but in the future, I plan to work in a hospital because I will become a doctor. There, I will spend time treating patients and giving them advice.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammar errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct sentence structures and vocabulary. For example, say 'the hospital environment is friendly and supportive, which motivates employees and helps them focus on their work.' Also, explain your points clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'teamwork that is highly income.'

Example: Yes, the hospital is a good place to work because the environment is friendly and supportive. This motivates employees and helps them concentrate on their tasks. For example, there are many opportunities for teamwork and career growth.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammar mistakes. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I like the place where I work because it helps people get treatment and medical advice to cure their illnesses.'

Example: Yes, I definitely like the place where I work because it helps people receive treatment and medical advice to cure their illnesses. It is rewarding to contribute to their health and well-being.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be improved by clearer sentence structure and linking words. For example, say 'My future plan is to become a doctor because I love this field. It will bring me happiness and allow me to help people by treating and preventing illnesses.'

Example: My future work plan is to become a doctor because I love this field. It will bring me happiness and enable me to treat patients and help prevent illnesses.

× I really enjoyed this feeling.

✓ I really enjoy this feeling.

The student is talking about a current ongoing feeling related to their studies, so the present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'enjoyed'.

× I spend a lot of time preparing for exam and practical training to succeed in my study or examination.

✓ I spend a lot of time preparing for exams and practical training to succeed in my studies or examinations.

The nouns 'exam' and 'study' should be plural because the student refers to multiple exams and studies. Using plural forms 'exams' and 'studies' is grammatically correct here.

× So I have to spend time therefore to retain the patient and give advice to them.

✓ So I have to spend time taking care of the patients and giving advice to them.

The phrase 'spend time therefore to retain the patient' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'spend time taking care of the patients' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'retain' is not appropriate here.

× which have the employees they motivated and they can concentrate it on their work.

✓ which has motivated employees who can concentrate on their work.

The subject 'which' refers to 'the environment' (singular), so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'employees' is plural, so 'they' is correct, but 'concentrate it' is incorrect; 'concentrate on their work' is correct.

× For example, there are opportunity for the worker and teamwork that is highly income.

✓ For example, there are opportunities for the workers and teamwork that brings high income.

'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'there are'. 'Worker' should be plural 'workers'. 'Highly income' is incorrect; 'high income' or 'that brings high income' is correct.

× Yes, I definitely like the place where I work because I think it is a place where the people can go there for the treatment and they can cure the their illness and get the medical advice from the doctor.

✓ Yes, I definitely like the place where I work because I think it is a place where people can go for treatment, get cured of their illnesses, and receive medical advice from doctors.

The phrase 'the people can go there for the treatment' is redundant; 'people can go for treatment' is better. 'They can cure the their illness' is incorrect; people receive treatment to be cured, so 'get cured of their illnesses' is correct. Also, 'the doctor' should be plural 'doctors' to generalize.