Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Avoid repeating words like 'currently' and keep your answer concise. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: I am currently a student enrolled in an AS preparation class because I enjoy learning new things. This knowledge will help me in my future career.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit long and contains some redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating words like 'and'. Also, try to be more specific about your future plans.

Example: I am not working currently because I want to focus on my studies. However, after completing my education, I plan to find a job that will make my parents proud.

Suggestion: Try to provide a more complete answer even if you don't have experience. You can express your opinion or explain why you don't know, using complete sentences.

Example: Since I am not working at the moment, I don't have experience with workplaces, so I can't say if it is a good place to work.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating previous answers and try to answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to add supporting details.

Example: Although I am not working now, I would like to work in a place that supports my career goals after I finish my education.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition. Organize your ideas logically, use linking words, and be specific about your plans. Avoid repeating words and check grammar for clarity.

Example: I plan to study early childhood education because my country lacks proper facilities in this field. Therefore, I want to go abroad to pursue my studies and gain better knowledge before returning home.

× I didn't want to do any job right now because I am trying to focus on my study and career.

✓ I don't want to do any job right now because I am trying to focus on my study and career.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'didn't want' to describe a current situation. Since the student is talking about their present intention, the present tense 'don't want' should be used.

× I will definitely work and and make my parents happy.

✓ I will definitely work and make my parents happy.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'and and', which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'and' corrects the sentence.

× I I don't have any idea.

✓ I don't have any idea.

The sentence has a repeated subject 'I I', which is incorrect. Removing the duplicate 'I' corrects the sentence.

× So I wanted to study early childhood.

✓ So I want to study early childhood education.

The sentence uses past tense 'wanted' which conflicts with the intended meaning of current desire. Also, 'early childhood' is incomplete; it should be 'early childhood education' for clarity.

× So in my country there is no any facility and education system of child child care about child care education.

✓ So in my country there is no facility or education system for child care education.

The phrase 'no any' is incorrect; 'no' or 'any' should be used alone. Also, 'child child care about child care education' is redundant and unclear. Simplifying to 'facility or education system for child care education' improves clarity.

× So I went, I wanted to go abroad to pursue my father study and after the completing after completing my all the course.

✓ So I want to go abroad to pursue my further studies after completing all my courses.

The sentence is fragmented and contains repetition and unclear phrases like 'pursue my father study' and 'after the completing after completing my all the course.' Correcting to a clear, grammatically correct sentence improves understanding.