Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating words like 'currently'. Also, correct the hospital name if possible and structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Example: I have completed my bachelor's degree in hospital administration and am currently doing an internship at Arrogant Hospital in Dehradun. So, I am both working and studying at the same time.

Suggestion: Your answer provides some details but lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, correct the hospital name and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

Example: I work at Arakadam Hospital, which has 50 beds. The main surgeon there is a gastroenterologist named Doctor Vipul Dhatkanwal.

Suggestion: Your answer is positive and includes an example, which is good. However, improve grammar and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about the facilities.

Example: Yes, it is a very good place to work because it offers a variety of facilities. Moreover, the hospital staff are very supportive. For instance, once I was confused about a task, but my colleagues helped me understand and complete it.

Suggestion: Your answer has good descriptive elements but is incomplete and somewhat disorganized. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant expressions.

Example: Yes, I really like working in Dehradun because it is surrounded by nature and beautiful trees. The weather is often rainy, which makes the atmosphere fresh and peaceful.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by linking ideas smoothly and adding more specific details about your plans. Also, avoid starting sentences with 'Currently' twice.

Example: I plan to pursue a master's degree in Health Service Management in Australia, which is why I am preparing for the IELTS exam. In the future, I hope to serve the healthcare community to the best of my abilities.

× I'm currently I have currently completed bachelors in hospital administration and I'm doing my internship from Arrogant hospital Dehradun.

✓ I have currently completed a bachelor's in hospital administration and I'm doing my internship at Arrogant Hospital, Dehradun.

The original sentence has redundancy with 'I'm currently I have currently completed' and missing article before 'bachelors'. Also, 'from' should be 'at' when referring to the place of internship. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So I'm both working and a student.

✓ So I'm both working and studying as a student.

The phrase 'both working and a student' is awkward. Using 'studying as a student' clarifies the dual role and maintains grammatical correctness.

× I work in a hospital called Arakadam.

✓ I work in a hospital called Arakadam.

This sentence is correct; no article error found here.

× It is A50 bed hospital and the main surgeon there is of gastroenterologist with his name is Doctor Vipul Dhatkanwal.

✓ It is a 50-bed hospital, and the main surgeon there is a gastroenterologist named Doctor Vipul Dhatkanwal.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before '50-bed hospital' and 'gastroenterologist'. Also, 'with his name is' is incorrect; it should be 'named' to properly introduce the doctor's name.

× Yes, it is a very good place to work as it offers variety of facilities and the hospital staff are very supportive and helpful.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work as it offers a variety of facilities, and the hospital staff are very supportive and helpful.

The phrase 'offers variety of facilities' is missing the article 'a' before 'variety'. Adding 'a' makes the phrase grammatically correct.

× I remember one day I didn't knew what to do about something.

✓ I remember one day I didn't know what to do about something.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used. 'Knew' is past tense and incorrect here; it should be 'know'.

× I was puzzled in a task.

✓ I was puzzled about a task.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'puzzled about' is the correct collocation to express confusion regarding a task.

× They helped me to read that and go through it.

✓ They helped me read that and go through it.

The verb 'help' is usually followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Removing 'to' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Yes, I'm very fond of this place called Dehradun. I work here. It is in the lap of the nature.

✓ Yes, I'm very fond of this place called Dehradun. I work here. It is in the lap of nature.

The phrase 'the lap of the nature' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' before 'nature'. 'Nature' is an uncountable noun and does not require 'the' here.

× The weather here, it's very gloomy.

✓ The weather here is very gloomy.

The original sentence is fragmented and redundant. Combining into one clear sentence improves grammatical correctness.

× It's raining like it's raining cats and dogs every single time.

✓ It's raining cats and dogs every single time.

The phrase 'raining like it's raining cats and dogs' is redundant. The idiom 'raining cats and dogs' alone suffices to express heavy rain.

× And you cannot.

✓ (This sentence is incomplete and unclear; it should be removed or completed.)

The sentence 'And you cannot.' is incomplete and does not convey a clear meaning. It should be either completed or omitted.

× Currently I want to do masters in Health Service management from Australia.

✓ Currently, I want to do a master's in Health Service Management from Australia.

The phrase 'do masters' is incorrect; it should be 'do a master's'. Also, 'Health Service Management' should be capitalized as a proper noun.

× That's why I'm taking IELTS and I'm doing the practice regularly.

✓ That's why I'm taking the IELTS and practicing regularly.

'Doing the practice' is awkward; 'practicing' is the correct verb form. Also, 'the IELTS' is the correct form when referring to the test.

× My future plan is to serve the healthcare community at my best.

✓ My future plan is to serve the healthcare community to the best of my ability.

The phrase 'at my best' is informal and less clear. 'To the best of my ability' is a more appropriate and formal expression.