Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear in parts. Try to be more direct and avoid redundancy. Also, the phrase "I do consider myself as a friend right now" is confusing and irrelevant. Focus on clearly stating your current status and future plans in a natural way.

Example: I am currently a student. I have just finished my high secondary education and I am preparing to study abroad, possibly in Europe, where I plan to pursue a bachelor's degree in business.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Avoid repeating words like "physical physical activity activities". Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Example: I have not worked yet, but I would like to work in a job that involves mental tasks rather than physical labour. For example, I am interested in the tech field because it challenges my thinking and helps me develop new skills.

Suggestion: Your answer has some redundancy and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, be confident and clear in your predictions.

Example: Yes, I believe the technology field is a great place to work because it is one of the fastest-growing sectors worldwide. Moreover, it is likely to revolutionize many aspects of our lives in the near future.

Suggestion: Your answer is quite good but a bit long. Try to be more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid phrases like "each and every single" which are redundant.

Example: Although I am not currently working, I have experience as a part-time employee in a local retail store. I enjoyed working there because the environment was friendly and my coworkers felt like a close-knit team.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to state your plans directly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid repeating words like "I do" and be specific about your interests.

Example: In the future, I plan to work in the business industry after completing my degree. Specifically, I am interested in marketing and management, and I hope to either build my own business or work in these sectors.

× I had not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is no big amount of physical physical activity activities like loading and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities and tech field.

✓ I have not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is not a big amount of physical activity like loading, and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities in the tech field.

The phrase 'I had not worked yet' is incorrect because 'had not worked' is past perfect tense, which is used to describe an action completed before another past action. Here, the speaker refers to an experience up to the present, so present perfect 'have not worked' is appropriate. Also, 'no big amount of physical physical activity activities' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'not a big amount of physical activity'. Additionally, 'and tech field' is incomplete and should be 'in the tech field' to correctly use the preposition.

× I had not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is no big amount of physical physical activity activities like loading and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities and tech field.

✓ I have not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is not a big amount of physical activity like loading, and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities in the tech field.

The phrase 'physical physical activity activities' contains repeated and incorrect plural forms. The correct phrase is 'physical activity' (singular) because 'activity' here is uncountable. Also, 'no big amount' should be 'not a big amount' for grammatical correctness.

× I had not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is no big amount of physical physical activity activities like loading and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities and tech field.

✓ I have not worked yet, but I think that I do consider working in an environment where there is not a big amount of physical activity like loading, and I love to be in an environment where I need to work with my brain so that I can increase my thinking capabilities in the tech field.

The phrase 'and tech field' lacks the necessary preposition 'in' to indicate location or area. The correct phrase is 'in the tech field' to properly connect the noun phrase.

× Yes, I consider that tech is a technology field or the technical field is the best field or place to work because it is one of the most growing sector in the world.

✓ Yes, I consider that tech is a technology field or the technical field is the best field or place to work because it is one of the fastest growing sectors in the world.

The phrase 'most growing sector' is incorrect because 'growing' is a present participle and cannot be used with 'most' to form a superlative. The correct form is 'fastest growing'. Also, 'sector' should be plural 'sectors' because it refers to one among many.

× So hoping to it would be.

✓ So I am hoping it will be.

The phrase 'hoping to it would be' is incorrect in structure and preposition use. The correct expression is 'I am hoping it will be' to properly convey the intended meaning.

× As I mentioned, I am currently not working for any company or a site or a business, but I had worked as a part time employee in one of the retail stores near my locality and I do love working there because the environment there is so good and each and every single coworker of mine was friendlier and it felt like a brotherhood.

✓ As I mentioned, I am currently not working for any company or site or business, but I have worked as a part-time employee in one of the retail stores near my locality and I do love working there because the environment is so good and each and every single coworker of mine was friendly and it felt like a brotherhood.

The phrase 'had worked' is past perfect tense, which is not appropriate here as there is no reference to another past event. Present perfect 'have worked' is correct to indicate experience up to now. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time'. The adjective 'friendlier' is comparative and requires a comparison; here, 'friendly' is appropriate. 'Company or a site or a business' is better without articles for parallelism.

× each and every single coworker of mine was friendlier

✓ each and every single coworker of mine was friendly

The word 'friendlier' is a comparative adjective and requires a comparison object, which is missing here. The correct adjective to describe the coworkers is 'friendly'.

× My future work plans are like I'm planning to be a part of the business industry that I'm planning to pursue the degree in.

✓ My future work plans are that I am planning to be a part of the business industry in which I am planning to pursue my degree.

The original sentence has awkward structure and misplaced phrases. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness by properly placing the relative clause and prepositions.

× So I think that I do consider myself building a business or being a part of it because as an individual I do love the the sectors like marketing and management, so I do.

✓ So I think that I do consider myself building a business or being a part of it because, as an individual, I do love sectors like marketing and management, so I do.

The phrase 'the the sectors' contains a repeated article. Also, 'the sectors like marketing and management' should be 'sectors like marketing and management' without 'the' because it refers to general sectors, not specific ones.