Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but a bit long and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and grammatically correct by using simpler sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Example: I am currently a student on a visa and also work part-time as a teaching aide at a local school. I help students with their problems and collaborate with staff, which is very useful for my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer provides good details but has some awkward phrasing and filler words like 'umm'. Try to avoid fillers and use clearer, more natural expressions. Also, correct the phrase 'which we usually like for 40 minutes drive' to a more natural form.

Example: I work as a teaching aide at a local government school about a 40-minute drive from my home. The school has friendly students and supportive teachers, which makes it a pleasant place to work.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on making your sentences grammatically correct and clearer. Avoid vague phrases like 'engaging voice' and be more specific about what makes the workplace good.

Example: Yes, it's a great place to work. The teachers and staff are very cooperative and supportive. They organise interesting activities that help students learn, which is valuable experience for my future career.

Suggestion: Your answer is positive but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct plural forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid 'as long as' which implies a condition; instead, use 'because' or 'since' to explain reasons.

Example: Yes, definitely. I enjoy working there because the supportive staff and teachers organise various activities, such as physical exercises, visual aids, and excursions, which really engage the students and enhance their learning.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use simpler sentences and correct verb forms. Also, clarify your inspiration and avoid confusing expressions like 'can't help which support'.

Example: I plan to become a teacher in Victoria, which is my dream job. I was inspired by my grandparents, who were geography and chemistry teachers in China. They were very helpful and supported many different kinds of students.

× I am now holding a student visa but also doing some part time job.

✓ I am now holding a student visa but am also doing some part-time job.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'also doing' to form the present continuous tense correctly. Additionally, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective.

× At the meantime I work as a teaching aide in some schools helping the students, overcoming their problems and cooperates with other staff in the school which really useful for my study nowadays.

✓ In the meantime, I work as a teaching aide in some schools, helping the students, overcoming their problems and cooperating with other staff in the school, which is really useful for my study nowadays.

'At the meantime' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'In the meantime'. The verb 'cooperates' should be in the '-ing' form 'cooperating' to match the parallel structure with 'helping' and 'overcoming'. Also, 'which really useful' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× It's a bit far away from the city, which we usually like for 40 minutes drive from my home.

✓ It's a bit far away from the city, usually about a 40-minute drive from my home.

The phrase 'which we usually like for 40 minutes drive' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'usually about a 40-minute drive'. Also, '40 minutes' should be singular '40-minute' when used as an adjective.

× I really like to working there with cooperative with some lovely teachers and supportive Staffs, especially when I see their lovely faces and engaging voice, even with a lot of interesting activities to help students for study, that's really helpful for my future career.

✓ I really like working there cooperatively with some lovely teachers and supportive staff, especially when I see their lovely faces and hear their engaging voices, even with a lot of interesting activities to help students study; that's really helpful for my future career.

'Like to working' is incorrect; it should be 'like working'. 'Cooperative with' should be 'cooperatively with'. 'Staffs' is incorrect; 'staff' is an uncountable noun. 'Engaging voice' should be plural 'engaging voices' to agree with 'teachers'. 'Help students for study' should be 'help students study'. The sentence also needed punctuation corrections for clarity.

× I've really enjoyed working there with some supportive Staffs and lovely teachers, as long as they have a lot of different kind of activities like physical, visual or even sometimes excursion, which can really engage the students and boost their study.

✓ I've really enjoyed working there with some supportive staff and lovely teachers, as they have a lot of different kinds of activities like physical, visual, or even sometimes excursions, which can really engage the students and boost their study.

'Staffs' is incorrect; 'staff' is uncountable. 'As long as' is incorrect in this context; 'as' or 'because' is appropriate. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds'. 'Excursion' should be plural 'excursions' to match the list.

× For my plan, I am about to become a teacher in Victoria, That's my dream job as I really inspired from my grandparents who used to be a geography and chemistry teacher back to China.

✓ For my plan, I am about to become a teacher in Victoria. That's my dream job as I am really inspired by my grandparents who used to be geography and chemistry teachers back in China.

'Really inspired from' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'really inspired by'. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'grandparents'. 'Back to China' should be 'back in China'. Also, the sentence was a run-on and needed to be split.

× They really helpful and can't help which support a lot of different kind of students.

✓ They are really helpful and can't help but support a lot of different kinds of students.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'They'. The phrase 'can't help which support' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'can't help but support'. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds'.