Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung thông tin chi tiết. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý sử dụng thì đúng (ví dụ: 'I will graduate' thay vì 'I will have graduated').

Example: I am currently a sophomore student at Dana University of Education, majoring in psychology. I expect to graduate by the end of 2027.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời khá dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'with the psychologist' không chính xác. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn.

Example: I am currently a student and do not have a job yet. After graduation, I plan to work as a psychologist because I am passionate about this field.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'in the futures' và 'colleges' thay vì 'colleagues'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I don't have a job yet, but I believe a good workplace for psychologists should have a friendly and supportive atmosphere. For example, positive relationships with colleagues and an encouraging environment are important.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn lặp lại ý trước đó và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lặp lại thông tin. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp.

Example: I am not sure yet, but I would like to work in a place that is friendly and supportive.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp như 'In the Futures' và 'supporting who struggle'. Hãy chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

Example: In the future, I want to become a psychologist or volunteer at UNICEF because I enjoy helping people overcome their problems. I am passionate about raising mental health awareness and supporting those who struggle with emotional difficulties.

× Honestly, I'm a sophomore student at Dana University of Education and majoring in psychology and I will have graduated by the end of 2027.

✓ Honestly, I'm a sophomore student at Dana University of Education, majoring in psychology, and I will graduate by the end of 2027.

The phrase 'and majoring in psychology' is incorrect because it lacks an auxiliary verb. It should be 'and I am majoring in psychology' or simply 'majoring in psychology' as a participle phrase. Also, 'will have graduated' is future perfect tense, which is not appropriate here; 'will graduate' is better for a planned future event.

× However, I plan to graduate by the end of 2027 and pursue a career related to my major with the psychologist and I'm really passionate about this field.

✓ However, I plan to graduate by the end of 2027 and pursue a career related to my major as a psychologist, and I'm really passionate about this field.

The phrase 'with the psychologist' is incorrect; it should be 'as a psychologist' to indicate the career role. 'With' is not the correct preposition here.

× Yes. However, in the futures I believe a great workplace for psychologists like me should have a friendly and supportive atmosphere, for example, having positive relationship with colleges and an encouraging environment.

✓ Yes. However, in the future, I believe a great workplace for psychologists like me should have a friendly and supportive atmosphere, for example, having positive relationships with colleagues and an encouraging environment.

The word 'futures' is incorrect; the singular 'future' should be used. Also, 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to multiple connections. 'Colleges' is incorrect; the correct word is 'colleagues' meaning coworkers.

× To be honest, I don't know about that, but I think in the Futures I believe an ideal workplace for psychologists like me should have a friendly and supportive atmosphere.

✓ To be honest, I don't know about that, but I think in the future I believe an ideal workplace for psychologists like me should have a friendly and supportive atmosphere.

Again, 'Futures' should be singular 'future' as it refers to a time period ahead.

× I'm passionate about improving mental health awareness and supporting who struggle with emotional difficulty.

✓ I'm passionate about improving mental health awareness and supporting those who struggle with emotional difficulties.

The pronoun 'who' is incorrect here; it should be 'those who' to refer to people. Also, 'difficulty' should be plural 'difficulties' to match the context of various emotional challenges.