Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite unclear and contains many grammatical errors and awkward phrases, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary. For example, say you volunteer at a charity clinic helping patients who cannot afford medical care, and mention the common diseases treated. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

Example: I work as a volunteer at a charity clinic that provides medical care to people who cannot afford it. I have been volunteering there for over eight years. Most patients suffer from chronic diseases like diabetes, hypertension, and heart conditions.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many errors and incomplete sentences. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, mention the clinic's location, the type of patients treated, and who organises it. Avoid hesitation and incomplete thoughts.

Example: I work at a charity clinic located in the town centre. It mainly treats patients with chronic diseases such as diabetes and hypertension. The clinic is organised by local volunteers who provide free medical services.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with reasons using linking words. For example, say it is a rewarding place despite some discomforts, and mention the diversity of clients and the environment. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

Example: Although the clinic is not as comfortable as a hospital, I find it a rewarding place to work. I meet clients from diverse backgrounds, and the spacious waiting area allows many people to sit comfortably.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and incomplete ideas. Try to express your feelings about the workplace clearly, mention challenges and rewards, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Example: I really like working at the clinic because, despite financial challenges, it is very rewarding. I gain valuable experience by helping many people from different backgrounds.

Suggestion: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear vocabulary and grammar errors. Try to state your future plans clearly, explain your interests, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, mention your intention to join NGOs specializing in certain conditions and your interest in research.

Example: In the future, I plan to join a non-governmental organisation that specialises in chronic diseases. I am also interested in research, which I believe will help me improve my skills and contribute to society using my past experience.

× I'm working as a Medicare volunteer in the charity clinics which please offer the Clonidine infection who cannot afford the Medicare services.

✓ I work as a Medicare volunteer in the charity clinics which provide services to people who cannot afford Medicare.

The present continuous 'I'm working' is incorrect here because the student is describing a regular activity, so the simple present 'I work' is appropriate. Also, 'please offer the Clonidine infection' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'which provide services to people who cannot afford Medicare.'

× So that is I have been working as more than eight years.

✓ I have been working for more than eight years.

The phrase 'So that is I have been working as more than eight years' is grammatically incorrect and awkward. The correct form is 'I have been working for more than eight years' using the present perfect continuous tense with the preposition 'for' to indicate duration.

× So especially most of the people come to that area is the coronary disease like diabetes mellitus, hypertensions and dumbnulogic cosine disease.

✓ Especially, most of the people who come to that area have chronic diseases like diabetes mellitus, hypertension and immunologic diseases.

'Coronary disease' is singular and does not fit the list; 'hypertensions' is incorrect plural; 'dumbnulogic cosine disease' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation of 'immunologic diseases.' Also, 'most of the people come to that area is' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the people who come to that area have.'

× I walk at the cherry clinic.

✓ I work at the charity clinic.

'I walk' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'work.' Also, 'cherry clinic' is likely a mishearing or mispronunciation of 'charity clinic.'

× Well, uh, they treat the people who cannot afford the Medicare services concerned with, uh, chronic disease like diabetes mellitus, hypertension and terminologic disease situations.

✓ They treat people who cannot afford Medicare services and who have chronic diseases like diabetes mellitus, hypertension and immunologic disease conditions.

The phrase 'concerned with' is incorrectly used; it should be 'who have' or 'with.' Also, 'terminologic disease situations' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation of 'immunologic disease conditions.'

× Uh, this place is located in the center of the town and which is organized by the local typhoons and they give the.

✓ This place is located in the centre of town and is organized by the local tycoons who provide the services.

'Typhoons' is incorrect; likely meant 'tycoons' or 'organizers.' The sentence is incomplete; 'and they give the' is unfinished. The relative pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used after 'and.' It should be 'and is organized by the local tycoons who provide the services.'

× As you know, that place is a charity cleaners and it is not that much comfort when you are working at a hospital.

✓ As you know, that place is a charity clinic and it is not as comfortable as working in a hospital.

'Charity cleaners' is incorrect; it should be 'charity clinic.' 'Not that much comfort' is incorrect; the correct comparative form is 'not as comfortable as.'

× Is this a volunteer? What I commute with the clients who are from different backgrounds.

✓ I am a volunteer. I communicate with clients who come from different backgrounds.

'Is this a volunteer?' is incorrect; the student should say 'I am a volunteer.' 'Commute' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'communicate.'

× Our although it is like it, it is spacious, so many people can be sitting at the way.

✓ Although it is small, it is spacious enough for many people to sit comfortably.

The phrase 'Our although it is like it' is unclear and incorrect. 'So many people can be sitting at the way' is incorrect; it should be 'many people can sit comfortably.'

× As you know, this is the new reward and I believe it is, although it is the challenges to my life tech constantly financial issue, but it will get so many rewarding like many experience as I see as I treat this to the many people with different coordination where where who are they? Who are?

✓ As you know, this is a new role and I believe that although it presents challenges to my life, especially financial issues, it is very rewarding because I gain a lot of experience by treating many people from different backgrounds.

The sentence is very unclear with incorrect pronouns and structure. 'New reward' should be 'new role.' 'Challenges to my life tech constantly financial issue' is incorrect; it should be 'presents challenges to my life, especially financial issues.' The latter part is unclear and corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I have a plans to join the non government organizations which whichever which specialized in the double rocket ticket is the conditions and as I have interested to the research specialty.

✓ I have plans to join non-governmental organizations that specialise in diabetic kidney conditions, and I am interested in research specialties.

'A plans' is incorrect; it should be 'plans.' 'Non government organizations' should be 'non-governmental organizations.' 'Double rocket ticket is the conditions' is a mispronunciation of 'diabetic kidney conditions.' 'As I have interested to the research specialty' is incorrect; it should be 'I am interested in research specialties.'

× So I think this is the best way to improve of my life and also to do the best to apply of my passing experience in this society.

✓ So I think this is the best way to improve my life and also to apply my past experience to this society.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used after 'improve' and 'apply.' The correct phrases are 'improve my life' and 'apply my past experience.' 'Passing experience' should be 'past experience.'