Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장이 다소 중복되고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 문장을 더 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

Example: I'm currently a student preparing to study interior design in the UK. I graduated from high school last year, so these days, I'm focusing on improving my English skills.

Suggestion: 문법 오류가 많고 문장이 불완전하며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 완성형으로 만들고, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 설명을 포함하도록 연습하세요.

Example: I don't work at the moment because I am preparing to study interior design, which is my major. I am focusing on getting ready for my studies abroad.

Suggestion: 답변이 단편적이고 문법적으로 부정확하며, 연결어가 부족합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 긍정적인 점과 부정적인 점을 연결어로 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work overall, but it can be quite noisy and uncomfortable sometimes, which makes me feel stressed.

Suggestion: 문장이 불완전하고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

Example: I like the place where I work because it is very comfortable. Also, it helps relieve my stress and makes me feel refreshed.

Suggestion: 문장이 단편적이고 문법 오류가 많으며, 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 구체적인 이유와 계획을 명확하게 표현하세요.

Example: In the future, I want to work for a big company because the office is spacious and has a stunning view, which I find inspiring.

× I'm a student. I graduated from high school last year. And now I'm I'm preparing to study interior design in the UK, so I'm just focusing on improving my English this day.

✓ I'm a student. I graduated from high school last year. And now I'm preparing to study interior design in the UK, so I'm just focusing on improving my English these days.

The phrase 'this day' is incorrect when referring to a period of time; the correct expression is 'these days' to indicate the current period. Also, the repeated 'I'm' is a typographical error.

× I'm not work now but I thought it too I starting interior design. Because. It is my major. So I preparing. To study. The Giant.

✓ I'm not working now but I thought about starting interior design because it is my major, so I am preparing to study in the UK.

The verb 'work' needs to be in the '-ing' form after 'I'm not' to indicate the present continuous tense. 'Thought it too I starting' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'thought about starting'. 'So I preparing' should be 'so I am preparing'. 'The Giant' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'the UK' or 'the university'.

× Yes, not bad. It's all good. Place. But is so noisy. Uncomfortable place. So. I really, really so stress.

✓ Yes, not bad. It's a good place, but it is so noisy and uncomfortable. So, I feel really stressed.

'It's all good place' is incorrect; it should be 'It's a good place'. 'But is so noisy' lacks a subject; it should be 'but it is so noisy'. 'Uncomfortable place' needs to be connected properly. 'I really, really so stress' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I feel really stressed'.

× Not bad. It is very comfortable place. Anne. Relief my stress and makes me feel fresh.

✓ Not bad. It is a very comfortable place and relieves my stress and makes me feel fresh.

'Anne' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'and'. 'Relief' is a noun; the verb form 'relieves' is needed here. Also, 'comfortable place' needs an article 'a'.

× I want to big company. Work because. It is very. Spacious and. I think it's very stunning. In I want to see stunning view.

✓ I want to work in a big company because it is very spacious, and I think it has a stunning view. I want to see a stunning view.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'I want to big company work' should be 'I want to work in a big company'. 'Because. It is very. Spacious and.' should be combined into one sentence. 'I think it's very stunning' is unclear; specifying 'it has a stunning view' clarifies meaning. 'In I want to see stunning view' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to see a stunning view'.