Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit long and contains some unclear phrases. Try to be more concise and clear, directly answering the question first, then adding relevant details. Avoid redundancy and unclear terms like 'Barber feed university of free coat'.

Example: I am currently a student pursuing my Master's in Science. I recently completed my Bachelor's degree and aim to become a registered nurse to help patients in need.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and has some unclear phrases like 'Ed seizes'. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I am currently a student and do not work at the moment. However, after completing my studies, I plan to work in a well-established hospital to help patients recover from their illnesses.

Suggestion: Your answer has unclear words like 'horse videos' and some grammatical errors. Try to use clear vocabulary and structure your answer logically with linking words. Also, avoid contradictory statements like 'cannot earn money' if you mean otherwise.

Example: Yes, hospitals are good places to work because they allow us to help people in need. Although the work can be challenging, it is rewarding and safe compared to other workplaces.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating the same information unnecessarily.

Example: I am not working currently, but in the future, I would like to work in a place with a good environment, fair salary, and friendly colleagues. These factors are important for me to enjoy my work.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Try to structure your answer with a topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Example: After completing my studies, I plan to work in a well-known hospital because I come from a medical background. Additionally, I am considering working in Canada to gain international experience.

× I recently completed my Bachelor of Science from a Barber feed university of free coat and now I'm pursuing my Masters in science to get a success in my life and to become a registered nurse and to solve the poor patients and those who need my help.

✓ I recently completed my Bachelor of Science from a Barberfield University of Free Coat and now I'm pursuing my Masters in Science to achieve success in my life, become a registered nurse, and help poor patients and those who need my help.

The original sentence has some awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices. 'Get a success' is incorrect; it should be 'achieve success'. Also, 'solve the poor patients' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'help poor patients'. The sentence is long and needs commas to separate ideas clearly.

× Well I'm a student so nowadays I don't work in any place but in the future after completing my study I surely work in a registered or well established hospital to solve the individuals and get them out from their troubled and Ed seizes.

✓ Well, I'm a student, so nowadays I don't work anywhere, but in the future, after completing my studies, I will surely work in a registered or well-established hospital to help individuals and get them out of their troubles and diseases.

The sentence uses present tense 'work' incorrectly when referring to future plans; it should be 'will work' to indicate future tense. Also, 'solve the individuals' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'help'. 'Ed seizes' is likely a mishearing or misspelling of 'diseases'. 'In any place' is better expressed as 'anywhere'.

× So yes, now I am not working am a student.

✓ So yes, now I am not working; I am a student.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunction. 'Am a student' is missing the subject 'I' and a connector. Adding a semicolon or conjunction clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, horse videos are very good please for work because there we cannot earn money but it's a good way to help individuals to gain blessings and also help individual in their probable time.

✓ Yes, hospitals are very good places to work because there we may not earn much money, but it's a good way to help individuals gain blessings and also help individuals in their difficult times.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'horse videos' is a mishearing of 'hospitals'; 'please' should be 'places'; 'cannot earn money' is too absolute, better to say 'may not earn much money'; 'probable time' is incorrect, the correct phrase is 'difficult times' or 'times of need'. Also, 'help individual' should be plural 'help individuals'.

× So it's a good place for working and also it's safe than other places.

✓ So it's a good place to work and also it's safer than other places.

The phrase 'good place for working' is better expressed as 'good place to work'. Also, 'safe than other places' is incorrect; the comparative form 'safer than other places' is needed.

× Well, I'm not working in any place, but in the future alpha working in that place, I first of all check the environment and the salary package and also the behavior of individuals.

✓ Well, I'm not working anywhere, but in the future, before working in that place, I will first check the environment, the salary package, and also the behavior of individuals.

The sentence uses 'alpha working' which is incorrect; it should be 'before working'. Also, 'check' should be in future tense 'will check' to match the future plan. 'In any place' is better as 'anywhere'.

× So only then I can know about the workplace environment or anything.

✓ Only then will I be able to know about the workplace environment or anything else.

The sentence structure is awkward. Using 'will I be able to know' correctly expresses future ability. 'Or anything' is vague; 'or anything else' is clearer.

× Well after completing my study my future work plan will be in the hospital because I am from medical stream.

✓ Well, after completing my studies, my future work plan will be to work in a hospital because I am from the medical stream.

'Completing my study' should be 'completing my studies' as 'studies' is plural here. Also, 'work plan will be in the hospital' is awkward; it should be 'work plan will be to work in a hospital'. 'Medical stream' needs the definite article 'the'.

× So after that I get a job in a well known hospital.

✓ So after that, I will get a job in a well-known hospital.

The sentence talks about a future event, so 'get' should be 'will get' to indicate future tense. 'Well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as an adjective.

× So yes I've I was thinking to do work in Canada in a well established hospital.

✓ So yes, I was thinking of working in Canada in a well-established hospital.

The phrase 'I've I was thinking' is incorrect; it should be 'I was thinking'. 'To do work' is better expressed as 'of working'. 'Well established' should be hyphenated as 'well-established'.