Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, tetapi Anda bisa membuatnya lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari pengulangan dan memperbaiki tata bahasa. Misalnya, Anda bisa langsung menyatakan status Anda dan menambahkan sedikit detail tentang sekolah Anda.

Example: I am currently a high school student at Santa Rosa High School, where I am focusing on preparing for my future studies.

Suggestion: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengucapan nama sekolah yang membingungkan. Sebaiknya jawab dengan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta perbaiki tata bahasa.

Example: I don't work at the moment because I am a student studying at Santoyo Said High School in Bali.

Suggestion: Jawaban Anda kurang relevan dengan pertanyaan dan kalimatnya tidak jelas. Anda perlu menjawab langsung tentang tempat kerja dan memberikan alasan yang spesifik dan logis. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas.

Example: Although I don't work, if I were to work at my school, I think it would be a good place because it has air conditioning and a quiet environment that helps me focus.

Suggestion: Jawaban Anda sulit dipahami karena tata bahasa dan pilihan kata yang kurang tepat. Sebaiknya gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas untuk menyatakan pendapat Anda tentang tempat kerja.

Example: Yes, I would like the place where I work because it has all the facilities I need and the people are friendly and helpful.

Suggestion: Jawaban Anda belum lengkap dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengucapan. Sebaiknya jelaskan rencana Anda dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan kosakata yang tepat.

Example: In the future, I plan to work in Australia as a digital marketer because I am interested in online business and marketing strategies.

× Actually, I'm not working, but I'm a student and I'm studied in Santoyo, said High school in Bali.

✓ Actually, I'm not working, but I'm a student and I study at Santoyo Said High School in Bali.

The phrase 'I'm studied' is incorrect because 'studied' is the past tense form. Since the student is currently studying, the present tense 'I study' should be used instead.

× Actually I am student at the moment in Santa Fe High School, that school is closed for studied for students because they provide us like AC and anything else to learn and more focused than the others.

✓ Actually, I am a student at the moment at Santa Fe High School. That school is closed for study for students because they provide us with AC and other facilities to help us learn and focus more than other schools.

The original sentence is a run-on and contains incorrect phrases such as 'closed for studied' and 'provide us like AC'. It should be split into two sentences, use 'closed for study', and 'provide us with AC' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I woke because that place profiles all of facility that I need an all of the people being harnessed and then come to me.

✓ Yes, I work there because that place provides all the facilities that I need and all the people are harnessed and come to me.

The word 'woke' is incorrect; it should be 'work'. 'Profiles' should be 'provides'. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match 'all of'. The sentence also has unclear parts but the main grammar issues are corrected here.

× I have a plan to work in Australia. Basically I want to be. Digital business or digital marketer? An I want to.

✓ I have a plan to work in Australia. Basically, I want to be in digital business or a digital marketer, and I want to...

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. 'I want to be.' should be connected to the next idea. 'An' is a typo for 'and'. The sentence needs to be completed or connected properly for clarity.