Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

Example: I am currently a student and have just completed my plus two with 85%. Besides studying, I also help my father with farming whenever he needs assistance.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence structure. Begin with a direct answer and then add details with linking words to make your response coherent.

Example: I work with my father on our family farm. Whenever he needs help, I join him at our farmhouse to assist with farming tasks.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you think it is a good place to work.

Example: In my opinion, farms are great places to work because they are clean and pollution-free. Moreover, working in such an environment is refreshing, and I would love to work there for my whole life if given the chance.

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural by avoiding awkward phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference.

Example: Yes, I like working at the farm because it is pollution-free and has a clean environment with fresh air. Additionally, I find it satisfying to work close to nature.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your plans logically and specifically.

Example: I have just completed my plus two and plan to continue my studies abroad. I am currently researching which country to choose, but eventually, I want to return to my own country to build my future.

× I just passed out my plus two class.

✓ I just passed my plus two class.

The phrase 'passed out' is incorrect here; 'passed out' means to lose consciousness. The correct past tense verb is 'passed' to indicate successfully completing the class.

× With the 85% but I also work as I help my father in farming and whenever he needs my help I always present there.

✓ With 85%, but I also work by helping my father in farming, and whenever he needs my help, I am always present there.

The preposition 'with' should not have 'the' before '85%'. Also, 'work as I help' is incorrect; 'work by helping' is appropriate. 'I always present there' lacks a verb; it should be 'I am always present there'.

× As I told already told you that my father is a farmer and whenever he needs my help I work for him and we work together at our farm house.

✓ As I already told you, my father is a farmer, and whenever he needs my help, I work for him and we work together at our farmhouse.

The phrase 'As I told already told you' is redundant; 'As I already told you' is correct. 'Farm house' is better written as one word 'farmhouse'. Commas are needed for clarity.

× In my opinion farms our cultivates is a good place to work, could be goals with.

✓ In my opinion, farms or cultivates are good places to work, could be goals with.

The phrase 'farms our cultivates' is incorrect; likely meant 'farms or cultivates'. 'Could be goals with' is unclear and likely incorrect; needs clarification or removal.

× They are very clear and pollution free places and if I get chance to work there for my life then I will do it.

✓ They are very clean and pollution-free places, and if I get a chance to work there for my life, then I will do it.

'Clear' is incorrect to describe places; 'clean' is appropriate. 'Pollution free' should be hyphenated as 'pollution-free'. 'Get chance' needs an article 'a chance'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work more because of its pollution free place and it has a clean environment and clean air.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work more because of its pollution-free environment and clean air.

'Pollution free place' is redundant; 'pollution-free environment' is better. Repetition of 'clean' is unnecessary; 'clean environment and air' suffices.

× Or also this said, it provides satisfaction of working with nature.

✓ Also, it provides the satisfaction of working with nature.

'Or also this said' is incorrect and unnecessary. Starting with 'Also' is sufficient. 'Satisfaction of working' is correct with 'the' article.

× Actually I have just completed my +2 plus and then I want to continue my further studies and I rode and I am too having research on choosing country and then I want to came back to my own country for my further life.

✓ Actually, I have just completed my +2, and then I want to continue my further studies. I am also researching about choosing a country, and then I want to come back to my own country for my future life.

'+2 plus' is redundant; '+2' suffices. 'I rode' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'I am too having research' should be 'I am also researching'. 'Choosing country' needs an article 'a country'. 'Want to came back' should be 'want to come back'. 'Further life' is better as 'future life'.