Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to form complete sentences and avoid trailing off. Also, be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add brief supporting details.

Example: I work as a performance marketing specialist and have been in this field for six years. Currently, I am employed at a company in the coupons and deals industry, where I focus on optimizing advertising campaigns to increase sales.

Suggestion: Your answer is mostly clear but could be improved by using correct grammar and linking words to make it more natural and coherent.

Example: Our company is located in the Porto district of Shanghai, which is very close to my apartment. It takes me almost half an hour to commute there.

Suggestion: Your answer is fragmented and lacks fluency. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about why you think it's a good place to work.

Example: Yes, I think it is a good place to work. First of all, the pay is satisfactory, which supports my personal life financially. In addition, my colleagues are very kind and collaborative, making the work environment pleasant.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

Example: Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is very quiet and relaxing. We all sit together in the office, and there is free coffee available, which makes the atmosphere comfortable.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas in full sentences and be specific about your future plans. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: I want to improve my skills in my field, so I plan to pursue a master's degree in majors like marketing or business administration.

× I work as a performance marketing specialist and have been in this field for six years and currently I employed in a. Company in coupons and deals industry where I focus on using my ads optimization skills to.

✓ I work as a performance marketing specialist and have been in this field for six years and currently I am employed in a company in the coupons and deals industry where I focus on using my ads optimization skills.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'employed' to form the present continuous passive voice. 'Employed' here is a past participle used in passive construction, so it requires 'am' to be grammatically correct.

× Our company located in Porto district of Shanghai and it's very close to my apartment, almost half an hour to commute.

✓ Our company is located in the Porto district of Shanghai and it's very close to my apartment, almost half an hour to commute.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'company' to correctly form the present simple passive voice 'is located'. Without 'is', the sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical.

× Our company located in Porto district of Shanghai and it's very close to my apartment, almost half an hour to commute.

✓ Our company is located in the Porto district of Shanghai and it's very close to my apartment, almost half an hour's commute.

The phrase 'almost half an hour to commute' is awkward. The correct expression is 'almost half an hour's commute' to indicate the duration of the commute as a noun phrase.

× First of all on a pay as well, because in my opinion a good work should be supportive to your personal life financially.

✓ First of all, on pay as well, because in my opinion good work should be supportive to your personal life financially.

The phrase 'on a pay' is incorrect; it should be 'on pay' without the article 'a'. Also, 'a good work' is incorrect because 'work' is uncountable; it should be 'good work' without 'a'.

× And my colleagues are very. All kind and collaborative.

✓ And my colleagues are all very kind and collaborative.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary punctuation. 'All kind' should be 'all very kind' to correctly modify 'colleagues' and the period after 'very' is incorrect.

× Yes, I like there.

✓ Yes, I like it there.

The pronoun 'there' cannot be used alone as the object of 'like'. The correct form is 'like it there' where 'it' refers to the place.

× Because the work environment is very quiet and we all sit in the office and the and we have free coffee and the work environment is quite. Relaxing, I think.

✓ Because the work environment is very quiet and we all sit in the office, and we have free coffee, and the work environment is quite relaxing, I think.

The sentence has unnecessary periods and awkward breaks. 'Quite. Relaxing' should be 'quite relaxing' as a continuous phrase. Also, conjunctions should be properly used to connect clauses.

× I want to improve myself in the relevant field so I want to pursue a masters degree in sub in majors like. A marketing or. Upon administration.

✓ I want to improve myself in the relevant field, so I want to pursue a master's degree in subjects like marketing or business administration.

The phrase 'pursue a masters degree in sub in majors like. A marketing or. Upon administration.' is fragmented and incorrect. 'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. 'Sub in majors' is incorrect; it should be 'subjects like'. 'Upon administration' is a mishearing or typo for 'business administration'.