购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意図は伝わるが、文法ミスや冗長さが目立ちます。まず主題文を明確にし、理由や頻度などの詳しい具体例を一貫した文で続けてください。例えば「it helps us and it's our lives and be fulfilling」は不自然なので「shopping makes me feel fulfilled」など自然な表現に直しましょう。また、文の終わりが途切れている箇所（"or."）を避け、最大5文以内で完結させてください。さらに接続詞（because, for example, sometimes）を使って論理の流れを明示してください。

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it makes me feel relaxed and fulfilled. For example, I usually go shopping with my friends or family at the weekend to buy clothes and occasionally small gifts. I like browsing different stores to find new styles, and I often try on items to see how they fit before I buy them.

建議: 答えは理由を述べているが、いくつかの冗長表現（"based on the product and quality of the products"や"expense exposures"）と文の未完了が見られます。より自然な語彙（budget, value, quality, save money）を使い、接続詞で文を繋げて短く明瞭に答えてください。例を追加すると説得力が増します。

範例: Yes, I always compare prices because I have a limited budget and want good value for money. I usually check the quality and read reviews online, and if two items are similar I choose the cheaper one or wait for a sale to save money.

建議: 構成は良いが最後の文が途中で終わっており、詳細が不足しています。対比（on the other hand）を使っている点は良好なので、その後に結果や理由（時間がかかる、好みが多いなど）を加えて結論で締めてください。文の数は3〜4文でまとめ、具体例（どんな服や決め手）を挙げるとさらに良いです。

範例: It depends on the product. For groceries I can decide quickly because I usually buy the same items, but with clothes I often try on several outfits because I care about the fit and style. As a result, choosing clothes usually takes me longer than choosing food.

建議: 意見は明確だが、表現がやや不自然で文が途中で終わっています（"when I go some sales or bargains"）。「sales or bargains」は名詞の使い方を修正し、具体例を完結させてください。加えて、1〜2の具体的な比較例（ブランド品とノーブランド、材料や仕上げの違い）を述べると説得力が増します。

範例: I don't think expensive products are always better because you can find high-quality items at lower prices. For example, I often buy clothes during sales and find durable pieces that look good, while some expensive items may only be costly because of the brand.

× Yes, absolutely. I like shopping because it helps us and it's our lives and be fulfilling.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I like shopping because it helps me and it is fulfilling in my life.

The student used 'us' and 'our lives' which are incorrect when referring to their personal experience; use 'me' and 'my life'. Also 'be fulfilling' is incorrect verb form; use 'is fulfilling'. Use of correct personal pronouns and verb agreement makes the sentence clear.

× For example, on the weekends I usually go shopping with my friends or with my family to buy some clothes or.

✓ For example, on the weekends I usually go shopping with my friends or my family to buy some clothes.

The sentence ends with 'or' making it incomplete. Remove the trailing 'or' or finish the alternative. Also 'with my friends or my family' is more concise than repeating 'with'. Ensure sentences are complete.

× Yes, absolutely. Because my budget is limited when I shop, I often compare the prices based on the product and quality of the products, which helps me to reduce my expense exposures and.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Because my budget is limited when I shop, I often compare prices based on the product and its quality, which helps me reduce my expenses.

The original has an incomplete ending and awkward phrasing 'expense exposures'. Remove unnecessary words and finish the sentence properly. Use 'prices' without 'the' and 'reduce my expenses' for natural expression.

× I think it depends on the product.

✓ I think it depends on the product.

This sentence is correct as written. No grammatical change is necessary; it correctly uses 'depends on' with a singular noun.

× For example, when I buy some groceries, I can immediately decide what I buy.

✓ For example, when I buy groceries, I can immediately decide what to buy.

Use the infinitive 'to buy' after 'decide what' to form a grammatically correct clause. Also 'some groceries' can be simplified to 'groceries' for natural English.

× On the other hand, when I choose clothes, I frequently try on many things and.

✓ On the other hand, when I choose clothes, I frequently try on many items.

Sentence was incomplete ending with 'and'. Replace with a complete phrase such as 'try on many items'. Avoid dangling conjunctions.

× To be honest, I do not think that because we can find good quality of things even with cheaper prices.

✓ To be honest, I do not think so because we can find good-quality items even at lower prices.

Use 'do not think so' to respond to the question naturally. 'Good quality of things' is unidiomatic; use 'good-quality items'. Use 'at lower prices' instead of 'with cheaper prices'. Maintain present tense.

× For example, when I go some sales or bargains, I.

✓ For example, when I go to sales or bargain events, I often find good deals.

Original lacks 'to' after 'go' and ends abruptly. Use 'go to sales' and complete the sentence with a verb phrase. 'Bargains' as a noun requires context; 'bargain events' or 'bargain sales' is clearer.