购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid vague phrases (e.g. “sort of”) and grammatical errors (e.g. missing articles, incorrect verb forms). Use linking words like "however" to show contrast and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Not really — I prefer not to shop now. I loved shopping as a child because it felt exciting and energizing; however, as an adult I find large shopping malls stressful and uncomfortable, so I avoid them when I can.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then a clear reason. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g. "I apologize the price over qualities") and fragment sentences. Use linking words like "because" to connect reason to statement, and be specific about what you compare and how.

範例: Yes, I usually compare prices before buying because I have a limited budget. For example, I check different stores and online reviews to make sure I get the best value without sacrificing basic quality.

建議: Start with a clear short answer then give one specific supporting detail. Correct small errors like "list up" to "make a list" and use a linking word such as "because" to connect ideas. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

範例: Not really — I decide quickly because I make a shopping list before I go. This helps me stay focused and avoid impulse purchases.

建議: Give a direct opinion in the first sentence, then support it with a specific reason or example. Fix grammar issues (remove extra words like "have" or "in general") and use linking words like "but" or "however" to show nuance.

範例: I don't think expensive products are always better. While pricier items sometimes offer better features or build quality, cheaper alternatives can provide similar performance for everyday use, depending on the product and brand.

× I used to love shopping as a child because it gives me sort of energy and makes me feel excited.

✓ I used to love shopping as a child because it gave me a sort of energy and made me feel excited.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence begins with 'I used to' which refers to a past habitual action, so the verbs describing feelings should be in the past tense ('gave', 'made') rather than present. Also add the article 'a' before 'sort of energy' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Keep time frames consistent; when you use 'used to' use past tense verbs for related descriptions.

× But as an adult I grew to dislike because I found it stressful and uncomfortable to stay in a big shopping mall.

✓ But as an adult I grew to dislike shopping because I found it stressful and uncomfortable to stay in a big shopping mall.

Missing object: 'grew to dislike' requires an object (what you disliked). Add 'shopping' to complete the verb phrase. The rest is correct past-tense narrative matching 'grew' and 'found'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs that require objects have them.

× Yes, absolutely, yes, to a certain level. I apologize the price over qualities.

✓ Yes, absolutely, to a certain extent. I prioritize price over quality.

Multiple issues: 'to a certain level' is more naturally 'to a certain extent' (preposition/idiom choice). 'I apologize the price over qualities' is incorrect: likely meant 'I prioritize price over quality.' 'Prioritize ... over ...' uses correct preposition and noun forms ('quality' singular as an uncountable concept). Also remove redundant 'yes'. Suggestion: Use common collocations: 'to a certain extent' and 'prioritize X over Y'.

× Because I usually don't have enough allowance to purchase.

✓ Because I usually don't have enough allowance to make purchases.

Incomplete clause: 'to purchase' needs an object (what to purchase) or should be noun form 'make purchases.' Using 'make purchases' completes the idea. Also 'allowance' is fine; use plural 'purchases' for generality. Suggestion: Use noun forms like 'make purchases' or provide a direct object after 'purchase'.

× Not really, it takes little time to decide what to buy because before going to shop I usually list up the goods that I would buy, so it's not difficult for me.

✓ Not really, it takes little time to decide what to buy because before going shopping I usually list the goods I will buy, so it's not difficult for me.

Use correct gerund: 'going shopping' is the standard form, not 'going to shop.' 'List up' is nonstandard — use 'list' or 'make a list of.' Also verb tense: 'I would buy' is conditional and unnecessary; use 'I will buy' or present simple 'I buy' for planned actions. 'List the goods I will buy' fits the context. Suggestion: Use 'going shopping', say 'list the goods' or 'make a list', and keep verb tenses consistent for planned actions.

× Well, I think it varies by brands and products, but usually in general more expensive products are have better functions and features.

✓ Well, I think it varies by brand and product, but usually more expensive products have better functions and features.

Redundancy: 'usually in general' is repetitive; choose one (here 'usually'). 'Varies by brands and products' should be singular collective: 'brand and product' or plural with consistent form ('brands and products' is acceptable but better 'brand and product'). Main error: 'are have' is ungrammatical — use 'have' to match plural subject 'products'. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid double verbs; use 'have' with plural subjects.