购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı, gereksiz tekrarlar ve anlamsız ifadeler çıkarılmalı. Detay verirken spesifik örnekler ve bağlaçlar kullanın. Örneğin hangi uygulamadan bahsettiğinizi, neden geleneksel alışverişi sevmediğinizi ve ‘special fashion’ derken ne kastettiğinizi açıklayın. Cümle sayısını 3-4 kısa cümlede tutun ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin.

範例: I enjoy shopping, but not in traditional stores because I prefer buying second-hand or discounted items online. For example, I often use a resale app where I can find unique vintage clothes at low prices. This style suits me because I like one-of-a-kind pieces rather than mass-market fashion.

建議: Cevap doğrudan ve mantıklı ancak dilbilgisi ve anlam netliği zayıf. ‘Former and the later’ gibi belirsiz ifadeler yerine açık karşılaştırmalar kullanın. Ayrıca fiyat karşılaştırmasının nedenlerini (bütçe, kalite) belirtin ve bağlaçlarla akışı güçlendirin.

範例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want the best value for money. For instance, I check several online shops and compare the same item’s cost and shipping fees. If one seller is cheaper, I usually buy from them to save money.

建議: Cevap mantıklı ama cümleler dağınık ve bazı ifadeler anlamsız. ‘A lot of options’ ifadesini somutlaştırın ve örnekte kullandığınız uygulamanın adını ve süreci net anlatın. Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisini kurun ve gereksiz hikâye anlatımından kaçının.

範例: Yes, I often find it hard because there are so many brands and styles. For example, while browsing a resale app last week I found dozens of similar jackets, so I hesitated before choosing the cheapest one. In the end, I compared reviews and picked the best-reviewed option.

建議: Cevap bitmemiş ve kafa karıştırıcı. Net bir görüş (evet/ hayır) ile başlayın, ardından sebepler verin ve örnekleyin. ‘Image and vibes’ gibi ifadeleri açıklayın: kalite, markanın itibarı, malzeme gibi somut kriterlerden bahsedin.

範例: No, expensive products are not always better. Quality can vary, and sometimes cheaper items offer good value. For example, a mid-priced jacket made from high-quality fabric might last longer than an expensive branded one bought for its logo rather than its materials.

× Yes, I like shopping but not in a traditional way because I chose a shopping for a dollop application which is which is you need to purchase from there some kind of outdates or rates or things. So my fashion is special for.

✓ Yes, I like shopping but not in a traditional way because I choose to shop on a shopping app where you need to buy second-hand or discounted items. So my fashion is special.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb forms and word choices. 'Chose' is past tense but the speaker means a habitual action, so use 'choose'. 'A shopping' is incorrect noun phrase; use 'to shop on a shopping app' or 'on a shopping application'. 'Dollop application' is unclear; likely 'shopping app'. 'Outdates or rates' is incorrect; use 'second-hand or discounted items'. Also removed redundant 'which is which is' and corrected overall structure. Suggestion: use present simple for habits (I choose), use clear noun phrases and common collocations (second-hand, discounted, shopping app).

× Yes, I compare prices when I shop to other clothes.

✓ Yes, I compare prices of other clothes when I shop.

The phrase 'compare prices when I shop to other clothes' uses incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'compare prices of other clothes' or 'compare prices with other clothes'. For clarity, place the prepositional phrase after the verb: 'compare prices of other clothes'. Suggestion: use 'compare something with something' or 'compare the price of X to Y'.

× Also I compare prices the former and the later.

✓ Also I compare the prices of earlier items and later ones.

The original uses 'the former and the later' incorrectly to refer to time/order. Use 'earlier items and later ones' or 'previous and later items'. Also add 'the prices of' to make the noun phrase complete. Suggestion: use correct comparative references (earlier/later, previous/next) and include the noun being compared.

× So when I want to purchase something in an online shopping, I convince the seller the cheapest.

✓ So when I want to purchase something online, I try to get the seller to offer the cheapest price.

'In an online shopping' is an incorrect prepositional phrase; use 'online' or 'on an online shopping site'. 'Convince the seller the cheapest' is ungrammatical and missing a verb structure; use 'try to get the seller to offer the cheapest price' or 'negotiate the price down'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns for persuading someone ('get someone to do something', 'convince someone to do something').

× Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are a lot of options to choose.

✓ Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are a lot of options.

The phrase 'options to choose' is redundant after 'a lot of options'. Use 'a lot of options' or 'a lot to choose from'. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy: say 'a lot of options' or 'a lot to choose from'.

× For instance, Once Upon a time I was surfing on the dollar application, which is a close application.

✓ For instance, once upon a time I was browsing a shopping app, which was a closed app.

'Surfing on the dollar application' is unclear and uses wrong prepositions and nouns. Use 'browsing a shopping app' or 'surfing a shopping app'. 'Dollar application' is likely wrong; 'shopping app' fits context. 'Close application' should be 'closed app' or 'private app'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for using apps (browse, shop, use) and correct adjective forms ('closed app').

× I need to purchase something and then I find the cheaper rest.

✓ I needed to purchase something and then I found the cheapest item.

Tense inconsistency: the narrative 'Once upon a time' requires past tense ('needed', 'found'). Also 'the cheaper rest' is ungrammatical; use 'the cheapest item' or 'the cheapest one'. Suggestion: match past tense for past stories and use superlative 'cheapest' when comparing more than two items.

× Not because according to who and which features makes these clothes better because of they expensive for me to illustrate, I can choose my clothes because of their image and vibes, but according to.

✓ Not always; it depends on who is judging and which features make the clothes better. For me, I choose clothes based on their appearance and vibe.

The original sentence has multiple pronoun and clause errors: 'according to who' should be 'it depends on who is judging', 'which features makes' should be 'which features make' (subject-verb agreement), 'because of they expensive' is wrong pronoun and word order; use 'because they are expensive' or better restructure. The phrase 'for me to illustrate' is unnecessary. The sentence fragment 'but according to' is incomplete. Suggestion: break into two sentences, use 'it depends on', ensure subject-verb agreement ('features make'), and use correct pronouns and adjective order.