购物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with brief explanations. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repetition. Use varied vocabulary (clothes, accessories, shoes) and a linking phrase to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I especially like buying clothes and accessories because they let me update my style, and I also shop for shoes since comfortable shoes are important for my daily commute.

建議: Provide a clear reason and one supporting detail. Use linking words (because, so) and correct collocations (compare prices, check prices online). Remove hesitations and finish the thought.

範例: Yes, I always compare prices, especially online, because some shops charge more for the same item, so I check different stores to find the best value and save money.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific reason and one example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and avoid repetition and fillers. Limit to about 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often find it hard to choose because I like many different items; for example, when I shop for clothes I usually like several styles, so I take a long time to decide which is best.

建議: Give a balanced opinion rather than an absolute statement. Start with a clear stance (I don't always think so), then explain with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (however, sometimes, because).

範例: Not always. Sometimes expensive products have better materials or warranties, but cheaper items can offer similar performance; for example, I buy mid-range headphones because they give good sound without the high price of premium brands.

× Yes, I like shopping. Uh, actually I love shopping many things like uh, cloth ornaments and shoes and uh, I'm most of the time I like uh, pie and new clothes and new clothes.

✓ Yes, I like shopping. Actually I love shopping for many things, like clothes, accessories, and shoes. Most of the time I like to buy new clothes and sometimes small items.

The student misused 'many' with 'shopping' and 'cloth ornaments' (wrong collocation). Also repeated 'new clothes' and used awkward word order. Use 'shopping for many things' and countable nouns 'clothes' and 'accessories'. Use 'most of the time I like to buy' for natural verb choice and order.

× Yes I definitely the computer prices uh when I shop because uh many shop uh uh one some uh extra money yeah extra money that is very uh tough for uh general people and uh that's why I.

✓ Yes, I definitely compare prices online when I shop because many shops charge extra money, which is difficult for ordinary people, and that's why I do it.

Original sentence lacks verb 'compare' and misuses 'the computer prices'. Use 'compare prices online' or 'compare prices on a computer'. Replace vague pronouns and filler words with 'which' to introduce a relative clause. Also complete the sentence with 'and that's why I do it'.

× Yes, it is very difficult to make choice when I shop because, uh, uh, many things I like That's right. And uh, that's why, uh, it is very it is very difficult, uh, make choice anything and it shop when.

✓ Yes, it is very difficult to make choices when I shop because there are many things I like. That's why it is hard for me to decide what to buy.

Problems: missing plural 'choices', missing 'there are' to introduce quantity, incorrect word order 'many things I like'. Simplify and correct clause structure: 'make choices', 'there are many things I like', and 'decide what to buy' for clarity.

× Yes, I think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because. When a product expensive then it is good product and it is well for every people. That's why.

✓ I think expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. When a product is expensive, it is often of good quality, but that does not mean it is suitable for everyone.

Original has a sentence fragment 'because.' and incorrect clause structure 'When a product expensive then'. Need verb 'is' after subject. Also 'every people' is wrong; use 'everyone' or 'all people'. Improve logical connection: expensive often implies better quality, but not always better for everyone.