交通— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Remove filler words (e.g., "uh") and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Also vary vocabulary: replace "a lot of" and "very important or essential" with more precise phrases.

範例: Yes, there are many crosswalks near my home because several schools and supermarkets are within walking distance. As a result, these crossings are vital for pedestrians’ safety, especially children and shoppers.

建議: Clarify and reorganize the answer into two concise points linked by a cohesive connector. Avoid absolute statements that may sound unrealistic (e.g., "all the vendors")—use moderated language. Improve grammar and word order (e.g., "which causes traffic" → "which causes congestion").

範例: Yes. First, I would encourage vendors to move inside shops or designated stalls because roadside stalls often block traffic and slow vehicles down. Second, I would improve parking management by marking bays and enforcing rules to reduce illegal parking and congestion.

× Yes, there are a lot of, uh, crosswalks around where I live because there are lots of schools, supermarkets, and many establishments around my home. So crosswalks are very important or essential to the people where I live.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks around where I live because there are many schools, supermarkets, and other establishments near my home. So crosswalks are very important and essential for the people who live here.

The original sentence uses 'many' and 'lots of' redundantly and mixes 'around my home' with 'around where I live'; also 'to the people where I live' incorrectly uses 'where' for people. Use 'many' for countable nouns and 'other' instead of 'many establishments' to avoid repetition, 'near my home' is clearer, and 'for the people who live here' correctly refers to people. Suggestion: avoid redundant quantifiers and use relative clause 'who live here' for people. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Definitely I want all the vendors to go inside the establishments so they won't block the road and which causes traffic and I also want the people to organize all the parking lots.

✓ Definitely, I want all the vendors to go inside the establishments so they won't block the road and cause traffic, and I also want people to organize the parking lots.

The phrase 'and which causes traffic' is an incorrect relative clause and breaks sentence flow. Replace with the verb phrase 'and cause traffic' to link actions correctly. Also 'the people' is unnecessary; use 'people' and 'all the parking lots' is odd—'the parking lots' is more natural. Suggestion: connect causes logically with verbs and avoid unnecessary definite articles. Grammar problem type ID:16