历史— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear direct topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct tense and clearer reference (e.g., "in ninth grade"). Add one or two specific details and keep it within 2–3 concise sentences. Also correct grammar: say "contained" or "was about", and avoid repeating phrases like "I have started".

範例: Yes. I began studying history in ninth grade; my textbook mainly covered the history of Bangladesh, especially events from 1971.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence describing your main methods, then briefly support with specific examples. Use linking words (e.g., "also", "besides") correctly and fix article and plural forms ("documentaries", "elderly people"). Keep sentences concise and natural.

範例: I learn history mainly by reading books. Besides, I watch documentaries for visual context, and I often talk to older family members who share first-hand stories about Bangladesh and other world events.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence stating the main benefit, then give two specific supporting points with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "benefits of learning history", "how glorious our past generations were") and avoid vague phrases like "lifestyle" without detail—specify which aspects of lifestyle you mean.

範例: Learning history helps us understand our identity and values. For example, it reveals our culture and heritage, and it shows how previous generations lived and overcame challenges, which can guide our decisions today.

建議: Provide one clear opinion sentence and follow with 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid run-on sentences and unfinished thoughts. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas, and finish your points (e.g., explain how history helps decision-making).

範例: Yes, learning history is important because it helps us know our roots and learn from past mistakes. For instance, understanding past conflicts and successes can guide national decisions and help individuals make better choices.

× I have started, I have started history.

✓ I started studying history.

The student used present perfect 'I have started' twice and an incorrect structure 'I have started history'. The intended meaning is past simple completed action 'I started studying history.' Use the past simple 'started' and the verb 'study' to express studying a subject. Avoid repeating the phrase.

× When I was in my 9th standard, I had a history book and the history book was full of Bangladesh history and also 1971 were was there.

✓ When I was in ninth grade, I had a history book that was full of Bangladesh's history and included information about 1971.

Several issues: '9th standard' is better as 'ninth grade' in natural English; 'the history book was full of Bangladesh history' requires a possessive or article: 'Bangladesh's history' or 'the history of Bangladesh'; '1971 were was there' is ungrammatical — use 'included information about 1971.' Rewrite for clarity and correct noun phrases and verb usage.

× I do learn history by reading books.

✓ I learn history by reading books.

Using 'do' here is unnecessary and unnatural in affirmative present tense. Use the simple present 'I learn' to describe habitual actions.

× Sometimes documentary also help me to learn about the history.

✓ Sometimes documentaries also help me learn about history.

'Documentary' should be plural 'documentaries' when speaking generally. 'Help' must agree with plural subject: 'help'. Drop 'the' before 'history' unless referring to a specific history; 'help me learn' is the natural collocation.

× At the same time sometimes elderly people know the history and by listening from them also I came to know about the history of Bangladesh and worldwide.

✓ At the same time, sometimes older people know the history, and by listening to them I also learned about the history of Bangladesh and the world.

Use 'older people' rather than 'elderly people' in this context. The correct preposition is 'listening to' not 'listening from.' Use past tense 'learned' to match 'came to know' (past experience). 'Worldwide' is an adverb; use 'the world' as a noun phrase 'history of the world.' Add commas for clarity.

× There are lots of benefit about learning a history.

✓ There are many benefits to learning history.

'Lots of benefit' is ungrammatical: use plural 'benefits' and quantifier 'many' or 'a lot of.' Use 'to learning history' or 'of learning history' rather than 'about learning a history.' Drop the indefinite article before 'history.'

× First of all, when you're learning about a history, you get to know about our culture, our heritage, and you'll get to know that how glorious our past generation was.

✓ First of all, when you learn history, you get to know our culture and heritage, and you learn how glorious our past generations were.

Remove unnecessary 'a' before 'history'. Use simple present 'you learn' for general statements. 'You'll get to know that how...' is ungrammatical; use 'you learn how...' 'past generation' should be plural 'past generations' to match general meaning. Keep consistent tense and simplify phrases.

× Also, you get an idea about the lifestyle.

✓ Also, you get an idea of the lifestyle.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'get an idea' (get an idea of something). 'About' is less natural here; article 'the' before 'lifestyle' is acceptable if referring to a specific lifestyle, but 'the lifestyle' fits better in context.

× Learning history is very important you have to know your roots so from learning history you will get to know about your roots, your past generation and everything about your country and worldwide and it's really important to set a move Also this history will help you to.

✓ Learning history is very important. You have to know your roots, so by learning history you will learn about your roots, your past generations, and about your country and the world. It is also important for making progress, and this history will help you do that.

The original is a run-on sentence with missing punctuation and unclear phrases ('set a move' is incorrect). Split into sentences, fix tense and articles, use 'by learning history' and 'past generations' plural. Replace 'worldwide' with 'the world.' Clarify 'set a move' to 'making progress' and finish the final clause 'help you do that.' Ensure each clause is complete and grammatically correct.