礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答自然，但有语法和连贯性小问题。需注意句子结构（例如“it depends their personalities”应为“it depends on their personalities”），并可用一两句补充说明挑选礼物的方式以更具体。最多保持5句。建议用连接词如“so”或“for example”来衔接。

範例: Yes, I am. I usually pick different gifts depending on the person’s personality and hobbies, so I try to match the gift to what they like. For example, last year I bought a furry toy for a friend because she loves animals, and she was really happy.

建議: 内容清楚但有语法错误与用词不精确（如“far away my friends”应为“far away from my friends”，“send birthday present”应复数或带冠词）。建议更简洁并加入连词以增强流畅性，同时给出一两个具体例子说明如何保持联系。

範例: Because I live far away from my friends, I usually send birthday presents, often small items like books or personalized cards, to keep in touch. I also send more thoughtful gifts for major festivals such as Lunar New Year, for example a box of local snacks.

建議: 结构清晰，回答直接但存在口语数字写法和小语法问题（如“2 expensive gifts”应为“too expensive”或“very expensive”）。可用连接词（first, second, because）更自然，并举例说明如何根据兴趣选择礼物。

範例: I usually consider two things when choosing a gift. First, my budget — as a student I can't afford very expensive presents. Second, the recipient’s interests and personality, because I want the gift to be meaningful; for example, I might choose a cookbook for someone who loves cooking.

建議: 回答有情感且具体，但有几个词汇错误（应为“friend's birthday”，“captions”而非“captains”），句子可更自然分段。建议修正所有者和拼写，并加一句说明制作过程或收到的反应以丰富内容。

範例: Yes, I have. Last year I made a handmade photo album for my close friend’s birthday using his favorite pictures and some captions describing the memories. He was really touched and said it was the most meaningful gift he had received.

建議: 回答简明且观点明确，逻辑清晰。可以稍微增加一个对比或个人短例来更有说服力，但要保持简洁并使用连词如“because”或“for example”。

範例: No, I don't think so, because the thought behind a present matters more than its price. A thoughtful gift can show care and understanding; for example, a handmade card with a personal message is more meaningful to me than an expensive item.

× I usually choose various gifts for different people and it depends their personalities and hobbies.

✓ I usually choose various gifts for different people and it depends on their personalities and hobbies.

此处缺少介词“on”。英语短语“depend on”表示“取决于”，必须加介词。建议记住固定搭配“depend on ...”。

× Since I live far away my friends, I usually send birthday present, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

✓ Since I live far away from my friends, I usually send birthday presents, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

“live far away”后面若接具体对象需加介词“from”。此外“birthday present”在此句为泛指且为可数名词，应使用复数或不定冠词，根据语境改为复数“presents”。建议注意“live far away from sb.”和可数名词的单复数一致。

× Since I live far away my friends, I usually send birthday present, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

✓ Since I live far away from my friends, I usually send birthday presents, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

“present”为可数名词，表示多次为朋友们送礼，应使用复数“presents”。注意可数名词单复数的正确使用。

× I usually choose various gifts for different people and it depends their personalities and hobbies.

✓ I usually choose various gifts for different people and it depends on their personalities and hobbies.

主语是“it”（形式主语，指代选择礼物的方式或结果），谓语动词“depends”形式正确，但句子缺少介词“on”。此处也要确保谓语与主语一致（第三人称单数动词“depends”正确）。

× Since I live far away my friends, I usually send birthday present, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

✓ Since I live far away from my friends, I usually send birthday presents, often small items like books or personalized cards to keep in touch.

“birthday present”在此处应为复数，或在特指某一次时使用不定冠词“a”。句中表示经常性动作，用复数更自然。

× I usually consider two things when choosing a gift. 1st is my budget. As a student, I can't afford 2 expensive gifts.

✓ I usually consider two things when choosing a gift. The first is my budget. As a student, I can't afford two expensive gifts.

“1st”应写为“The first”作句子开头成分更正式；数字“2”在正式写作中应写成单词“two”。另注意“the first”与后文并列结构一致。

× I usually consider two things when choosing a gift. 1st is my budget. As a student, I can't afford 2 expensive gifts.

✓ I usually consider two things when choosing a gift. The first is my budget. As a student, I can't afford two expensive gifts.

“The first”作为序数词需要定冠词“the”。另外书写数字时在句子中用单词形式更合适。

× Yes I have, last year I made a handmade photo album for my close friends birthday using his favorite pictures and some captains.

✓ Yes I have. Last year I made a handmade photo album for my close friend's birthday using his favorite pictures and some captions.

“close friends birthday”缺少所有格，应为“close friend's birthday”。另外“captains”拼写错误，应为“captions”（照片说明/标题）。建议注意所有格的使用和常见单词拼写。

× Yes I have, last year I made a handmade photo album for my close friends birthday using his favorite pictures and some captains.

✓ Yes, I have. Last year I made a handmade photo album for my close friend's birthday using his favorite pictures and some captions.

原句为并列两个独立句却用逗号连接，造成逗号 splice（逗号连接两个独立分句）。应分为两句或用连词连接。建议使用短句以避免逗号 splice。

× He was really touched and said it was the most meaningful gift.

✓ He was really touched and said it was the most meaningful gift.

句子本身语法正确，无需改动。此处列出以确认代词使用正确——“He”指代前文的朋友，使用恰当。

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

句子语法结构正确。若需要更自然可改为“Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?”，但原句符合语法规则，故不修改。

× I also choose thoughtful present for major festivals such as Lunar New Year.

✓ I also choose thoughtful presents for major festivals such as the Lunar New Year.

“present”应为复数“presents”因为是泛指多个节日的礼物；“Lunar New Year”前通常加定冠词“the”。建议注意可数名词单复数和特定节日用冠词。

× For example, last year I bought a furry toy for my friend because she loves animals.

✓ For example, last year I bought a furry toy for my friend because she loves animals.

句子语法正确，第三人称单数动词“loves”使用正确，无需修改。