礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (“uh”, “umm”) and small grammar errors (use plural/singular correctly and simpler structures). Use linking words like “because” and “for example” clearly.

範例: Yes, I consider myself good at giving gifts. I choose meaningful presents for close family members and my partner because I want to show appreciation for their support. For example, when someone helped me during a difficult time, I gave a thoughtful gift to thank them.

建議: Open with a direct topic sentence and add specific timing and one example. Improve grammar (use articles and correct verb forms) and connect ideas with linking phrases such as “for example” or “also”. Avoid pausing words.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions and also as encouragement. For example, I always give presents for birthdays and anniversaries, and I sometimes give a small gift when a friend is working hard or facing a challenge.

建議: Make your points clearer and correct grammar: say you consider the person’s preferences rather than price. Explain reasons with one cohesive example and use linking words like “because” or “so”. Avoid fragmented sentences.

範例: When choosing a gift, I focus on the recipient’s preferences rather than the price because I want it to be meaningful. For instance, I prefer giving keepsakes over food, so they can keep the item and remember me whenever they see it.

建議: Be more structured: state clearly that you have made handmade gifts, give a specific example and explain why it matters. Reduce hesitation and fix tense and word order errors. Use linking words like “also” or “because”.

範例: Yes, I have. In the first two years of my relationship I often made handmade gifts, such as DIY cards, even on ordinary days. I believe handmade gifts are valuable because they show effort and create a personal memory.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, then support it with a concise reason and an example. Correct word order and choose natural phrasing like “express feelings” and “the person’s preferences”. Avoid repetition.

範例: I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better; the most important thing is whether the gift matches the person’s preferences. For example, a thoughtful, inexpensive present chosen for someone’s hobby can feel more meaningful than an expensive item they don’t like.

× I think I am a good uh gift giver for my loving ones because I always try to give a best valuable gift for someone special to me especially for my family members or my boyfriend or some one who help me.

✓ I think I am a good gift giver to my loved ones because I always try to give the best valuable gift to someone special to me, especially my family members, my boyfriend, or someone who helps me.

Use 'to' not 'for' with 'giver' and 'to' with 'give a gift to someone'. Replace 'loving ones' with 'loved ones' (adjective form) and 'some one' with 'someone'. Use 'helps' (present tense third person) with 'someone who helps me'. Use articles: 'the best valuable gift'. Remove filler words. Ensure prepositions correctly link verbs and objects.

× I always try to give a best valuable gift for someone special to me especially for my family members or my boyfriend or some one who help me.

✓ I always try to give the best valuable gift to someone special to me, especially my family members, my boyfriend, or someone who helps me.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'best' ('the best'). 'A best' is incorrect. Also use 'to' not 'for' when indicating the recipient of a gift.

× In my difficult times, I never think twice, uh, when I need to give a treatment for them.

✓ In my difficult times, I never think twice when I need to give them support.

'Give a treatment for them' is incorrect in this context; 'treatment' implies medical care. Use 'give them support' or 'treat them' depending on meaning. Also remove unnecessary 'uh' and ensure pronoun placement: 'give them support' is natural.

× As I mentioned in the special occasion, for example birthday or anniversary, I never forget give a gift for them and I like appreciate them.

✓ As I mentioned, on special occasions such as birthdays or anniversaries, I never forget to give them a gift and I like to show my appreciation.

Use plural 'occasions' and 'birthdays'. Use 'on' with 'occasions'. Insert 'to' after 'forget' ('forget to give'). Use 'give them a gift' not 'give a gift for them'. 'I like appreciate them' is ungrammatical; use 'I like to show my appreciation' or 'I like to appreciate them'.

× Uh, on their hard working times I try to give a umm. Something to encourage them.

✓ During their hard work, I try to give them something to encourage them.

Use 'during' instead of 'on' for periods of activity. 'Hard working times' is awkward; 'during their hard work' or 'when they are working hard' is better. Place pronoun 'them' after 'give' ('give them something'). Remove filler words.

× I consider about their preference rather than value of the gift and always try to give a memorable thing.

✓ I consider their preferences rather than the value of the gift and always try to give something memorable.

Do not use 'consider about'; use 'consider' + object. Use plural 'preferences'. Include 'the' before 'value'. 'A memorable thing' is awkward; 'something memorable' is more natural.

× And I usually not give a food item or something like that because foods are quickly. Were after 8.

✓ And I usually do not give food items or things like that because food spoils quickly.

Use auxiliary 'do' for negation: 'do not give'. Use 'food items' plural. 'Foods are quickly' is incorrect; use 'food spoils quickly' or 'perishable'. Remove unclear 'Were after 8' which appears to be nonsense and is omitted.

× I need to keep them something to Remember Me when they saw that thing.

✓ I need to give them something to remember me by when they see it.

Correct pronoun and verb forms: 'give them something' (indirect object), 'to remember me by' (phrase), and 'when they see it' (present tense for general situations). Capitalization removed from 'Remember Me'.

× Yes, I used to do uh, specially first two years of our relationship, I, I made some hand gift for my best friend, boyfriend, uh, even it is not a special day to us, I try to make some DIY card as a memory I gifted him.

✓ Yes, I used to, especially during the first two years of our relationship, I made some handmade gifts for my boyfriend; even if it was not a special day, I tried to make DIY cards as keepsakes and gave them to him.

Use 'during' with time period. 'Hand gift' should be 'handmade gifts'. Maintain past tense consistently: 'used to' and 'made', 'tried', 'gave'. 'Even it is not' should be 'even if it was not'. 'I gifted him' is unnatural; use 'gave them to him'.

× Keep it with him as a memory and I'll I think there's a good very important valuable because someone put effort to make something for.

✓ He kept it with him as a memento, and I think it's very important and valuable because someone put effort into making something for you.

Rewrite for clarity: 'Keep it with him' should be past 'He kept it with him' if referring to previous action. Use 'memento' or 'keepsake'. 'Good very important valuable' is incorrect order and choice of adjectives; use 'very important and valuable'. Correct preposition 'put effort into making' and finish the clause with the object ('for you' or 'for him'). Ensure tense and pronouns are consistent.

× I think uh, express better feeling is good rather than the amount of the value of the gift because uh, if you gift something very expensive, but it cannot uh express someone feeling you failed.

✓ I think expressing feelings better is more important than the monetary value of the gift because if you give something very expensive but it cannot express someone's feelings, you have failed.

Use gerund 'expressing' as subject. 'Amount of the value' is redundant; use 'monetary value'. Use 'give' instead of 'gift' as a verb is acceptable but 'give' is more natural. Use possessive 'someone's feelings'. Use 'have failed' or 'you fail' for clarity.

× I always. Prefer the people preference, person's preference after buying gift for someone.

✓ I always prefer the person's preference when buying a gift for someone.

Remove incorrect period. Use singular or possessive correctly: 'the person's preference' or 'people's preferences'. Place phrases in natural order: 'prefer the person's preference when buying a gift'. Use 'for someone' at end for clarity.