礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear. Start with a topic sentence saying whether you are good at giving gifts, then give one clear supporting example with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. For example, when my friends come to a spa day I often give them small cosmetics like eyeshadow or eyebrow pencils. They usually appreciate these practical presents because they suit the occasion.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and organise reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and provide one or two specific examples of occasions. Keep sentences concise and natural.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and Christmas. These traditions make gift-giving meaningful, and I often find choosing the right present exciting but sometimes a bit difficult.

建議: Be specific about factors you consider and explain why, using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'freight price' unless you mean shipping; give complete reasons and an example.

範例: The main thing I consider is the price because I have a budget. Also, I think about the recipient's taste and whether the gift is practical. For instance, I will choose something affordable and useful so the person can use it regularly.

建議: Give a clear, coherent account: state the fact, describe the item, and explain your feelings with linking words. Correct vocabulary (scarf, gloves) and remove repetitions. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I have. When I was 16 I knitted scarves and gloves for my friends. It was difficult at first, but I enjoyed the process and felt proud when I finished the gifts.

建議: Answer directly and support your opinion with reasons and an example. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'spend more' not 'take more cost') and avoid word repetitions. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I think expensive gifts can sometimes show strong feelings because they show you put more money and thought into the present. For example, I might spend more on a gift for my partner to mark an important anniversary, but I also believe that a thoughtful, inexpensive gift can be meaningful.

× Yes, For example, when my friends come to the bath day, are you drinking them cosmetic goods such as eyeshadow and eyebrow pencil? They always be happy.

✓ Yes. For example, when my friends come to a bath day, I give them cosmetic goods such as eyeshadow and eyebrow pencils. They are always happy.

The student used incorrect pronouns and verbs. 'Are you drinking them' is wrong; the intended meaning is 'I give them'. 'Them' as object is correct but pronoun/verb choice was wrong (Incorrect use of pronouns and verb choice). 'Bath day' needs an article 'a'. 'Eyebrow pencil' should be plural to match 'cosmetic goods'. 'They always be happy' is ungrammatical: use 'They are always happy'. Suggestion: use the correct verb for giving (give) and match plural nouns and correct present simple 'are'.

× I usually give gifts are in in the events such as birthday, Christmas because it is a traditional things to give gifts and it is very hap and exciting to choose gift for example I am very struggling to choose.

✓ I usually give gifts at events such as birthdays and Christmas because it is traditional to give gifts, and it is very happy and exciting to choose a gift; for example, I sometimes struggle to choose.

Multiple sentence structure problems: wrong preposition 'are in in' should be 'at', 'birthday' needs plural 'birthdays' when generalizing, 'a traditional things' should be 'traditional' or 'a traditional thing' (article and number error), 'hap' is incorrect form of 'happy', missing articles before 'gift', run-on sentence. Suggestion: use 'at events such as birthdays and Christmas', keep noun/adjective agreement, and split into clearer clauses or use punctuation.

× I usually consider the price. For example, when I give gift to my friends, I usually watch the price first because my friends take care of the freight price because if it were too expensive, they always be.

✓ I usually consider the price. For example, when I give a gift to my friends, I usually check the price first because my friends are conscious of shipping costs; if it is too expensive, they will not accept it.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'gift', 'watch the price' is unnatural — use 'check the price', 'take care of the freight price' is incorrect phrasing — use 'are conscious of shipping costs' or 'consider shipping costs', 'they always be' incomplete and wrong tense/structure — 'they will not accept it' or 'they won't be happy'. Suggestion: use natural collocations (check the price, shipping costs) and complete conditional structure with future/modal ('will').

× Yes I have. When I was 16 I gave them knitting goods such as muffler or hand gloves. It was very difficult for me but it But the making something by knitting is very exciting and I could make it very.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was 16 I gave them knitted items such as a muffler or gloves. It was very difficult for me, but making things by knitting was very exciting and I was able to make them well.

Problems: 'knitting goods' is unnatural — use 'knitted items'. 'Hand gloves' should be 'gloves'. 'But it But the making something by knitting is very exciting' is ungrammatical repetition and wrong verb forms. Use past tense consistently ('was', 'was able to'). 'I could make it very' is incomplete; use 'I was able to make them well'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and maintain consistent past tense, remove repetitions, and use natural collocations.

× Yes, I think so. When I give gifts to my special friends I usually take more cost than others because I they she is very important for me and I like her and so I usually take more cost to the gift.

✓ Yes, I think so. When I give gifts to my close friends I usually spend more than I do for others because she is very important to me and I like her, so I usually spend more on the gift.

Errors: 'take more cost' is incorrect collocation; use 'spend more'. 'More cost than others' is unclear — compare spending amounts ('spend more than I do for others'). Pronoun confusion 'I they she' is incorrect; choose the correct pronoun 'she' if referring to one female friend. 'Important for me' should be 'important to me', and 'take more cost to the gift' should be 'spend more on the gift'. Suggestion: use proper verbs for money (spend), correct pronouns, and prepositions ('important to', 'spend on').