礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more specific and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and give one or two short supporting details about how you choose gifts (e.g., considering interests or usefulness). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. I usually think about the recipient’s hobbies and practical needs, so I pick something they will actually use, like a book for a reader or a kitchen gadget for someone who likes cooking.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details using linking words. Remove fillers and be specific about occasions and frequency.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays, holidays, and local festivals. Also, I sometimes give small presents spontaneously to my close friends to celebrate achievements or to cheer them up.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence that states the main consideration, then add specific supporting details and examples. Avoid vague phrases and fillers.

範例: I consider how practical and useful the gift is for the recipient. For example, if my friend studies a lot I might buy a comfortable notebook or quality pens so they can use them every day.

建議: Be specific about the type of handmade gifts and when you make them. Use one or two supporting details and linkers to improve coherence; correct unclear words (e.g., 'DIY' not 'DI').

範例: Yes, I have. If I have free time I make small DIY gifts with friends, such as handmade cards or knitted scarves, which feel more personal and meaningful.

建議: Give a concise opinion and justify it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid repetition and fillers. You can also acknowledge the opposite view briefly and explain your position using linking words.

範例: I don’t think expensive gifts necessarily express stronger feelings. While some people prefer costly presents to show status, I believe a thoughtful, affordable gift can be more meaningful because it shows that you know the person well and put effort into choosing something suitable.

× I always choose the best gifts for my friends.

✓ I always choose the best gifts for my friends.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses simple present to describe habitual action.

× Uh, sometimes they have birthday or some holiday and umm, some festival. I will give gifts for my best friends.

✓ Sometimes they have birthdays or some holidays and festivals. I give gifts to my best friends.

The student used singular nouns (birthday, holiday, festival) while referring to plural occurrences. Use plural nouns (birthdays, holidays, festivals). Also 'they' is vague; assuming 'people' or 'friends' is intended, keep context by using plural forms. Change 'I will give' to 'I give' to match habitual action and use correct preposition 'to' instead of 'for'.

× I'd like to choose the UMM. We can usually use it.

✓ I'd like to choose something we can usually use.

Original has a noun placeholder 'UMM' and two short sentences that are awkward. Combine into one clear sentence: 'something we can usually use.' This uses correct structure: verb 'choose' + object phrase and relative clause with base verb 'use' following modal 'can'.

× Actually yes, if I have free time I will do some DI gifts with my friends.

✓ Actually yes, if I have free time I make some DIY gifts with my friends.

The phrase 'do some DI gifts' is incorrect. Use 'make' for creating handmade items and 'DIY' for 'do-it-yourself'. Also change 'will make' to 'make' or keep 'will' depending on habit; since conditional about future/future-in-the-past, 'will' is acceptable but 'I make' fits habitual or planned action. Here 'I make' is concise.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

Adverb 'better' should follow the verb phrase it modifies. Correct word order is 'express your feelings better.'

× Actually, I think yes, I think uh too. Umm some people think expensive gifts are better than umm use money low gifts.

✓ Actually, I think so. Some people think expensive gifts are better than cheap gifts.

Multiple errors: 'I think yes' is unnatural; 'I think so' is preferred. The phrase 'use money low gifts' is incorrect—use the adjective 'cheap' to describe low-cost gifts. Also remove filler sounds and streamline sentence. Maintain present simple for general opinions.