礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, avoid redundancy, and keep to 3–4 sentences. Add a specific short example and use a linking phrase.

範例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because seeing someone's reaction makes me happy. For example, for a close friend's birthday I often buy a book about their hobby or make a small handmade card. I try to choose something personal that shows I understand their interests.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and concise phrasing, and include a linking word to expand. Be specific about occasions and reasons.

範例: I usually give gifts on birthdays and major holidays such as New Year or Easter. In addition, I sometimes give small presents spontaneously to cheer up friends, because I enjoy sharing happiness with them.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and provide specific factors you consider with linking words. If you sometimes ask directly, explain briefly when and why.

範例: When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's hobbies and current needs. For instance, if a friend enjoys cooking I might buy a specialized kitchen tool, but if I'm unsure I may ask them subtly beforehand to make sure it is useful.

建議: Start with a direct yes/no, correct vocabulary (handmade), and give a short example plus a reason for the change in behavior. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

範例: Yes, I used to give my mother handmade cards and paper crafts when I was at school. However, now I usually buy presents because I have less free time and find it easier to shop online.

建議: Answer directly and develop your reason with a relevant example; avoid filler words and awkward phrases. Use a linking word to introduce your explanation and give a brief specific example of a meaningful non-expensive gift.

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because what matters is the thought behind the gift. For example, a photo album of shared memories meant more to my friend than any costly item because it reminded them of our time together.

× I really enjoy giving gifts because seeing people's reactions makes me happy and helps me celebrate special moments with those I care about it.

✓ I really enjoy giving gifts because seeing people's reactions makes me happy and helps me celebrate special moments with those I care about.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect at the end of the sentence. The phrase 'those I care about' already functions as the object; adding 'it' creates an extra, unlinked pronoun. Remove 'it' to correct the sentence structure. Suggestion: omit superfluous pronouns and read the sentence to ensure each pronoun has a clear antecedent.

× I usually pick small, thoughtful presents for close friends on their birthdays, such as a book related to their hobbies or a handmade item, because I want the gift to feel person.

✓ I usually pick small, thoughtful presents for close friends on their birthdays, such as a book related to their hobbies or a handmade item, because I want the gift to feel personal.

The adjective 'person' is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'personal' to describe the feeling the gift should convey. Use 'personal' to modify 'gift'. Suggestion: choose the correct adjective form (e.g., personal) when describing qualities.

× I think on birthdays or some holidays maybe like New Year or Easter so I can gift gifts at the normal day.

✓ I usually give gifts on birthdays or on holidays like New Year or Easter, so I can give gifts on those days.

The original mixes awkward phrasing and tense. 'I think' is vague; 'I usually give gifts' matches habitual action. 'Gift gifts' is redundant; use 'give gifts'. 'At the normal day' is incorrect; 'on those days' or 'on those occasions' is correct. Suggestion: use clear habitual present tense for routines and avoid redundant words ('gift gifts').

× So because I really enjoy it and I wanted to people be happy like me.

✓ Because I really enjoy it, I want people to be as happy as I am.

Multiple errors: 'wanted' is past tense while context needs present 'want'; word order 'people be happy' is incorrect; comparative phrase 'like me' is informal and unclear—use 'as happy as I am'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present) for current preferences and use correct comparative structure 'as ... as'.

× I need to remember, uh, personal hobbies or my friend what I gave a gift.

✓ I need to remember my friend's personal hobbies and what gifts I have given them.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing possessive ('my friend' should be 'my friend's') and unclear clause 'what I gave a gift'. Reorder to subject -> possessive -> objects, and use 'gifts I have given them' for clarity. Suggestion: use possessive forms and clear noun phrases; place modifiers next to the nouns they describe.

× So maybe I just tell them and ask what they do they want.

✓ So maybe I just ask them what they want.

The original has redundant and incorrectly ordered words 'tell them and ask what they do they want.' You do not 'tell them' before asking; and 'do they want' is unnecessary in indirect question form. Use 'ask them what they want.' Suggestion: use indirect question word order (subject before verb) and avoid redundant verbs.

× Of course when I was young I used to gift my mother like a handmaid's or some paper works what I used to do in my school so yes.

✓ Of course, when I was young I used to give my mother handmade items or paper crafts that I made at school.

Multiple issues: 'gift' as verb is less natural than 'give'; 'handmaid's' is incorrect for 'handmade' and wrong possessive; 'paper works' should be 'paper crafts' or 'paperwork' (latter wrong meaning); 'what I used to do in my school' is ungrammatical—use 'that I made at school.' Suggestion: use natural verbs ('give'), correct adjective 'handmade', and clear relative clauses 'that I made at school.'

× But now I just buy a gifts and don't do.

✓ But now I just buy gifts and don't make them.

Errors: 'a gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'don't do' is vague—specify 'don't make them.' Use simple present for current habit. Suggestion: ensure number agreement between article and noun and use a clear verb for the omitted action ('make').

× No, because gifts it's not about money, it's about the feelings and uh, memories.

✓ No, because gifts are not about money; they're about feelings and memories.

'Gifts it's not' is incorrect: 'gifts' is plural so use 'are not' or contraction 'they're not.' Also remove filler 'uh' and use parallel nouns without 'the' unless specific. Use 'feelings and memories.' Suggestion: match subject-verb number and use contractions appropriately.

× So when I need to choose a gift for person, I just started to remember all things that we passed down together and just choose a perfect gift for them.

✓ So when I need to choose a gift for someone, I just remember all the things we have experienced together and choose a perfect gift for them.

Problems: 'for person' should be 'for someone'; 'I just started to remember' incorrectly mixes past with present—use present 'I just remember'; 'passed down together' is wrong phrase for shared experiences—use 'experienced together'; keep present perfect 'have experienced' to connect past events to present decision. Suggestion: use appropriate pronouns ('someone'), maintain consistent tense (present/present perfect), and use natural expressions ('experienced together').