礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid tense and article errors, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words minimally and give one specific example with a brief reason.

範例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts to people close to me. For example, I often buy presents for my niece when I go shopping because she is very special to me and I like to make her happy.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct tenses. Remove fillers and repetition. Use a linking phrase to contrast routine occasions (birthdays) with special ones and provide a short example.

範例: I usually give gifts on people's birthdays. However, for close family or loved ones I sometimes buy presents at other times, such as when I find something I know they will like during a shopping trip.

建議: This answer has a clear topic and an example but needs grammatical accuracy and smoother linking. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘needs’ instead of ‘required’) and explain briefly why the gift is suitable.

範例: I focus on the recipient's needs and daily habits when choosing a gift. For instance, I bought a hat for my sister because she works outdoors, so it was both practical and thoughtful.

建議: Keep the response grammatically correct and structured: start with a direct yes/no, then briefly describe the handmade gift and the recipient's reaction. Avoid hesitation sounds and complete sentences.

範例: Yes, I have. I drew a sketch of a colleague and gave it to her for her birthday. She loved the portrait and thanked me by giving me a small gift in return.

建議: Make a clear opinion statement, support it with a reason and an example, and avoid vague phrasing and repetition. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ to connect ideas.

範例: I don't think expensive gifts are necessary to show feelings because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For example, a small surprise or a handmade card can be more meaningful than an expensive item because it shows you cared.

× I am a giving person.

✓ I am a generous person.

'Giving person' is not a natural English collocation; this is a word choice/pronoun-style issue. Replacing it with 'a generous person' is more idiomatic and clarifies the intended meaning. Use natural adjective-noun combinations to sound fluent.

× So the person those are very close to me, I prefer to give them gifts whenever I went to some shopping malls, especially for my niece because she is an apple of my eye.

✓ So for the people who are very close to me, I prefer to give them gifts whenever I go to shopping malls, especially my niece, because she is the apple of my eye.

Multiple issues: 'person those' is incorrect pronoun/relative construction; use 'people who'. 'Whenever I went' is wrong tense — present habitual requires 'I go'. 'To some shopping malls' is unnatural; 'to shopping malls' is better. 'An apple of my eye' should be 'the apple of my eye'. Fix relative pronoun, subject-verb tense, and article usage for clarity.

× I personally gifted her so many things.

✓ I have personally gifted her so many things.

The original uses simple past 'gifted' without context; native speakers often use present perfect to indicate life experience or actions relevant to now: 'have gifted'. Use present perfect for unspecified time before now or ongoing relevance.

× I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays, but for those, but for those, uh, person that are very close to me, especially the loved ones, I usually, uh, went outside and buy, bought some gift for that.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays, but for those people who are very close to me, especially loved ones, I usually go out and buy some gifts for them.

Errors: 'person that are' should be 'people who are' (pronoun and number agreement). 'Went' and 'buy, bought' mixed tenses — use simple present 'go out and buy' for habitual actions. 'Some gift for that' is incorrect; use 'some gifts for them'. Fix pronouns, number agreement and tense consistency.

× When choosing a gift, I mainly focus on the things that the particular person required for their daily life.

✓ When choosing a gift, I mainly focus on the things that the particular person requires for their daily life.

Tense error: 'required' (past) should be present 'requires' because this is a general preference/habit. Also keep subject-verb agreement: 'the particular person requires'.

× For example, I buy a hat for my sister because she went outside, uh, outside for the work.

✓ For example, I bought a hat for my sister because she goes out to work.

Tense and phrasing issues: 'I buy' should match context — if giving a past example, use 'I bought'; alternatively 'I buy' with present requires 'goes out to work' not 'went outside'. 'For the work' is unnatural; use 'to work'. Clarify tense and use natural prepositional phrase.

× Yes def definitely I gave handmade gift to one of my colleague uh I draw a sketch of her and she I gifted her on her birthday.

✓ Yes, definitely. I gave a handmade gift to one of my colleagues: I drew a sketch of her and gifted it to her on her birthday.

Multiple errors: 'def' is informal; add commas. 'Gave handmade gift' needs article 'a' and plural 'colleagues' or singular with 'a colleague'. Verb tenses must be consistent: 'drew' (past) not 'draw', and 'gifted it to her' clarifies object. Also punctuation needed to separate ideas.

× She loved that picture of her and she appreciate me and also give me small gift on.

✓ She loved that picture of her, she appreciated me, and she also gave me a small gift in return.

Tense and verb form errors: 'appreciate' should be past 'appreciated' to match 'loved'; 'give me small gift on' is incomplete — use 'gave me a small gift in return' or 'for my birthday' etc. Fix verb forms and add necessary words for clarity.

× According to me, every gift expressed your feelings to other because present is that kind of thing.

✓ In my opinion, every gift expresses your feelings to others because a present is that kind of thing.

'According to me' is unnatural; use 'In my opinion'. Tense: 'expressed' should be present 'expresses' for general truth. 'To other' should be 'to others'. Article: 'present' needs 'a present'. Fix phrasing to express general statement.

× Uh, every person like the most, especially the surprise.

✓ Uh, everyone likes surprises the most, especially being surprised.

Grammar and word choice: 'every person like the most' should be 'everyone likes the most'. 'Especially the surprise' is awkward; 'especially being surprised' clarifies the meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and use gerund for preference.

× If you give someone to surprise, uh, to surprise them, so it will definitely a good feelings from you.

✓ If you surprise someone, it will definitely create good feelings toward you.

Word order and structure issues: 'give someone to surprise' is incorrect — use 'surprise someone'. Remove redundant 'to surprise them'. 'It will definitely a good feelings' lacks verb and agreement; use 'create good feelings' and singular 'feeling' or plural 'good feelings'. 'From you' should be 'toward you' or 'about you'.