礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Sometimes I struggle to choose gifts”), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like “to giving” or “rundown her expectation.”

範例: Sometimes I struggle to choose gifts because I don’t always know my friends’ preferences, so I worry the present might disappoint them.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use correct prepositions and plural/singular forms. Use linking words (for example, because) and finish your idea. Avoid unfinished sentences.

範例: I usually give gifts on my friends’ birthdays because I often know their favorite items, so I try to choose something that suits their tastes.

建議: Provide a clear list with correct vocabulary and linking words. Use plural forms and concrete words (items, usefulness, presentation). Limit to two or three sentences and be specific about each factor.

範例: I consider three things: first, the recipient’s preferences; second, whether the item is useful in daily life; and third, the presentation—an attractive wrapping makes the gift feel special.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with an example. Use correct grammar (I prefer to give, useful items, pastries). Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear words like “poachers.”

範例: No, I usually prefer to give practical or edible gifts, such as cakes or snacks, because I enjoy seeing my friends use or eat them.

建議: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two coherent reasons. Use simpler, correct expressions (attention, thoughtfulness, trust) and linking words (because, also). Remove unclear phrases like “failure of the sympathy.”

範例: I don’t think expensive gifts are better because what matters more is the attention and thought behind the gift, which shows my care and trust.

× Well, sometimes I'm not good enough at giving to giving the gift to my friends because I need to know more about the preferences whether they like it or not.

✓ Well, sometimes I'm not good enough at giving gifts to my friends because I need to know more about their preferences to tell whether they will like them or not.

Original uses awkward 'giving to giving' and incorrect gerund phrase. 'Giving gifts to my friends' is correct; use 'their preferences' for possessive and 'whether they will like them' for clarity and correct structure. Use plural 'gifts' and plural pronoun 'them' to match.

× Because what we give and it is rundown her expectation, she will be disappointed.

✓ If what we give falls short of her expectations, she will be disappointed.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Use conditional 'If' plus verb phrase 'falls short of' and plural 'expectations'. Remove unnecessary 'it is' and reorder to a clear conditional sentence.

× What especially during my friend birthday, uh, because I already know what are his or her favorite gifts.

✓ Especially on my friend's birthday, because I already know his or her favorite gifts.

Use preposition 'on' with 'birthday' and possessive 'my friend's'. Remove extraneous 'what' and correct word order: 'I already know his or her favorite gifts.' Maintain present tense of 'know'.

× So the first thing is I seek the present which adjusts them and after that I also give them the present which.

✓ So the first thing is I choose a present that suits them, and after that I give them the present.

'Seek the present which adjusts them' is incorrect; use 'choose a present that suits them'. Complete the second clause 'I give them the present'. Use 'suits' (verb) to match subject and meaning.

× There are several factor that I might consider for giving the gift.

✓ There are several factors that I might consider when giving a gift.

Use plural 'factors' to match 'several'. Also use 'when giving a gift' for natural phrasing.

× The first one is I must know their preferences and 2nd whether the staff is usable or not and the loss is the presentation of the gift, it must be attractive.

✓ The first is that I must know their preferences; second, whether the item is usable; and lastly, the presentation of the gift must be attractive.

Replace vague 'staff' with 'item'. Use parallel structure ('first... second... lastly') and correct connectors. Use 'item is usable' instead of 'staff is usable'. Ensure clauses are clear and punctuated correctly.

× No because I prefer give my friend a good stuff which can he use or can he eat such as cakes, poachers and others.

✓ No, because I prefer to give my friends useful things they can use or eat, such as cakes, pastries, and other items.

Use infinitive 'prefer to give'. 'Good stuff' is informal—use 'useful things'. Correct word order 'they can use' rather than 'can he use'. Replace 'poachers' (wrong word) with 'pastries' or appropriate item. Make 'friends' plural to generalize.

× I feel more happy especially when they eat my.

✓ I feel happier especially when they eat what I give them.

'More happy' should be 'happier'. Complete object: 'eat what I give them' makes clear meaning. Use comparative form and include object.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question sentence is grammatically acceptable. No correction needed.

× I don't think so because the most important thing to give other is the attention that we give to them.

✓ I don't think so because the most important thing to give others is the attention we show them.

Use plural 'others' and concise phrasing 'attention we show them'. 'To give other' is incorrect; also 'that we give to them' is wordy.

× And 2nd it's about the failure of the sympathy towards my our friend and also as our trust sign.

✓ Second, it's about showing sympathy toward our friend and expressing our trust.

Original uses 'my our friend' which is incorrect; choose 'our friend'. 'Failure of the sympathy' is wrong—use 'showing sympathy' or 'expressing sympathy'. Rephrase to clear, natural English.