礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và cần sửa ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó đưa thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết ngắn gọn. Chú ý dùng thì và đại từ đúng (people I love and admire), loại bỏ từ thừa.

範例: Yes, I am. I enjoy giving gifts to people I love and admire because it helps me express my feelings. I often choose thoughtful presents that show I care.

建議: Câu trả lời cần chính xác về từ vựng và ngữ pháp; sửa lỗi từ sai (orders → others) và cụm không tự nhiên (hot holiday). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu thời điểm, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn về lý do. Dùng liên từ như 'usually' và 'for example' để mạch lạc.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays and holidays like Christmas. I do this to send my best wishes and to make the recipient feel happier.

建議: Cần câu trúc ngữ pháp đúng (When choosing a gift, I consider...), tránh tiếng ồ ạt và lặp từ. Hãy nêu các tiêu chí cụ thể theo cấu trúc liệt kê rõ ràng và dùng liên từ như 'for example' hoặc 'such as' để minh họa.

範例: When choosing a gift, I consider the person's interests and preferences. For example, I think about their hobbies, favorite colors, and whether the gift is suitable for a man or a woman.

建議: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi từ (order → other). Hãy nói ngắn gọn lý do và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về món quà tự làm để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Tránh lặp từ và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cảm xúc hoặc công sức bỏ ra.

範例: Yes, I have. I once made a scrapbook for a close friend because handmade gifts show I put time and thought into them. They appreciated the personal touch and memories inside.

建議: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (It depends...), giải thích lý do bằng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ 'because' hoặc 'however' hợp lý. Tránh cấu trúc phủ định rối rắm.

範例: It depends more on the thought behind the gift than its price. For example, a handmade present can mean more because it shows someone spent time and effort for you, rather than just buying something expensive.

× I really love giving gifts to people who are really love and admire them.

✓ I really love giving gifts to people whom I really love and admire.

The relative clause needs an object pronoun 'whom' because it refers to 'people' as the object of 'love and admire'. Use 'whom' (formal) or restructure: 'people I really love and admire'.

× I usually give gifts to orders on their birthday or some uh days, some special days like Christmas or hot holiday because I want to give them the best wishes and make them happier on those.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthday or on special days like Christmas or holidays because I want to give them my best wishes and make them happier on those days.

Use 'others' not 'orders'. Prepositions: use 'on' with 'birthday' and 'special days'. 'hot holiday' is incorrect; use 'holidays'. Add 'my' before 'best wishes'. Include 'days' after 'those' for clarity.

× When I choosing a gift, I often consider, umm, it depends on their on uh, favorite of each people and uh, they are a boy or girl or they like these colors or that color so I need to choose carefully.

✓ When I choose a gift, I often consider their preferences, whether they are a boy or a girl, and which colors they like, so I need to choose carefully.

Use base verb 'choose' after 'When I' for present habitual action. Rephrase awkward clauses: use 'preferences' and 'which colors they like'. Remove redundant fillers and correct noun phrases ('each people' -> 'people' or 'their preferences').

× Yes I have, because when I give order a handmade gift by me, I can umm, express my emotion, my feeling that I really love and respect them more clearly and I think they would love them because it my my time.

✓ Yes, I have, because when I give someone a handmade gift that I made, I can express my emotions and feelings and show that I really love and respect them more clearly, and I think they appreciate it because it is my time.

Replace 'order' with 'someone'. Use 'a handmade gift that I made' or 'one I made'. Use plural 'emotions and feelings' or simply 'feelings'. 'They would love them' is ambiguous; use 'they appreciate it'. Correct 'it my my time' to 'it is my time'.

× Well it depends on what the gift is, not the cost. Because if it's just some handmade thing, I really love it because I can feel them like they really spend many time when spend much of time for me, not like it's not doesn't expense.

✓ Well, it depends on what the gift is, not the cost. If it's a handmade item, I really love it because I can sense that the giver spent a lot of time on it for me; it's not about expense.

Combine fragments and remove redundancy. Use 'handmade item' instead of 'handmade thing'. 'I can feel them' should be 'I can sense that the giver'. Use 'spent a lot of time' for correct past tense. Simplify final clause to 'it's not about expense'.