礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and pronouns, avoid redundancy, and finish the example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I think I'm good at choosing gifts because I spend time thinking about the recipient. For example, I consider their preferences and personality, and often pick natural presents like plants. This approach usually makes the gift feel personal and appreciated.

建議: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words (first, second, finally). Use correct plural/singular forms and give one or two specific examples to avoid listing too many items.

範例: I usually give gifts on both personal and public occasions. Firstly, I give presents for personal events such as birthdays and family gatherings. Secondly, on national holidays like Independence Day and during festivals, exchanging gifts is also common.

建議: Good structure and specific details. Improve grammar (plural/singular, possessives) and use smoother linking phrases. Slightly shorten to remain within five sentences.

範例: I consider three main things when choosing a gift. First, I prefer environmentally friendly items that are reusable or biodegradable. Second, I think about the person’s personality and preferences—for instance, a novel for a reader or a kitchen gadget for someone who enjoys cooking. Finally, I always check my budget to ensure the gift is affordable.

建議: Be clearer and correct grammar: use possessives and correct tense. Remove fillers like 'umm'. Provide a brief reason or result to make the answer more complete.

範例: Yes. I have often given my father handmade gifts, such as birthday cards that I made with paper and a pen. I also passed this habit to my son, and now he sometimes makes cards too, which is very touching.

建議: Make your opinion clear at the start, use simpler grammar, avoid confusing comparisons, and give one clear reason with an example. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts show feelings better. A heartfelt handmade card or a meaningful small gift can be more touching because it shows time and thought were put into it—for example, a simple plant I chose because someone loves gardening can mean more than an expensive item.

× I consider myself considerably good at giving gifts because I spent a lot of time while choosing a particular present.

✓ I consider myself quite good at giving gifts because I spend a lot of time choosing a particular present.

Mixed tense: 'consider' is present but 'spent' is past. Use present 'spend' to match habitual action. Also 'considerably' is awkward; 'quite' is better. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habits and use appropriate adverbs.

× I do consider individuals preference as well as his personality and moreover I like to keep my gift as natural as much as possible.

✓ I do consider an individual's preferences as well as their personality, and I like to keep my gifts as natural as possible.

Incorrect pronoun and singular/plural: 'individuals' needs possessive apostrophe and 'preference' should be plural 'preferences'. Use gender-neutral 'their' instead of 'his' to match 'individual'. Also change 'gift' to plural 'gifts' and simplify 'as much as possible' placement.

× For example giving plants as.

✓ For example, giving plants.

Fragment: 'For example giving plants as.' is incomplete and uses unnecessary 'as'. Remove 'as' and add comma for clarity to form a complete phrase.

× There are several occasion in my country when we are exchanging gift with each other.

✓ There are several occasions in my country when we exchange gifts with each other.

Number agreement: 'occasion' should be plural 'occasions' and 'gift' should be plural 'gifts'. Use simple present 'exchange' for habitual action instead of progressive 'are exchanging'.

× For example of firstly the personal occasion like birthdays, gathering and bursaries and 2nd we have a national celebration like Independence Day and Republic day and thirdly we are celebrating lots of festival these days and we usually gift.

✓ For example, firstly personal occasions like birthdays, gatherings, and anniversaries; secondly national celebrations like Independence Day and Republic Day; and thirdly many festivals, during which we usually give gifts.

Run-on sentence and unclear word choice: 'For example of firstly' is wrong. 'Bursaries' seems incorrect for occasions; 'anniversaries' or 'ceremonies' fits. Use parallel structure and proper punctuation; change 'we are celebrating lots of festival these days' to 'many festivals' and 'we usually gift' to 'we usually give gifts'.

× I consider several things when choosing a gift.

✓ I consider several things when choosing a gift.

This sentence is correct; 'choosing' is properly used as a gerund in a subordinate clause. No change needed.

× First, I avoid gift made of plastic because I try to be environmentally friendly.

✓ First, I avoid gifts made of plastic because I try to be environmentally friendly.

Article/number error: 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match general meaning. Also 'made of plastic' is correct.

× I prefer items that are reusable and biodegradable.

✓ I prefer items that are reusable and biodegradable.

This sentence is correct; no quantifier error. Keep as is.

× Secondly, I think about persons personality and preference so the gift feel personal.

✓ Secondly, I think about a person's personality and preferences so the gift feels personal.

Missing apostrophe in 'person's', number agreement 'preferences' plural, and subject-verb agreement 'gift feels'. Add article 'a' for clarity.

× For example, I might choose a novel for a reader or cooking gadget for someone who enjoy cooking.

✓ For example, I might choose a novel for a reader or a cooking gadget for someone who enjoys cooking.

Third person singular: 'someone' requires 'enjoys' not 'enjoy'. Also add article 'a' before 'cooking gadget'.

× And thirdly, I always check my budget also.

✓ And thirdly, I always check my budget as well.

Awkward placement of 'also'. Use 'as well' at end for natural phrasing.

× Yes I have given handmade gift to my father's many time.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to my father many times.

Article and plural errors: 'handmade gift' should be 'handmade gifts'; 'father's' incorrectly shows possession—should be 'my father'. Use plural 'many times' and add commas.

× I used to give him a birthday card which I myself made umm with the paper and pen only.

✓ I used to give him a birthday card which I made myself using only paper and a pen.

Reflexive pronoun placement: 'I myself made' is awkward; 'made myself' is idiomatic. Also phrase order: 'using only paper and a pen' is clearer.

× And this is the same habit I have passed to my son because I started giving him some handmade gift and he picked up this.

✓ And this is the same habit I passed on to my son because I started giving him some handmade gifts and he picked it up.

Incorrect preposition and phrasing: use 'passed on to' not 'passed to'. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts'. 'Picked up this' is unnatural; use 'picked it up' or 'picked it up from me'.

× I really don't think so because if a feeling can be expressed with expensive gift, one need not to give to plants or paper card which are homemade because failing the have a different connection.

✓ I really don't think so, because if a feeling could be expressed with an expensive gift, one would not need to give plants or paper cards that are homemade, since they have a different kind of connection.

Multiple errors: article 'an expensive gift', modal tense 'could' and conditional 'would not need'. Remove 'to' after 'need'. 'Paper card' should be 'paper cards' or 'a paper card' and relative clause 'that are homemade'. Clarify 'have a different connection' to 'have a different kind of connection'.

× If a gift is given from the bottom of heart it touch a person more as compared.

✓ If a gift is given from the bottom of the heart, it touches a person more.

Missing article 'the heart' and subject-verb agreement 'touches'. Remove unnecessary 'as compared'. Add comma after the conditional clause for clarity.