礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct pronouns, and link the example smoothly. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts because I try to choose things the recipient will appreciate and use. For example, when my sister turned 20 I bought a skincare set she had been asking about, which showed I listened to her preferences.

建議: Remove hesitations and repetition, correct pronoun and tense errors, and link ideas clearly. Provide one or two specific occasions and a brief reason to make the answer coherent and natural.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays, Christmas and graduations. I also give small presents when friends move away to remind them of our friendship and to stay connected despite the distance.

建議: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus linked supporting details. Fix counting phrasing and run-on fragments. Use linking words (first, second, because) and give a specific example to strengthen the point.

範例: I consider two main things: first, whether the person has mentioned wanting something, and second, whether the gift suits their personality or lifestyle. For example, a practical friend might appreciate useful kitchen gadgets, while a fashion-conscious person would prefer accessories.

建議: Make the answer coherent and correct grammatical errors. State clearly whether you give handmade gifts, then explain and give a short example. Avoid vague phrasing and unnecessary repetition.

範例: I haven't made craft gifts, but I often write personal letters, which I consider handmade because they are written by me. For instance, I wrote a long letter to a close friend before they moved abroad to express my gratitude and good wishes.

建議: Provide a concise opinion sentence, then support it with a clear reason and a brief example. Fix repetition and small grammar issues; avoid splitting sentences awkwardly.

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts show feelings better because thoughtful gifts that match someone's interests matter more. For example, a moderately priced skincare set I know they want can mean more than an expensive item they don't need.

× Yes, I would say that I'm good at giving gifts because I when I give gifts I make sure that it is something that the person would appreciate or would make use of.

✓ Yes, I would say that I'm good at giving gifts because when I give gifts I make sure that they are something that the person would appreciate or would make use of.

The sentence has incorrect reference and agreement: 'it is something' refers to 'gifts' (plural), so use 'they are' (present plural). Also remove the extra 'I' after 'because'. Use plural pronoun to match plural noun and maintain present simple for habitual action.

× For example, when my sister turned 20. I gave her.

✓ For example, when my sister turned 20, I gave her a gift.

Sentence fragments and punctuation errors: 'For example, when my sister turned 20.' is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone. Combine clauses and add a direct object 'a gift' to complete the meaning. Maintain past simple 'turned' and 'gave' for past event.

× A skin care which he has been telling me for quite a while and I think it really reflects what she wanted.

✓ A skincare set that she had been telling me about for quite a while, and I think it really reflected what she wanted.

Pronoun mismatch and tense issues: 'he' incorrectly refers to sister; change to 'she'. 'Which' is less natural than 'that' for essential clause. Use 'had been telling me about' or 'had been mentioning' to show prior reference and 'reflected' to match past context. Also combine into a complete sentence.

× I usually give gifts to others during special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas, uh, graduation, and some other special occasions.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas, graduation, and other events.

Preposition: use 'on' with specific days/events (on birthdays, on Christmas). Also avoid repetition 'special occasions' twice; streamline phrasing. 'Events' is a better collocation than repeating 'special occasions'.

× There are also instances where I gift gifts when I part ways with them or send them off to somewhere just to show that, even with the distance. He want to remember them and I want them to Remember Me as well.

✓ There are also times when I give gifts when I part ways with someone or send them off, just to show that even with the distance I want to remember them and I want them to remember me as well.

Pronoun errors and capitalization: 'gift gifts' is redundant; use 'give gifts'. 'Somewhere' is vague and unnecessary. 'He want' is wrong person and number; change to 'I want' and 'them to remember me' with correct capitalization. Remove erroneous period that broke the sentence.

× When choosing a gift I consider one if they mentioned it to me and 2nd is if I think it would match their personality or their lifestyle.

✓ When choosing a gift I consider, first, if they mentioned it to me, and second, if I think it would match their personality or lifestyle.

Pronoun and ordinal phrasing: 'one' and '2nd' are informal/unclear; use 'first' and 'second'. Keep 'they' for singular generic reference is acceptable, but ensure punctuation and parallel structure for clarity.

× I am very attentive with what other people say or in what my loved ones say so I tend to remember.

✓ I am very attentive to what other people or my loved ones say, so I tend to remember more details, even things they don't explicitly say.

Preposition: 'attentive to' is the correct collocation. Also clarify and complete the thought: add 'more details' and rephrase 'that they don't tell me' for coherence.

× More things or the details that they don't tell me.

✓ I remember more things or the details that they don't tell me.

Fragment: 'More things or the details that they don't tell me.' is a sentence fragment. Integrate it into the previous sentence or add a subject and verb ('I remember') to make it complete.

× So when I give gifts I try to recall whatever they say and give it to them.

✓ So when I give gifts I try to recall whatever they say and give those things to them.

Pronoun agreement: 'whatever they say' refers to items (plural), so 'give it to them' should be 'give those things to them' or 'give them those things' to match plurality.

× I have never given people any handmade gifts that involves crafting and so because I'm not a very creative person, but I do love writing letters to people and I think it would count as a handmade gift because it is something that they made out of my hands.

✓ I have never given people handmade gifts that involve crafting because I'm not a very creative person, but I do love writing letters to people and I think those count as handmade gifts because they are made by my hands.

Agreement and article misuse: 'gifts that involves' should be 'gifts that involve' to agree with plural 'gifts'. Remove unnecessary 'any' and 'so'. Use plural 'those count' and correct passive/agent phrasing 'made by my hands' rather than 'made out of my hands'.

× I really love writing. There's two people because it verbalises or it just shows how much I appreciate them and how I am very thankful for having them in my life.

✓ I really love writing. There are two people because it verbalizes, or it just shows how much I appreciate them and how thankful I am to have them in my life.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun clarity: 'There's two people' should be 'There are two people'. 'Verbalises' is better as 'verbalizes' (US spelling) or 'expresses'. Reorder 'how thankful I am to have them in my life' for natural phrasing.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I do not think that expensive gifts express my feelings better because my gifts do not have to be expensive to be appreciated.

✓ I do not think that expensive gifts express my feelings better because my gifts do not have to be expensive to be appreciated.

Sentence is grammatically correct as written; no change needed.

× For example, I could give someone. A skin care set that they have been talking about for a while now and it it may not be the most expensive set of them all but I know it they would appreciate them because it's something that they mentioned to me.

✓ For example, I could give someone a skincare set that they have been talking about for a while. It may not be the most expensive set, but I know they would appreciate it because it's something they mentioned to me.

Multiple issues: sentence fragments and repetition ('I could give someone. A skin care set'), repeated words ('it it'), pronoun agreement ('they would appreciate them' should be 'they would appreciate it' referring to the set). Clean up by combining into two clear sentences, fixing pronouns and removing redundancy.