礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'delighted and thrilled' is redundant) and fix tense/ article mistakes ('I've surprised' -> 'I surprised', 'the her' -> 'her').

範例: Yes, I enjoy surprising people with gifts. For example, last month I surprised a friend on her birthday by decorating her room and buying a cake, so she was very happy and grateful.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid unclear or contradictory phrasing. Clarify the reason and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so') correctly. Remove casual fillers like 'kinda' and correct verb forms ('gifted' -> 'gave').

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions or when I need to make amends. For instance, after an argument with my brother, I bought him a watch to apologize, and it helped improve our relationship.

建議: Begin with a concise topic sentence and eliminate hesitations ('uh', repeated 'well'). Use linking words to connect points and give one specific example with correct grammar and word order. Avoid repeating obvious words (e.g., 'choice' and 'choices').

範例: I consider the recipient's tastes and preferences first. For example, when choosing a watch for my brother, I remembered he prefers black, so I bought a black watch and he loved it.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and correct collocations ('emotionally connecting' -> 'more meaningful' or 'more emotionally significant'). Keep sentences concise and fix the noun phrases and tense ('I made a cute bunny' rather than 'with a cute Bunny which I made with my own hands').

範例: Yes, I prefer giving handmade gifts because they feel more meaningful. For my friend's birthday I made a small handwritten note and a cute felt bunny, which she really appreciated.

建議: Provide a direct opinion sentence and support it with a clear reason and example. Avoid awkward phrasing ('doesn't mean the gift is expensive or cheaper') — instead say 'price doesn't determine its value'. Keep supporting details concise and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

範例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because price doesn't determine meaning. For example, I gave a friend a handmade present, and she appreciated my effort and thoughtfulness more than any costly item.

× For example, the last time I've surprised someone was my friend on her birthday.

✓ For example, the last time I surprised someone was when my friend had her birthday.

The speaker used present perfect ('I've surprised') with a specific past time expression 'the last time', which requires simple past in English. Also the clause needs 'when' and 'had her birthday' or 'on her birthday' for clarity. Use simple past for completed actions at a specific time and include 'when' to connect the clauses.

× She was very happy and satisfied with the her birthday celebration.

✓ She was very happy and satisfied with her birthday celebration.

The sentence contains an extra definite article 'the' before the possessive pronoun 'her'. Possessive pronouns do not take an article. Remove 'the' to correct the phrase.

× I don't give people very often, but yeah, sometimes when they are angry at me or I need to console them, I love to surprise them with gifts.

✓ I don't give people gifts very often, but sometimes when they are angry with me or I need to console them, I like to surprise them with gifts.

Add the object 'gifts' for clarity and move 'very often' after the verb phrase for natural adverb placement. Use 'angry with' rather than 'angry at' for emotions toward someone (both are possible, 'with' is more common), and 'like to' is more natural than 'love to' in this context. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× For example, last time I gifted my brother a watch when he was angry at me because we fought on something so I kinda got angry at him.

✓ For example, last time I gave my brother a watch when he was angry with me because we had fought about something, so I kind of felt angry at him.

Use 'gave' (simple past of give) rather than 'gifted' for more natural speech; 'gifted' is acceptable but less common. Use past perfect 'had fought' to show the fight happened before that moment. Use 'about' rather than 'on' with 'fight' and write 'kind of' as two words. Maintain past tense consistency.

× Well, choosing a gift I prefer uh, keeping in mind about their taste and their choices.

✓ When choosing a gift, I prefer to keep in mind their tastes and preferences.

Add introductory phrase 'When choosing a gift' and use the infinitive 'to keep' after 'prefer'. Use plural 'tastes' and 'preferences' and do not use 'about' after 'keep in mind'. This creates a clearer, natural sentence structure.

× Well when I was choosing gift for my brother a watch, I personally remembered his choice, his favorite color that is black.

✓ Well, when I was choosing a gift for my brother, a watch, I remembered his preference: his favorite color is black.

Insert the article 'a' before 'gift' and set off 'a watch' with commas as an appositive. Use 'preference' rather than 'choice' for natural phrasing and keep verb 'is' in present simple for a general fact about his favorite color.

× I gifted him his favorite color watch so he loved it.

✓ I gave him a watch in his favorite color, so he loved it.

Use 'a watch in his favorite color' for natural phrasing; 'favorite color watch' is ungrammatical. Also 'gave' is more natural than 'gifted' in informal speech. Ensure noun phrase uses correct articles and word order.

× Well yes, I personally prefer gifting handmade things to our friends or close ones because I think they are more emotionally and really connecting.

✓ Yes, I personally prefer giving handmade gifts to my friends or close ones because I think they create a stronger emotional connection.

Use 'giving' rather than 'gifting' for natural English, and 'handmade gifts' is clearer than 'handmade things'. Replace 'our friends' with 'my friends' to match speaker perspective. 'More emotionally and really connecting' is ungrammatical; use 'create a stronger emotional connection' to express the intended meaning.

× So last time I gifted my friend on her birthday was a note and with a cute Bunny which I made with my own hands.

✓ So last time I gave my friend a note and a cute bunny that I made with my own hands for her birthday.

Reorder the sentence to place the object directly after the verb: 'gave my friend a note and a cute bunny'. Use lowercase 'bunny' and 'that' instead of 'which' for restrictive clause in spoken English. Place 'for her birthday' at the end for clarity. Use 'gave' instead of 'gifted' for natural phrasing.

× Well, I don't think so because it doesn't mean the gift is expensive or cheaper.

✓ Well, I don't think so because a gift being expensive or cheap doesn't mean it expresses feelings better.

Rewrite for clarity: 'it doesn't mean the gift is expensive or cheaper' is awkward; use 'a gift being expensive or cheap doesn't mean it expresses feelings better.' Use comparative 'cheaper' only when comparing; 'cheap' is correct here.

× Well, last time I gifted my friend was a handmade gift, which I think was a good gift because she was really happy and thrilled because of my efforts, not because of the money.

✓ Last time I gave my friend a handmade gift, which I think was a good gift because she was really happy about my efforts, not because of the money.

Use 'gave' instead of 'gifted' for natural usage, and simplify 'happy and thrilled because of my efforts' to 'happy about my efforts'. Avoid repeating 'gift' unnecessarily. Maintain past tense consistency and clarify the reason 'not because of the money.'