礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and use correct verb forms and pronouns.

範例: Not really. I find giving gifts difficult because I often don’t know what the person truly likes. For example, even close family members have different tastes, so I worry about choosing something they will actually use or enjoy.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (articles, plurals) and avoid unnecessary repetition. Mention specific occasions and a typical example to make your answer concrete.

範例: I usually give gifts whenever I feel like it, rather than on fixed dates. Although I do give presents on occasions such as birthdays, Christmas, or Halloween, I also surprise friends spontaneously because I prefer giving gifts out of affection, not obligation.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence (one line). Use linking words to list considerations (for example, firstly, also). Be specific about examples and correct sentence structure and vocabulary (preferences, handmade).

範例: I consider the recipient’s tastes and preferences. For example, I think about their favorite colors, hobbies, and whether they prefer practical items or handmade gifts. If I choose a handmade gift, I often make a drawing or a small craft that suits their interests.

建議: Answer directly and tell a short, coherent story with correct past tense and clear details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid filler phrases. Describe what you made and the reaction briefly.

範例: Yes. I once crocheted a small jellyfish for a friend because she loves jellyfish and handmade items. She was really happy when I gave it to her, and she even hung it in her room as decoration.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, then support it with 2 specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid hesitation words and complete your sentences. Use concise vocabulary (express feelings, meaningful).

範例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better. Because they are often bought quickly, they may not reflect personal thought. For example, a handmade item shows time and effort, which to me is more meaningful and expresses my feelings better.

× I would say no because giving gifts are difficult for me because I don't know what the person actually love to be gifted and what do they like and what do they prefer.

✓ I would say no because giving gifts is difficult for me since I don't know what the person actually loves to receive, what they like, or what they prefer.

The subject 'giving gifts' is singular, so use 'is' not 'are' (singular and plural issue). 'Person' requires 'loves' (third person singular) and the verb patterns should be parallel: 'what they like' instead of 'what do they like'. Also use 'receive' instead of 'to be gifted' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use parallel structures when listing items.

× Even if they were close to me or my they are one of my family because a lot of people have different things that they love.

✓ Even if they are close to me or are members of my family, many people like different things.

'They were' should be present 'they are' to match context (present tense). 'My they are one of my family' is ungrammatical; use 'members of my family'. 'A lot of people have different things that they love' is wordy; use 'many people like different things.' Fixes include singular/plural wording and sentence restructuring for clarity. Suggestion: simplify phrases and keep correct noun phrases like 'members of my family'.

× I don't have a certain time that I give people gifts.

✓ I don't have a specific time when I give people gifts.

Use 'specific' rather than 'certain' for natural English and 'when' instead of 'that' to introduce time. The original had awkward phrasing rather than a strict tense error. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'specific time when'.

× I would give them gifts when I feel like I want to give them because why should I give them a gift like on Christmas or in Halloween on or in their birthday.

✓ I give them gifts when I feel like it; I don't think I should only give gifts on Christmas, Halloween, or their birthday.

The original mixes modal 'would' and awkward clauses. Use present simple for habitual actions. Also correct prepositions: 'on Christmas' -> 'at Christmas' or 'on Christmas Day', 'on Halloween', and 'on their birthday'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habits and correct prepositions for holidays.

× I would give them in these days, but there is many times that I would give them a gift because I prefer to give them, not because I have to give them.

✓ I might give them gifts on those days, but there are many other times when I give gifts because I want to, not because I have to.

Use 'on those days' for specific days, not 'in these days'. 'There is many times' should be 'there are many times' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'when' to introduce time clauses. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use appropriate prepositions for days.

× I would remember what do they like, what color they prefer because I would, or if I want to do a handmade gift, I would, uh, draw for them like to or I can do a lot of things like.

✓ I would remember what they like and what colors they prefer. If I want to make a handmade gift, I might draw something for them or do other handmade items.

Don't use question word order ('what do they like') in a statement; use 'what they like'. Use plural 'colors' for general preference. Use 'make a handmade gift' rather than 'do a handmade gift'. Also avoid dangling 'like' at end. Suggestion: use statement word order for reported content and choose correct verbs for making gifts.

× Yes, I have. Did I did it? I did. I give them like a crochet that I made for them.

✓ Yes, I have. I did. I gave them a crochet item that I made.

Redundant and incorrect 'Did I did it?' Remove auxiliary confusion. Use simple past 'gave' for completed past action and 'that I made' (past participle clause) is fine. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary question forms and use past tense for past actions.

× It was a jellyfish actually, because one of my friends loved jellyfish and loved the things that are hard are her hand made it.

✓ It was a jellyfish, actually, because one of my friends loved jellyfish and loves handmade things.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: 'the things that are hard are her hand made it' is incorrect. Use 'loves handmade things' to express preference. Also maintain present tense 'loves' for general preference. Suggestion: simplify to clear noun phrase 'handmade things.'

× So I did it and give it to her it she was so happy.

✓ So I made it and gave it to her; she was so happy.

Mixed tenses and duplicated pronouns: use past tense verbs 'made' and 'gave' for past events and separate clauses properly. Remove extra 'it' and reorder to 'she was so happy.' Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use clear clause boundaries.

× I don't think so because, uh, expensive gifts, you only buy them and choose which one that you love.

✓ I don't think so because with expensive gifts you only buy them and choose one that you like.

Remove filler 'uh' and use 'with' to connect idea. Use 'choose one that you like' not 'which one that you love'. Modal issue minimal; primary correction is phrasing. Suggestion: use 'choose one you like' and avoid combining 'which' with 'that.'

× And I don't think that it can express my feeling for me, for my point of view.

✓ I don't think they can express my feelings, in my point of view.

Pronoun mismatch and redundant phrases. 'It' should be 'they' (gifts plural). 'Express my feeling for me' is awkward; use 'express my feelings'. 'For my point of view' should be 'in my point of view' or better 'from my point of view.' Suggestion: match pronouns to nouns and use standard expressions like 'from my point of view.'

× I would say that handmade or the things that I do, it's express my feelings more like because I'm so.

✓ I would say that handmade gifts or things I make express my feelings more because I put effort into them.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'things I do' and correct subject-verb agreement: 'things I make express' (not 'it's express'). Complete the sentence meaningfully; 'because I'm so.' is incomplete. Suggestion: ensure articles are used only when needed and verbs agree with plural subjects.