礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Focus on correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “a car model,” “the right gift”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. I always think about the recipient’s hobbies and tastes, so I choose something related to their interests. For example, I bought a detailed car model for a friend who loves cars, and she was very pleased.

建議: Give a direct time-related answer first, then add a brief specific example. Use correct tense and pronouns, and avoid confusing clauses. Keep it within three sentences maximum.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, especially birthdays. For instance, I recently sent a red gift box to my best friend who is studying in the US because her birthday was coming up.

建議: Answer directly: state the main consideration, then provide specific examples connected with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “if”). Use correct noun forms and verbs and avoid vague wording like “send them a car order.”

範例: I consider the person’s interests and needs when choosing a gift. For example, if someone likes makeup I might buy a quality palette, but if they love cars I would choose a detailed model car.

建議: Be clear and grammatical. Begin with a direct yes/no, then explain briefly. If you haven’t given handmade gifts, explain why and mention if you have received any. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid confusing phrases.

範例: No, I haven’t made handmade gifts because I’m not confident with crafts. However, a friend recently made me a handmade card for my birthday and I appreciated it very much.

建議: State your opinion clearly and give one or two reasons with a brief example. Use smooth linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid hesitation sounds and unclear phrases.

範例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For example, a small handmade gift from a close friend felt more meaningful to me than an expensive present from an acquaintance.

× For example, I will consider what my friends like and then to send their correct gift to the.

✓ For example, I consider what my friends like and then send them the right gift.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'to send their correct gift to the' uses redundant 'to' and wrong word order; 'their' is okay but 'to them' should be after the verb. Also tense: use simple present to describe habitual action. Suggestion: use 'consider' and 'send' without 'will' for routines, place object pronoun 'them' after the verb and 'the right gift' for natural phrasing.

× For example, if my friends love the car models that I will buy them a car models.

✓ For example, if my friends love car models, I will buy them a car model.

Plural agreement: 'a car models' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'models'. Use singular 'a car model' when buying one, or omit 'a' and keep 'car models' if buying multiple. Also place verbs and clauses clearly: 'if my friends love car models' then 'I will buy them a car model'.

× Our Suncor is really good and made-up.

✓ Our sunscreen is really good and well made.

Likely wrong word choice and structure: 'Suncor' seems typo for 'sunscreen' or 'makeup'. 'made-up' is incorrect for product quality; use 'well made'. Correct the noun and adjective form.

× I will send them something about each set.

✓ I will give them something that matches each set.

Pronoun and preposition use: 'send them something about each set' is unnatural. Use 'give' for gifts and 'matches each set' to express relevance.

× Maybe around during their birthdays if the person who is really important for me, I'll give them a gift now also after especially that my best friend is joining but she is at US now so I just gave him a red box.

✓ I usually give gifts on their birthdays if the person is very important to me. For example, my best friend is in the US now, so I just gave her a red box.

Tense and pronoun errors: original mixes present and future with incorrect pronouns ('him' for female friend). Use simple present for habitual action ('usually give'), 'important to me' is correct preposition, and correct gender pronoun 'her'. Use past simple 'gave' for completed past action.

× That I mentioned before that I were choosing the gifts that is suit for them like to if the person who is really good at make up or send them.

✓ As I mentioned before, I choose gifts that suit them, for example if a person is really into makeup I send them makeup items.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'I were' should be 'I choose' (simple present). 'that is suit' should be 'that suit' (plural agreement with 'gifts' or 'that suits them' if singular). 'good at make up' -> 'into makeup'. Rearrange for clarity and correct verb forms.

× If the person who is really into car I will send them a car order for the gift.

✓ If the person is really into cars, I will give them a car-related gift.

Number and word choice: use plural 'cars' to speak generally, and 'car-related gift' is natural. 'Send them a car order' is unclear; use 'give' for gifts.

× No I'm not scared at hand things so I will not give the gifts by myself, I just do by the the things.

✓ No, I'm not good at making things by hand, so I don't give gifts myself; I ask others to do them.

Incorrect expression: 'scared at hand things' is wrong; likely means 'not good at making things by hand'. Use 'by myself' correctly and clarify that they ask others to make gifts. Remove duplicate 'the' and fix verbs.

× But my friends send me a handmade gift soon during my birthday.

✓ But my friends gave me a handmade gift on my birthday.

Tense and time adverb: 'soon during my birthday' is incorrect. If event already happened use past simple 'gave' and 'on my birthday'. If future, use 'will give me' and 'for my birthday'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question; no change needed. 'Better' correctly modifies 'express' in comparative sense.

× I think this is not a good thing. I think you umm, people say my me a gift that is still hurt.

✓ I don't think price matters. People can still hurt my feelings even if they give me a gift.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical: 'people say my me a gift that is still hurt' is incorrect pronoun and verb usage. Rephrase to express that gifts don't prevent emotional hurt. Use 'hurt my feelings' and correct word order.

× So I think I don't consider about the price of the gifts. I just to uh, no, they remember some things and send me a little gift.

✓ So I don't consider the price of gifts. I just appreciate when people remember things and give me a small gift.

Incorrect verb phrases: 'consider about' should be 'consider' (no preposition). 'send me a little gift' -> 'give me a small gift'. Remove filler words and use present simple for general statements.