礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity, be more concise and natural, and correct word choice and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, follow with one or two specific supporting details, and avoid fragmented sentences. Use past tense consistently when telling a story and choose correct pronouns and verbs.

範例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because I love seeing people's reactions. I usually pick thoughtful presents for birthdays or special occasions; for instance, in high school I made a handmade photo album for my best friend, and she was so touched that it made all my effort worthwhile.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant but can be tightened to sound more natural. Use one cohesive supporting detail with a linking phrase and correct minor punctuation issues. Avoid redundant phrases like "to celebrate and ensure appreciation."

範例: I usually give gifts on birthdays and other special occasions like anniversaries or graduations. For example, last year I gave my mother a bouquet for her birthday, and seeing her pleased made the gesture feel very rewarding.

建議: Good structure and content. Improve fluency by combining sentences with linking words and correcting minor grammar (singular/plural and article use). Be slightly more specific with examples of preferences or hobby-related gifts.

範例: I first consider the recipient's preferences or hobbies so the gift will be useful or meaningful. I also think about my budget, avoiding overly expensive presents that could make someone uncomfortable, and instead choose something appropriate and thoughtful, such as a book by their favorite author or a hobby-related kit.

建議: This answer repeats an earlier example and contains grammar and coherence problems. Keep responses concise (max 5 sentences), avoid repetition, and correct pronouns/phrasing. Combine fragments into full sentences and clearly describe the reaction and why it mattered.

範例: Yes, I made a handmade photo album for my best friend's birthday. It took me a long time to put together, and when she opened it she was surprised and very happy, which made all the effort worthwhile.

建議: Strong, clear answer with good reasoning and vocabulary. To improve further, add a brief linking phrase and a concise example to support the opinion and make it slightly more personal.

範例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because price doesn't guarantee thoughtfulness. For example, a handmade card or a favorite book chosen for someone's interests can be far more meaningful than an expensive but impersonal item.

× I love seeing peoples reactions.

✓ I love seeing people's reactions.

The noun 'people' is plural and the possessive form requires an apostrophe: 'people's reactions.' Without the apostrophe it is incorrect. Use the possessive form to show reactions belong to people.

× For example, when I was in high school I gave a handmade photo album to my best friend and they write it back on her face.

✓ For example, when I was in high school I gave a handmade photo album to my best friend and she wrote it on her face.

The sentence mixes past and present forms and uses an incorrect pronoun. The action is in the past so use past tense 'wrote.' Also the correct pronoun for 'best friend' previously described as 'her' should be 'she' as subject. However, the phrase 'wrote it on her face' is awkward; likely intended meaning is 'wrote a message on it and she smiled' but here we correct only tense/pronoun per instructions.

× Made my effort worth.

✓ That made my effort worth it.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Adding 'That' and the object 'it' creates a complete clause: 'That made my effort worth it.' Use full clause to express cause-effect.

× For example, last year I gave my mother a bouquet of flowers for her birthday and seeing how pleased she was, made my effort feel rewarding.

✓ For example, last year I gave my mother a bouquet of flowers for her birthday, and seeing how pleased she was made my effort feel rewarding.

The comma after the subordinate phrase is misplaced; the clause 'seeing how pleased she was' is a participial phrase that should not be separated by a comma from the main clause's verb 'made.' Removing the comma after the phrase or repositioning maintains correct sentence flow.

× I avoid overly expensive present because they might make the recipient feel uncomfortable, so I choose something appropriate and considerate instead.

✓ I avoid overly expensive presents because they might make the recipient feel uncomfortable, so I choose something appropriate and considerate instead.

The singular noun 'present' conflicts with plural pronoun 'they.' Use plural 'presents' to match 'they' or change 'they' to 'it.' Plural is appropriate here because speaking generally about presents.

× Making it took me a lot of time, but seeing her reaction she was surprised.

✓ Making it took me a lot of time, and when I saw her reaction she was surprised.

The original combines clauses awkwardly and lacks correct temporal connector. Use 'when I saw her reaction' to indicate time and keep past tense 'was surprised.' This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency.

× So surprised and happy.

✓ She was so surprised and happy.

This fragment lacks a subject and finite verb. Add 'She was' to make a complete sentence describing her state.

× Made all their food worthwhile.

✓ It made all my effort worthwhile.

The original is unclear and uses 'their food' which does not fit context. The speaker earlier referred to 'effort,' so the correct phrase is 'made all my effort worthwhile.' Also 'their' is inconsistent with speaker's perspective.