礼物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and incomplete endings, and add one specific detail or result. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish the story (what happened after she received it?).

範例: I'm not very good at choosing gifts. For example, for our one-year anniversary last month I bought my girlfriend a purse, but it turned out she already had a similar one, so she didn't use it. Since then, I've started asking subtle questions about what people need before I buy anything.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler words, and add a specific example and linking word to make the response coherent. Mention frequency or typical timing to enrich content.

範例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and festivals. For example, if a friend has a birthday next month, I often buy a small personalized present and send it a few days before the day so they receive it on time.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence and list 2–3 clear factors using linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide a concrete example tying budget and recipient preferences together.

範例: I consider three main things: my budget, the recipient's tastes, and the gift's usefulness. For instance, if I have a limited budget, I choose a practical but thoughtful item—such as a nice notebook—only if I know the person likes writing.

建議: Start with a clear affirmative sentence, remove tense errors, and be specific about what you made and why. Use linking words to explain context and result.

範例: Yes. In high school I made a handwritten thank-you card for a friend who helped me prepare for important exams. Because he supported me a lot, I wrote a personal message and gave it to him on his birthday; he really appreciated the gesture.

建議: Give a clear stance in one sentence, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Remove fillers and be concise. Use linking words such as 'however' and 'for example' appropriately.

範例: I think it depends on the person rather than the price. For example, my girlfriend appreciates luxury items like an LV purse, but many friends prefer thoughtful, inexpensive gifts that match their interests, so a meaningful present can matter more than an expensive one.

× No, I'm not good at giving good gifts to my friends or loved ones.

✓ No, I'm not good at giving good gifts to my friends or loved ones.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable in present tense; no change needed. It uses present continuous 'I'm not good at giving' to describe a general ability, which is fine. Suggestion: optionally simplify to 'I'm not good at choosing gifts.' for clarity.

× I remember last month, it was my uh, one year anniversary with dating with my girlfriend UH and I gave her a purse as a present.

✓ I remember last month it was my one-year anniversary of dating my girlfriend, and I gave her a purse as a present.

Errors: redundant 'with dating with', incorrect preposition 'with' after 'anniversary', and punctuation. Correction uses past tense 'gave' correctly, replaces 'one year anniversary with dating with' with 'one-year anniversary of dating'. Suggestion: hyphenate 'one-year' and remove filler words for clarity.

× However, when she received the purse, she didn't.

✓ However, when she received the purse, she didn't like it.

The sentence ends with an incomplete clause 'she didn't.' It needs an object or verb phrase to complete the meaning. 'Didn't' is an auxiliary and requires a main verb; adding 'like it' completes the thought. Suggestion: always follow negation 'didn't' with the main verb.

× I will usually send my gift to my friends or my loved ones, depends on the special occasions of the day.

✓ I usually send gifts to my friends or loved ones; it depends on the special occasion.

Errors: unnecessary future 'will' for habitual action, wrong singular/plural agreement 'depends on the special occasions of the day', and awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'usually send' for habitual actions, plural 'gifts', and 'depends on the special occasion' or 'depends on the occasion.' Suggestion: use simple present for routines and match singular/plural.

× For example, if my friend is uh, having a birthday next month, I will uh, express my gratitude for her by sending her a small gift.

✓ For example, if my friend has a birthday next month, I will express my gratitude to her by sending a small gift.

Use present simple 'has' in conditional time clause ('if' + future time uses present simple). 'Express my gratitude for her' is incorrect preposition; use 'to her'. Also 'send her a small gift' can be 'sending a small gift' — both acceptable. Suggestion: use 'has a birthday' and 'express my gratitude to her.'

× There are several things that I would consider and the major considering factor would be the budget that I have to ensure that the gift is within my budget and also I have to see if the receiver of the gifts is, uh, like it's actually like the gift that I send.

✓ There are several things I would consider, and the main factor would be my budget to ensure the gift is within it. I also have to check if the recipient actually likes the gift I send.

Issues: wordiness, awkward phrasing, incorrect noun forms 'receiver of the gifts', and tense/structure. 'Recipient' is a better noun than 'receiver'; 'likes' (present tense) fits general statements. Simplify and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use concise noun phrases and present simple for general truths.

× Yes I did, but I remember when I was in high school, I have sent a thank you card to my friend who helped me a lot in the public examinations and I want to express my gratitude to him.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember when I was in high school I sent a thank-you card to a friend who helped me a lot with the public examinations because I wanted to express my gratitude to him.

Mixed tenses: 'I remember' (present) can be followed by simple past 'I sent' rather than present perfect 'I have sent'. 'Thank-you' as compound adjective/noun is hyphenated. 'Want' should be past 'wanted' to match 'sent'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when recounting past events.

× So I sent a birthday thank you card and a presence.

✓ So I sent a thank-you card and a present for his birthday.

Errors: 'birthday thank you card' is awkward order and 'presence' is incorrect word choice for 'present'. Rearranged to 'thank-you card and a present for his birthday.' Suggestion: use 'present' for gift and place 'thank-you' before 'card.'

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

The question as written is acceptable. 'Better' is the correct comparative adverb with 'express'. No change needed. Suggestion: possibly rephrase to 'Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?' for emphasis.

× Actually I in my opinion, I believe it depends on the person who received gifts.

✓ Actually, in my opinion, I believe it depends on the person who receives the gifts.

Redundancy ('Actually I in my opinion, I believe') and tense/agreement: 'received' should be present simple 'receives' for general statements. Remove extra pronouns and use present simple for habitual truth. Suggestion: simplify to 'In my opinion, it depends on the person who receives the gift.'

× If it's umm, my girlfriend for example, she would like to receive some luxury purse, uh, from a brand name store like uh, LV.

✓ If it's my girlfriend, for example, she would like to receive a luxury purse from a brand-name store like LV.

Article and noun number: use 'a luxury purse' not 'some luxury purse'. 'Brand-name' should be hyphenated when used as adjective. Remove fillers. Suggestion: use 'a' for singular countable nouns and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× However, uh, not everyone uh, likes it.

✓ However, not everyone likes that.

'Likes it' is slightly vague; 'likes that' or 'likes it' both okay. Minor filler 'uh' removed. No major tense issue. Suggestion: use 'that' to refer to the idea of expensive gifts or keep 'likes it' if referring to the purse.