网站— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the types of sites, then add one brief reason using a linking word. Avoid hesitations and filler words.

範例: I usually visit short-video platforms such as Bilibili and TikTok because they offer quick tutorials and entertaining clips. For example, I watch short science explainers to learn new concepts quickly.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with specific details and linking words. Avoid informal fragments and contractions like 'Cause' at the start of a sentence.

範例: My favourite website is Bilibili because it hosts a wide range of videos, especially about science and music. For instance, I often watch detailed lecture clips and music performances that help me both study and relax.

建議: Organise your reply: state the change, then give one or two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar errors (e.g. double negatives).

範例: Yes, they have changed a lot. Compared with the old, clunky layouts I saw as a child, modern sites have cleaner designs and faster loading times, so they are much easier to use.

建議: Answer directly and use linking words to explain reasons. Be specific about what makes those sites popular and avoid repetition and filler sounds.

範例: Short-video platforms are very popular in my country because they are easy to use and offer a lot of entertaining and informative content. As technology improves, more people prefer watching short clips instead of long articles.

建議: Give a clear preference and support it with coherent reasons. Use linking words and avoid unclear phrases and hesitations.

範例: I prefer getting information from websites because they are up-to-date and searchable. However, I also use books for in-depth study when I need reliable, detailed explanations.

建議: State your opinion clearly and give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition and hesitations.

範例: I wouldn't like to have my own website because I don't need one for my current activities. Also, I already spend a lot of time using other sites, so maintaining a website would take too much time.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence saying what you learned, then give specific examples and use linking words. Avoid vague words like 'stuff' and unclear vocabulary ('severity').

範例: As a science student, I learned practical techniques and theory from online videos and tutorials. For example, I watched lab demonstration videos that helped me understand experimental procedures and exam preparation tips that improved my study efficiency.

× Well, I have to admit that I prefer to visit some websites like. Bilibili platform, Tiktok and some short video web tabs.

✓ Well, I have to admit that I prefer to visit websites like the Bilibili platform, TikTok, and some short-video sites.

The original sentence misuses the article and has awkward noun phrases. 'Bilibili platform' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific platform. 'Tiktok' should be 'TikTok' (capitalization) and 'short video web tabs' is unnatural; use 'short-video sites' or 'short-video platforms'. Also remove the unnecessary word 'some' before 'websites like' to be more natural. Improve parallelism in the list. Suggestion: Use 'the' with named platforms when specific and use consistent noun forms for list items.

× Well, my favorite website is Bilibili Count. 'Cause it can provide some great videos about science, music and anything.

✓ Well, my favorite website is my Bilibili account because it provides great videos about science, music, and many other topics.

'Bilibili Count' appears to be a misspelling; likely 'Bilibili account'. Starting a sentence with ''Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Can provide some great videos' is wordy; use 'provides great videos' for present habitual action. 'Anything' is vague; replace with 'many other topics' for clarity. Suggestion: Use precise nouns ('account'), avoid informal contractions in formal responses, and prefer simple present for habitual facts.

× Yeah, absolutely. You know, when I was a child, I visited some, I found that the bottom, it's so old, was so old and the design was not no good. But now it's, it's pretty good.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. When I was a child, I found that the site looked very old and the design was not good, but now it is much better.

The original contains fragmented and redundant phrases ('visited some, I found that the bottom, it's so old, was so old') and a double negative ('not no good'). Simplify and combine into a coherent sentence. Use 'site' or 'website' rather than 'bottom'. Use 'was not good' or 'was poor' instead of 'not no good'. Use 'now it is much better' to show change. Suggestion: Remove filler words, avoid double negatives, and combine related ideas into a single clear sentence.

× Well, I would say maybe some websites about short short videos. Is popular in in my country. 'Cause with the rapid development of technology, it's necessary for us to, umm, release some videos.

✓ Well, I would say websites with short videos are popular in my country because, with the rapid development of technology, people often upload short videos.

The original has repetition ('short short'), sentence fragments ('Is popular in in my country'), and awkward phrasing ('it's necessary for us to... release some videos'). Combine fragments into a complete sentence, fix repeated words and preposition duplication, and clarify the reason using natural phrasing. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, ensure subject and verb are present, and express causation clearly ('because' + reason).

× Oh absolutely 100% because reading what gets some will get some, uh, information is a great way to new and umm no no no.

✓ Oh, absolutely. Reading is a great way to get information and learn new things.

The original is disfluent and contains filler words and unclear structure ('reading what gets some will get some... to new'). Simplify to a clear statement: use 'Reading is a great way to get information and learn new things.' Maintain simple present for general preference. Suggestion: Remove fillers, avoid repeating phrases, and use clear verbs ('get', 'learn').

× To be honest, not really, umm, 'cause I think it's not necessary for me to have it and I often, umm, take plenty of my time to visit, uh, other websites, so it's not necessary.

✓ To be honest, not really, because I don't think it is necessary for me to have one, and I often spend a lot of my time visiting other websites, so I don't need one.

Use consistent and standard present tense forms: 'I don't think' instead of 'I think it's not'. 'Take plenty of my time to visit' is unnatural; use 'spend a lot of my time visiting'. Avoid repeating conclusions ('so it's not necessary'). Suggestion: Use 'don't' for negation, prefer 'spend time' for activities, and eliminate repetitive phrases.

× You know, I'm a university student and my major is about science, so I often visit some website to watch some umm videos about my major, to practice my academic knowledge, severity, stuff like that.

✓ You know, I'm a university student majoring in science, so I often visit websites to watch videos about my field to practice my academic knowledge and skills.

Use the correct '-ing' form 'majoring in' for present studies. 'Visit some website' should be plural or 'visit a website'; 'watch videos about my major' is better as 'watch videos about my field'. 'Severity' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'theory' or 'skills'—here 'skills' fits. Remove fillers and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'majoring in' to describe current study, choose appropriate nouns ('field', 'skills'), and avoid filler words.