手表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and correct small grammar (e.g., 'when I am cooking', 'when I need to get up').

範例: Yes, I do. I often wear a watch because it’s the easiest way to check the time when I’m cooking or preparing for meetings. Also, a watch helps me wake up on time for appointments.

建議: Provide a clear past-tense response with one or two specific details and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'and' or 'so' to connect ideas and name a detail (brand, style, or why you liked it).

範例: Yes, I received a watch as a gift ten years ago from a close friend. It was a popular brand and a classic design, so I still wear it on special occasions because I like its simple, elegant look.

建議: Give a focused opinion with clear reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid repetitions. Use correct phrases ('businesspeople' or 'entrepreneurs') and explain how an expensive watch affects impressions.

範例: I think some businesspeople wear expensive watches because they want to create a professional impression. For example, a high-quality watch can signal success and reliability during negotiations, which may help build trust with clients.

建議: Answer directly with a clear stance then support it with one or two specific situations. Use linking words (for example, when, because) and fix grammar ('you are not allowed to carry your phone').

範例: It depends on the occasion. For example, at formal events or in workplaces where phones are not allowed, wearing a watch is important because it lets you check the time discreetly and stay punctual.

× I like, uh, wear a watch because, umm, it's easy to uh, check the time, uh, especially when I cooking or I uh, need to get get up to attend the meeting, uh, and I think watch like.

✓ I like wearing a watch because it's easy to check the time, especially when I'm cooking or when I need to get up to attend a meeting, and I think watches are useful.

Use gerund after 'like' (like + -ing). Also need auxiliary 'am' for present continuous (I'm cooking). Use plural 'watches' when speaking generally. Remove duplicated word 'get'. Ensure articles: 'a meeting'. Improve sentence fluency by adding 'when' before clauses.

× Yes, I have, uh, ten years ago one of my friend friends sent me a beautiful watch as a gift.

✓ Yes, ten years ago one of my friends sent me a beautiful watch as a gift.

When specifying a past time expression ('ten years ago') use simple past, not present perfect. Use plural 'friends' for 'one of my friends'. Remove unnecessary 'I have'. Place time expression appropriately.

× Uh, I still remember the brand is uh, very, uh, popular. Uh, it's very, uh, famous.

✓ I still remember the brand; it was very popular and well known.

Use appropriate tense and pronoun: refer to 'the brand' with 'it'. 'Popular' and 'famous' are redundant; combine with 'well known'. Match past tense 'was' with past context.

× I think some entrepreneur entrepreneurs, uh, need to wear expensive, which is because they need to negotiate, uh, uh, in business under a good watch, which can show their, uh, strength show, uh, they can do the business.

✓ I think some entrepreneurs need to wear expensive watches because when negotiating in business a good watch can show their strength and ability to do business.

Use plural 'entrepreneurs'. 'Wear expensive' is incomplete; use noun 'watches'. Remove awkward 'which is because' and 'under a good watch'. Streamline clause order. Use 'ability' instead of unclear phrasing.

× I think that depends on what kind of occasion, because sometimes you don't allow to go with your phone so you need and you need to check the time you need to wear a watch.

✓ I think that depends on the occasion, because sometimes you are not allowed to take your phone, so you need to wear a watch to check the time.

Use passive 'are not allowed' for permission. 'What kind of occasion' is wordy; 'the occasion' is clearer. Remove repeated phrase 'you need and you need'. Use infinitive 'to check' for purpose.