艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. “providing emotional values”), and add one specific detail about how drawing helps you using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I do. I often draw my favourite animation characters on my iPad because it helps me relax and stay creative. For example, sketching a character after a long day calms me down and improves my mood.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer names; avoid fragmented or incorrect artist names. Begin with a direct answer, then briefly describe one memorable thing you saw, using a linking word to connect ideas. Keep sentences grammatically correct and specific.

範例: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries. Last summer I visited the Shanghai Art Museum, and I admired several oil paintings with rich colours, especially a landscape that used bold brushstrokes. The exhibition gave me new ideas for my own drawings.

建議: Avoid vague or incorrect expressions (e.g. “art is an human nature”). Start with a concise opinion, then give a specific reason and an example using linking words like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, definitely. I want to learn more because studying art helps me understand different cultures and cope with stress. For example, visiting exhibitions or taking art history classes has helped me relax and see new perspectives.

建議: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific detail about what you learned and how it made you feel, using linking words like “and” or “so.”

範例: Yes, I did. Since kindergarten I attended a traditional pencil drawing class where I practised realistic sketching, and it was challenging. However, when I finished a detailed portrait, I felt a strong sense of accomplishment and pride.

× I usually draw some pictures about my favorite animation characters on my iPad.

✓ I usually draw some pictures of my favorite animated characters on my iPad.

Use 'draw pictures of' not 'about' to describe the subject of the drawing; also use the adjective 'animated' (not the noun 'animation') to modify 'characters'. Suggestion: say 'draw pictures of' and use correct adjective forms.

× It is really providing emotional values.

✓ It really provides emotional value.

The original uses a progressive form and plural 'values' incorrectly. Use simple present 'provides' to state a general truth. 'Emotional value' is the correct uncountable noun phrase. Suggestion: use simple present and uncountable noun 'value'.

× Yes, in the last summer vacation I went to Shanghai Art Museum and admire some masterpieces by famous artists such as Bengal and. Mila.

✓ Yes, last summer vacation I went to the Shanghai Art Museum and admired some masterpieces by famous artists such as Bengal and Mila.

Mixes past and present verbs: use past tense 'admired' to match 'went'. Remove the extra period after 'and' and include 'the' before 'Shanghai Art Museum' because it's a specific institution. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same past tense and fix punctuation and article.

× Yes, in the last summer vacation I went to Shanghai Art Museum and admire some masterpieces by famous artists such as Bengal and. Mila.

✓ Yes, last summer vacation I went to the Shanghai Art Museum and admired some masterpieces by famous artists such as Bengal and Mila.

When naming a specific museum, use the definite article 'the'. Also correct punctuation (remove stray period) and ensure tense consistency. Suggestion: use 'the Shanghai Art Museum'.

× Absolutely yes, because art is an human nature.

✓ Absolutely yes, because art is human nature.

Do not use the indefinite article 'an' before an uncountable noun phrase 'human nature'. Also 'art is human nature' is more natural than 'an human nature'. Suggestion: drop 'an' and keep 'human nature'.

× When we have suffered from our stressful environment, from work and study, admiring art pieces may be a good way to cheer ourselves.

✓ When we suffer from a stressful environment, from work or study, admiring works of art may be a good way to cheer ourselves up.

Use simple present 'suffer' for general situation; 'a stressful environment' is more natural; use 'or' to list alternatives and 'works of art' is a common phrase. Add particle 'up' with 'cheer' (cheer up). Suggestion: use simple present for general statements and natural collocations.

× Yes, since kindergarten I attend a old school course about realistic drawing by pencil.

✓ Yes, since kindergarten I have attended an old school course on realistic pencil drawing.

Use present perfect 'have attended' with 'since' to show an action continuing or started in the past; use 'an' before 'old school course'; 'on' is the correct preposition for course topics; use 'pencil drawing' as a noun phrase. Suggestion: use present perfect with 'since' and correct articles and prepositions.

× Yes, since kindergarten I attend a old school course about realistic drawing by pencil.

✓ Yes, since kindergarten I have attended an old-school course on realistic pencil drawing.

Missing or incorrect article: use 'an' before 'old-school course'. Also hyphenate 'old-school' when used as an adjective. Suggestion: include 'an' and hyphenate adjectives.

× It is really hard, but when I draw a picture of an object or a person, it gave me a great sense of accomplishment.

✓ It was really hard, but when I drew a picture of an object or a person, it gave me a great sense of accomplishment.

Tense mismatch: the speaker refers to past classes, so use past tense 'was' and 'drew'. 'Gave' is correctly past. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when describing past experiences.

× Yes, since kindergarten I attend a old school course about realistic drawing by pencil.

✓ Yes, since kindergarten I have attended an old-school course on realistic pencil drawing.

Using 'I attend' with 'since' requires present perfect 'have attended' for correct subject-verb agreement and time expression. Suggestion: use 'have attended' with 'since'.