梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise, start with a clear topic sentence, and use linking words to organize details. Avoid filler words and unnecessary repetition. Also give one brief specific example of a dream to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I can often remember my dreams because I have a vivid imagination and a good memory. However, most dreams fade quickly; for example, I once dreamed about living in a coastal town with a small café I owned, and that image stayed with me for days.

建議: Begin with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Remove hesitations and repeat words to sound more natural.

範例: Yes, I often share interesting or unusual dreams with close friends because I enjoy their reactions and interpretations. However, I usually keep ordinary or personal dreams to myself.

建議: State your opinion clearly in the first sentence, then support it with specific reasons or an example. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' and avoid repeating the same words.

範例: No, I don't think dreams have deep hidden meanings because they mostly reflect our recent thoughts and emotions; for example, if I worry about an exam, I often dream about being unprepared.

建議: Answer directly and briefly, then give a clear plan or example of steps you are taking. Remove hesitations and make one coherent final sentence. This shows determination and organization.

範例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true. For example, to pursue a career in design I am taking online courses and building a portfolio, and I set small monthly goals so I can make steady progress.

× And yes, because I have a vivid imagination, also quite good memory and sometimes some of my dreams stick in my mind, but most of them tend to fade away quickly.

✓ Yes, because I have a vivid imagination and quite a good memory; sometimes some of my dreams stick in my mind, but most of them fade away quickly.

The original sentence begins with an unnecessary conjunction 'And' and has incorrect coordination and punctuation. Use 'and' to connect similar ideas ('vivid imagination and quite a good memory'). Replace the comma splice with a semicolon or split into two sentences. Also simplify 'tend to fade away' to 'fade away' for conciseness. Suggestion: remove leading 'And', connect nouns properly, and fix punctuation.

× But I remember 1 dream I had before, it was about my future life and OK.

✓ But I remember one dream I had once; it was about my future life.

Use the word 'one' instead of the numeral '1' in normal writing and avoid the filler 'OK'. 'Dream' is singular so 'one dream' is correct. Combine clauses properly using a semicolon or period. Suggestion: write numbers as words in speech transcripts and remove casual fillers.

× And sometimes I find my dreams unusual or interesting.

✓ Sometimes I find my dreams unusual or interesting.

Beginning with 'And' is unnecessary. Otherwise sentence is grammatically correct. Suggestion: drop leading conjunctions in formal responses.

× I'd like to share them with my friends and I like to listen their story and, and see their reaction, uh,

✓ I'd like to share them with my friends, and I like to listen to their stories and see their reactions.

'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by the object. 'Story' should be plural 'stories' to agree with 'friends', and 'reaction' should be plural 'reactions'. Remove filler words and extra commas. Suggestion: use 'listen to' and match singular/plural forms.

× But when I have ordinary dreams, I try to keep them, uh, as secrets.

✓ But when I have ordinary dreams, I try to keep them secret.

Use 'secret' (adjective) not 'as secrets' for this meaning. The phrase 'keep them secret' is concise and idiomatic. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: prefer 'keep them secret'.

× I don't believe that dreams have some deeper significances because I think all of the dream reflects what we have been thinking about and reflects our emotions and thoughts and what we experience in our daily lives.

✓ I don't believe that dreams have any deeper significance because I think dreams reflect what we have been thinking about and reflect our emotions, thoughts, and daily experiences.

Use 'any' with negative sentences rather than 'some'. 'Significance' is uncountable here, so use singular. 'All of the dream' is incorrect; use 'dreams' or 'the dream' depending on meaning—here 'dreams' matches subject. Remove repetitive 'reflects' mismatch: ensure subject-verb agreement ('dreams reflect'). Use plural nouns and parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'any deeper significance' and keep verbs parallel.

× Uh yes umm actually dreams about my personal life or a career related dreams? Umm.

✓ Yes. Do you mean dreams about my personal life or career-related dreams?

Original is disfluent and mixes fragments. Form a proper question to clarify: 'Do you mean...?' Use hyphenated compound adjective 'career-related' and make 'dreams' plural consistently. Remove fillers. Suggestion: rephrase fragmented speech into clear question.

× I'd like to achieve my goals in the future but I know my terms will not come through over one night and I'm trying to work toward step by step.

✓ I'd like to achieve my goals in the future, but I know my dreams will not come true overnight, and I'm trying to work toward them step by step.

'Terms' is incorrect; likely 'dreams'. Use the correct verb phrase 'come true' rather than 'come through'. 'Over one night' is not idiomatic; use 'overnight'. Add object 'them' after 'toward'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'come true', 'overnight', and 'work toward them step by step'.