梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), use plural/singular correctly, and add one short supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes. As a child I had many dreams; for example, I wanted to be a doctor, an engineer, a pilot or an actor. Because I enjoyed imagining different careers, these dreams encouraged me and motivated me to study hard.

建議: Answer directly and finish your sentence. Use linking words to explain reasons and add a brief example. Avoid vague endings and repeating ideas. Check article use (the anyone → anyone).

範例: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends because it makes me happy and is a good way to start conversations. For example, when I tell a friend about wanting to travel, they usually share their own travel plans, which leads to a longer discussion.

建議: Make the argument clearer and more concise. Use correct subject-verb agreement and link your points with words like 'because' and 'for example'. Offer a specific kind of meaning (e.g., emotional or symbolic) to be more precise.

範例: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect a person’s emotions or concerns. For example, someone who often dreams about falling may be feeling anxious about a big change in their life.

建議: Respond directly and give a concrete reason or plan. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid trailing off. Use a linking phrase to show intention (e.g., 'therefore', 'so I').

範例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. I work hard and plan my studies carefully, so I hope to achieve my goals and build a better future.

× When I was a child, I used to have various dream, uh, such as becoming a doctor, engineer, pilot, actor, and it makes me feel encourageable and I really want to become that.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have various dreams, such as becoming a doctor, an engineer, a pilot, or an actor, and it made me feel encouraged and I really wanted to become one.

Errors identified: singular/plural (use of 'dream' instead of 'dreams'), incorrect articles before professions (missing 'an'), list punctuation/coordination, tense consistency (shift from past to present), incorrect adjective 'encourageable' (wrong word form) and pronoun 'that' (should be 'one'). Suggestions: use plural for multiple items; include appropriate indefinite articles before singular countable nouns; keep past tense throughout when describing childhood; use 'encouraged' (past participle/adj) to describe feeling; use 'one' to refer back to a profession. Grammar problem types addressed: 1, 5, 22, 13, 12

× Honestly I really like to share my dreams with others because it makes me feel happy and it is also best way to start conversation with the anyone and it makes.

✓ Honestly, I really like to share my dreams with others because it makes me feel happy, and it is also the best way to start a conversation with someone.

Errors identified: missing article 'the' before 'best way' and incorrect article 'the' before 'anyone' and unnecessary word 'the anyone'; sentence fragment ending 'and it makes' incomplete; punctuation needed. Suggestions: add 'the best way' and 'a conversation'; replace 'the anyone' with 'someone' or 'anyone'; remove the unfinished clause or complete it. Keep sentence complete and concise. Grammar problem types addressed: 22, 22, 26

× Yes, I think that dreams have special meanings because every person have different dreams so there are different meaning and thought or ideas.

✓ Yes, I think that dreams have special meanings because every person has different dreams, so there are different meanings and thoughts or ideas.

Errors identified: subject-verb agreement ('every person have' should be 'has'); singular/plural inconsistency ('meaning' should be 'meanings'); awkward phrase 'thought or ideas' should be 'thoughts or ideas'. Suggestions: use singular verb with 'every person' and make nouns plural to match 'different'. Ensure parallel structure in lists. Grammar problem types addressed: 27, 1, 13

× So people have different ideas and meanings about dreams.

✓ So, people have different ideas and meanings about dreams.

Minor issue: missing comma after introductory 'So'; sentence otherwise correct. Suggestion: add comma for readability and natural pause. This is primarily a sentence structure/punctuation improvement. Grammar problem types addressed: 26

× Yes, I think every person want to make own dreams come true like this.

✓ Yes, I think every person wants to make their own dreams come true in this way.

Errors identified: subject-verb agreement ('every person want' -> 'wants'); missing possessive pronoun 'their' before 'own'; awkward phrase 'like this' better as 'in this way'. Suggestions: use singular verb with 'every person', include possessive pronoun, and choose clearer phrase for manner. Grammar problem types addressed: 27, 12

× I really want to make my dreams come true because I'm very hardworking person and I'm struggling to have a better future so.

✓ I really want to make my dreams come true because I'm a very hardworking person and I'm striving for a better future.

Errors identified: missing article 'a' before 'very hardworking person'; awkward verb 'struggling to have a better future' (use 'striving for' or 'working for'); trailing 'so' creates an incomplete clause. Suggestions: add 'a', replace 'struggling to have' with 'striving for' or 'working toward', and remove the incomplete 'so' to finish the sentence clearly. Grammar problem types addressed: 22, 26, 13