梦想— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用更自然、時態一致的句子來回答，並在主題句後提供一兩個具體細節（例如何時決定、受誰影響或做了哪些準備）。避免冗長重複，控制在最多五句內。

範例: Yes, I can. I decided when I was a child that I wanted to be an engineer, and now I am studying mechanical engineering at university. My interest grew after building model cars with my father, and I’ve taken extra courses in CAD and materials to prepare for my career.

建議: 回答時保持語法正確與連貫，使用連接詞組織要點（例如 “so”, “and then”），給出具體例子說明如何互相幫助（例如給予建議、一起參加活動）。避免結尾不完整的語句與語音猶豫詞。

範例: Yes, I often share my goals with my close friends. We meet regularly to discuss progress and give each other advice, and sometimes we study together or attend workshops to improve our skills.

建議: 把抽象想法具體化，用一致的人稱與時態，並用連接詞清楚表達因果關係（例如 “because”, “so”）。提供一個具體例子說明夢想如何幫助你克服困難。

範例: Yes, I believe they do, because having a goal motivates you to work harder and stay focused. For example, my dream of becoming an engineer helped me study late for exams and overcome problems in difficult projects.

建議: 明確說明動機並用更自然的片語表達（例如 “not only... but also...”）。提供具體例子說明你想實現夢想的原因（例如想解決哪些問題、期望獲得哪種成就感）。避免語法錯誤與模糊表述。

範例: Yes, I definitely do. I want to be a mechanical engineer not only because it offers good pay but also because I enjoy solving practical problems. For instance, designing a device that improves energy efficiency would give me a strong sense of achievement.

× I remember that I want to be an engineer when I was a child, and now my major in the university is the mechanical engineering.

✓ I remember that I wanted to be an engineer when I was a child, and now my major at university is mechanical engineering.

错误类型：现在时错误（6）。 说明：句子中“remember”用现在时表示现在记得过去的事情，后半句描述过去的愿望应使用过去时，故将“want”改为“wanted”。另外固定搭配为“major at university”且“mechanical engineering”不加定冠词。建议：回忆过去的动作或愿望时用过去时；表示专业用固定搭配并省略定冠词。

× I'm devoted to make my dream come true.

✓ I'm devoted to making my dream come true.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 形式（8）。 说明：“devoted to”后需接动名词（-ing），所以应使用“making”。建议：记住固定搭配“devoted to + doing something”。

× Yes, I shared my dreams with some with my best friends, we discussed about it and inquiry each other to reach the dreams.

✓ Yes, I shared my dreams with my best friends; we discussed them and inquired with each other about how to reach our dreams.

错误类型：过去时问题（5）及句子结构问题（26）。 说明：原句“shared my dreams with some with my best friends”语序与用词混乱，应为“shared my dreams with my best friends”。“discuss” 后通常直接跟宾语，不能用“discussed about”；“inquiry”用法错误，名词应为动词“inquire”，此处用过去时“inquired”并与介词短语搭配。建议：使用正确动词形式和固定搭配（discuss + 对象； inquire with/about）。

× Umm, that's really effective to me and.

✓ Umm, that's really effective for me.

错误类型：句子结构错误（26）。 说明：句子以“and”结尾不完整，应删除多余的“and”。固定搭配为“effective for someone”。建议：避免句子残缺，注意固定介词搭配。

× When you have a dream you want to reach, it could give me some efforts and helps me to to determinate, to do it and to cope with the difficulties.

✓ When you have a dream you want to reach, it can give you motivation and help you to decide to do it and to cope with the difficulties.

错误类型：现在时问题（6）及词汇/搭配错误（13/11）。 说明：原句中时态与人称不一致（句首是you，但后面用了“give me”）。“could give me some efforts”用法错误，英文应说“give you motivation”或“encourage you”。“helps me to to determinate”中有双写“to”且“determinate”用错（应为“determine”或更自然的“decide”）。建议：保持人称一致，使用恰当词汇（motivation, help, decide）。

× I'm devoted to be a mechanical engineer right now, not only because the high payment of this job, but also one line resolve some problems.

✓ I'm devoted to becoming a mechanical engineer right now, not only because of the high pay of this job, but also because it can solve some problems.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 形式（8）与介词/词汇使用错误（11/13）。 说明：“devoted to”后需接动名词，故用“becoming”。“because the high payment”需要“because of the high pay”或“because of the high salary”。“but also one line resolve some problems”语义与结构错误，可能想表达“it also helps to solve problems”或“it can solve some problems”，因此改为“but also because it can solve some problems”。建议：注意固定搭配和用词（devoted to + -ing；because of；pay/salary），并保持句子主语一致。

× not only because the high payment of this job, but also one line resolve some problems.

✓ not only because of the high pay of this job, but also because it can solve some problems.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用错误（13）且介词缺失（11）。 说明：“because”后表原因需要介词“of”来引出名词短语（because of the high pay）。“payment”作为名词不常与工作搭配，常用“pay”或“salary”。“one line resolve”不是正确表达，需明确主语并使用适当动词。建议：使用常见搭配“because of”与“pay/salary”，并确保动词与主语匹配。